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By : lorettcopeland

From ANON - Annie on March 20, 2005
Awwww... Lorett, I'm really glad you like reading my reviews because I enjoy writing them and I'm glad you don't think I babble! You don't either by the way! But yes, I do love you still anyway!! Hee hee!!!

Onto the review! I loved this chapter! I love how much emotion you put into your writing (think I have told you this about a million times before but I don't care! I'll say it again and again untill you get sick of it! Hee hee!) it makes me get that much more involved in the story, feeling for the characters and feeling what they feel. I think that's what keeps me hooked. But the plot keeps me hooked aswel. I can't wait to see what happens next and I always look forwards to getting your e-mail alerts in my inbox.

So the action is hotting up! I love how Draco shouted at Harry for dancing with Laurel even though there was lots of trouble around them! He's oh so protective and I love it! It's just how I'd imagine him to be with a girl he really likes. Bless him! I think Harry and Draco make a great team. They're both really strong charactered and I think they'll be a force to be reckoned with. But they're nothing compared to Laurel! Now there is a powerful witch! She's gonna be a great asset to the guys I can just see it now! I bet the guys will be shocked when they see her in action. Hee hee! I can't wait until they find that out! It's going to be amazing I can feel it!!! Hee hee!

About your yahoo community thing to theorise about the next HP book, I'm totally on board! It's a great idea and I'd love to be a part of it if you go ahead with it. Hope you update soon and that life is treating you well!

Hugs and kisses
Annie.
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From alialdeet on March 20, 2005
"Perfection." Pfft. For a genius, he's pretty stupid about the way the world works. They usually are. Anyway, psycho Voldemort. Good job. Look! I just registered here! I'm going to upload stories, sometime, too. That way, when ff.net does the same horrible thing to me as it did to you, I'll have a bit of a backup plan over here! It's nice over here. I like the way you can see how many hits you get. Damn you get a lot for It Had To Be You. It's funny that there are a billion hits and like twelve reviews for some people. I understand it though. I'm like that myself. I review one story out of five that I read, and that's my IMPROVED ratio, too! I've gotten a lot better lately. And the reviews have gotten better too. I mean, damn. Look at this review. It's complete nonsense, but it's long, right? You've said you like the rambly ones so I feel perfectly free to ramble when I choose. Like now. Geez. You know that comment about wanting my Snape story to be a Draco story? It has given me IDEAS! Nothing to get your hopes up, but exciting ideas. Do you actually like writing about Voldemort? When I reviewed this chapter before, I said it was brave of you to deal with him. It is. He's such a pain in the ass because he's really not all that human. Hmm...
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From on March 19, 2005
Wow. Really, wow. What a cliffhanger to leave us with, lol. Even the 2nd time around, wow. I love this chapter (23) and I can't wait for more! (By the way, I REALLY like how you described that kiss between Draco and Laurel! *Grin*) Yep, I just love everything about it, lol!

Yes, the pace picks up quite a bit right about now....all the Death Eater action can do that though, haha.

Anywho, keep up the good work!! I can't wait for more! *waiting expectantly*
You get a *star* for such great work! (*grin*)
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From ANON - ali aka ginny-rules-the-world on March 19, 2005
YAY COOKIES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i fixed my chapter. AGAIN! YAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!!!! srz. a little happy. no VERY happy! EEEEEEEEEE! my bf gave me a heart neckless and said "now u'll have my heart with u where ever u go" it was soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo nice! the nicest thing anybodys ever done for me! EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE sooooooooooooooooooo... IM HAPPY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YAY HAPPINESS! luv u! buh bye
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From ANON - Annie on March 18, 2005
Hiya Lorett!

I'm glad that you enjoy the reviews! It makes me enjoy writing them that much more!! Hee hee!!! But as I promised this review will be longer than the last. At least I'll try! I usually start babbling and making no sense after a while!!!

Anyway, the last two chapters were just superb dahhling! (Went all posh there!) I love this story, it's so great! I keep getting so involved. Like when you were writing the meeting between Laurel and Draco it gave me butterflies in my stomach like it was me who was there. I'm such a terrible romantic and I can't help but melt at anything remotely fluffy and lovey dovey. The way you write satisfies my romantic side! I'm waiting for a man to whisk me off my feet in some crazy romantic way! I'd love that soooooo much! I think Laurel and Draco are a perfect match. They have such similar personalities. I mean Laurel gave as much as she got in all of the flirty banter! Good on her! If it was me meeting Draco I would have just gone all wobbly and would have tried to think of something clever to say but instead I'd come out with something stupid!!

And Harry seems so dreamy too! I see him as giving out a very energetic vibe and that would intice me to no end! The trio of guys in this story (Draco, Harry and Ron) are all too young for me too (I'm 19) but it is nice to dream! Although I have met a few guys who have been similar to them. One of my ex's was a lot like Draco except that he was just too bad for my liking (I won't go into the whole story!).

I'm sensing a great deal of action coming up and I can't wait! Hope you post again soon because I can't get enough of this story!!!
Hope you're ok and life is treating you well,
Hugs for you!!!

Annie.
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From ANON - trixrstrange on March 18, 2005
Definatley refreshing to see someone who's kept Malfoy (Draconius that is) within character and making him good at the same time. A person might actually love that insufferable sod. Anyways, great story and can't wait to read more, though will have to have Jeanette remind me when there's a new chapter as my computers are broken *sniffs and plays taps*

Love, Hugs and Bludgers,

Trix ^_^

PS: Keep up the brilliant work and bring on teh smut!
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From ANON - RahNee on March 17, 2005
Chapter 22...oh yeah, baby, we're talking hot, hot, hot! First we start out with Lorett's comment about a Draco/Harry/Ron sandwich...yum. I slipped away for an entire minute (at least) into my little Lorett fantasy world where I entered a Quizno's and ordered a Draco/Harry/Ron sandwich, extra hot, and there they were, dancing with me and... did I mention that in my little Lorett fantasy world there is a black Vera Wang dress hanging in my closet? I love this little place in my mind that you so wonderfully take me, Lorett dear! But there I go digressing AGAIN and we haven't even gotten into the story yet, for pete's sake!

Short version: Loved the chappie!

Long version: The list of favorite lines and moments is long. Draco not being able to say "friends" in the same sentence as Harry & Ron. Later when he says "friends is a strong word" and Harry echoes it later. "Red-headed-slug-belcher" had me rolling on the floor! Laurel's nice recovery with the french. When Draco stops in the middle of a huge rant at Harry and says "you think she's beautiful?" And the entire scene when Laurel and Harry dance! Laurel is nervous around Harry because he makes her heart go pitter patter and her knees go weak, too. He's a dangerously hot boy and she knows it. It's like she recognizes he could be a hindrance in her loyalty to Draco. (It's almost like she feels like she's "cheating" on Draco)

I must pause and say I am sooo jealous of Laurel, getting to dance with Draco and Harry in one night! You write Harry as well (and deliciously) as you write Draco. Now I want them both!!! "She couldn't deny it was definitely nice being in Harry's arms" Don't try to deny it, honey, just go with that feeling! I know I that's what I'd do...sigh. Draco and Harry just ooze dangerously, deliciously, sexy hotness! (And now, after your comments about Ron in future chappies, I can't wait to see you make HIM into the charmer I can imagine he will be) Suddenly I'm not as tired as I felt a few minutes ago! Whew! Is it getting hot in here? See what happens when you start talking about sex and Draco in your shout-outs? Wicked thoughts start dancing through my mind...taking me to that little world where there are hot boy sandwiches and little black dresses and ....

there will be a small pause while I take a cold shower

Hee hee. See what happens when you combine sleep deprivation with Lorett's fabulous 2-fur updates with gorgeous characters and sandwiches? You get a really silly RahNee! Thanks for a fun little evening, Lorett! In keeping with my recently adopted tenets of IFOLFA, I won't even demand that you update ASAP! *glances around furtively and then whispers* But I really hope you do update soon!

Hugs and smooches to you!

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From ANON - RahNee on March 17, 2005
Chapter 21: Well, I really liked the banter between Laurel and Draco about the dragons! And when she says he's amazingly beautiful and he replies, "I do get that reaction quite alot from women." You don't know the half of it, Draco dear!!! Many many women are out there in cyberspace right now drooling over you, fighting over you (like Lorett and her reviewers) and dying to dance with you at SPELLS while dressed in Vera Wang (like me, for instance!) Heh heh heh...*pauses for approriate mental imagery to take place...make that INappropriate mental imagery...whoops!*

Laurel is such a flirt, yet not nauseatingly so. "Not until tonight" was such a flirtatious response, yet so hot! My tummy did flip-flops. Draco IS in serious trouble, isn't he?!!!

Well, I'm glad you didn't make me wait too long for this chapter, hee hee! I'm working on that patience problem...going to my first meeting of Impatient Fans of Lorett's Fanfics Anonymous soon. (IFOLFA, almost sounds like alfalfa...whew...getting a little punchy...low on sleep today) My motto: "Patience is a virtue...and I just don't have time to aquire it!"

Love you mucho, and sooooo very glad you did another 2-fur. I'm off to take advantage of your fabulous 2-for-1 KEYS special by reading chapter 22. TTFN! *runs off, stops suddenly, runs back and hugs you. Then runs off to 22*
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From ANON - Dracosgal on March 17, 2005
I forget how much I ADORE this part of the story. The best is yet to come! Just like the Frank Sinatra song. My most favorite part is next and then the BEST part, the bathroom! YAY! Brilliant. I LOVE THIS STORY!
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From ANON - mrs_accio_firebolt on March 17, 2005
Hi, lady.
I don't know how I managed to be unable to review this Harry chapter yesterday.
I find it rather important that you named a whole chapter "Harry" when the only thing Harry does in his chapter is ...TALK TO LAUREL!
I don't think I get a very good feeling about it. IF Harry likes Laurel. Draco likes Laurel, Laurel likes Draco and Harry ... it seems like a love triangle to me. One of this guys is going to suffer. I can't bear to see them suffer. Just now, I'm reading a D/Hr fiction which turned out to be a H/Hr, R/Hr and D/Hr fiction... and she's already killed one of them. DON'T YOU DARE, LADY!!!!!!!!!! LOL
I must say, however that I looooved your Harry. Most of the other fanfictions portray him as too good to be true. So loyal, so tender and sometimes, so stupid. This Harry goes for what he wants. Draco or no Draco, he is dancing with Laurel, pressing her against him.... Damn Laurel. She's just getting all the fun.
And one question: why would Laurel be afraid of being alone with Harry Potter and look for Draco? I mean soul-seeing or not, Harry Potter IS Harry Potter, the GOOD guy, the saviour of the world. And Draco, come on. She knows the Malfoy reputation... Why would she look for him while being worried of Harry? I love Draco, but I just don't think his soul is purer than Harry's. He may be a good man, but has at least seen horrible things, he can't be that pure. And for that, I like him even more. But he's a character. And all in all, as Jean (X-Men) said: we like the bad guys, but keep the good guys (or something like that).
Just for the meeting, I mean. First time she sees them both, I would have chosen Harry to trust, instead of Mr. Bad Food.
And notice I said FIRST TIME.
That was actually me in the beginning. I liked Harry a lot more. But now, ladies, you've converted me.....and I can't live without sexy, white-blonde haired, chisel stomached (are these even words?????) Draco Malfoy.
See ya.
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From ANON - Alison on March 16, 2005
Oh, fun fun fun fun fun fun fun fun!!!!!! These little nightclub scenes are so....so.....yummy. Treats to read, honestly. And now you've completely got me twisted up in a knot, waiting for our handsome boy to come back and beat up Potter's sexy face. Wow. Guys fighting over a girl?? Hot. Time to go take a nice COLD shower. Man, why couldn't I be in the story (starring in Laurel's role, of course)? Jeez. Talk about bad luck.

Right. Because I have limited time at the computer screen (grr...it ALWAYS seems to happen, doesn't it?), I'll cut straight to my suggestion of the evening. Dum dum dum.....DUM!!!! One thing I noticed a lot in your writing is the repeated use of three dots (you know, like this: ...). I know it's your style (I've seen it before, of course, just not QUITE as many times in a row), and personally think that you might want to cut down on its usage just a wee bit. Just a bit. To me, I find text stronger when it's BAM BAM BAM, not BAM....bam....BAM. It gives me this sort of feeling that they're trains of thoughts that never quite find an ending point. Sometimes, when you use it, it's great. You give the impression that it's unfinished business, sort of insinuate a premonition, which is nice. But for some reason, especially in Chap the First of the two-fur, I seemed to find it a little repetitive. Like, Laurel shouldn't find him hot....persay....but she finds him sexy. Her hand fits perfectly in his. A fact, an idea, not a general gesture of a thought. Hm. I dunno. Maybe it's just tonight. But if you sort of see what I'm saying - and look carefully at some of what you wrote - you might be able to cut out a few of them. You don't need to eliminate more than a couple, in all honesty.

You know what I think is brilliant about your writing? What keeps me so hooked? I loooooove the way you keep it serious and dark even when the moments are lighter. I didn't even know it was possible. Serious really IS the right word (not dark so much, I guess, though you're story can definitely lean in that direction). You keep it exciting, even when it's earnest. Awesome. Really inspiring.

Hm. I love you, you know. And this story. But most of all you. So basically all that's left to say is that I'm SO glad you didn't wash your hands of the whole business. I would have KILLED you (meant to tell you that last time). And then would have loved you back into being. Kisses, darling. AND A BIG HUG! Now, POST. (Ooh, chappie of Puppet Master is coming on Fri! Yay!! Nervous about posting though. I'm stuck on the next chapter. Sigh. Don't want to make it cliche, and with this plot twist, it will be easy to stray in that direction. Grr. I'll post anyways though, and get guidance from you. AND answer your questions...I PROMISE. Sorry 'bout that little selfish lapse. But I felt I had to share my doubts with somebody.) Right, but I love you. Post soon!!

~Alison
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From ANON - kazhdu on March 16, 2005
I love your story, though I had a hard time tracking it down when it dissapeared from fanfiction.net.
The only negative thing I have to say is : PLEASE DON'T EVER WRITE FRENCH AGAIN !!!
Everything was perfect, but your french is just horrendous! (I do not critisize without knowing, I am french, hence the intense reaction)
You can not imagine all the fanfictions I've read where people try to include french sentences (especially Anita Blake ffs) and
just butcher, no massacre, the french language. If you are not certain about it, or if you do not have someone to look it over, please do not do it.

Please keep up the good work, I will await your next update impatiently.
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From ANON - Wilby on March 16, 2005
yay, 2 more chapters! i hope youre working on chapters 30+ while all this reposting is going on... getting Three Keys twice a week is really starting to become quite a comfort... arg i cant wait for the new chapters to start showing up! weee!

WHAT? youve never heard of mediaminer? garsh, thats a new one. and its mediaminer .org btw, just in case you couldnt find it and was convinced i was crazy... but im not crazy, i swear! oh look at me, acting like a silly reviewer hyped on sugar. until next time!

-Wilby :)
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From ANON - Erin on March 16, 2005
sigh...draco all jealous of harry...how cute...i just think it's hilarious how he gets haha...and aww his weakness is smart girls...that whole part was awesome i love it!!! so cute ahhh i cant get over it...keep updating...and i gotta tell you 2 chapters ata time is the only way to go!!! b/c then we get caught up and new chapters...ahh so exciting...
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From on March 16, 2005
I really liked Draco's character, confident, but insecure at the same time. I really hope that you have Harry treading carefully around laurel, especially when it comes to Draco. I would really hate to see Draco torture Harry just for the hell of it.
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