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Reviews for The Three Keys

By : lorettcopeland

From ANON - RahNee on March 14, 2005
Chapter 20... First of all, I love that Laurel refers to Draco in her head as "Blondie" and "HER BOY". I thought this chapter was especially good at exploring how a sexy dress, a little alcohol and a dance beat (oh and don't forget raging hormones) can start to make you lower your inhibitions and your behavior gets a little more bold. Not that I think Laurel isn't a bold, assertive girl to begin with, but I suspect the combo of all those things are helping her be Possesive Girl and Bold Girl. Well that topped with Draco's sexy clothes, demeanor and smile...I certainly don't think I'd behave any differently. I will now pause for a moment to think of Laurel's description of Draco in his sexy black suit. Sigh...

Favorite Line: "He gave her a wide sexy smile, she suspected that was the only kind of smile he had..." I read that line over and over; it was beautifully done!

Thanks for clearing up my confusion about Laurel's family! I'm glad I wasn't the only one asking questions!

And in regards to your note at the beginning of this chapter, Lorett, I am SO glad you did not scrap your stories! I love your writing and I look forward to each new chapter. I can't tell you how much it makes my day when I see a new email telling me you have posted another chapter (or 2, or 3!) and then I get to read them and get a little "Reality break." You are very loved and very appreciated, honey! *big bear hug*

But...you are also a tease!!! You THOUGHT ABOUT posting a 3-fur, but you didn't???!!! How can you torture me like that! If you hadn't said anything I would have been perfectly content with my 2-fur. But NO! You had to say that you ALMOST posted the next chapter, too, and now all I can do is obscess over the next chapter and the Laurel/Draco interation that will likely occur! OOOOOOOH! I'm about to explode! You wicked girl! How could you? *Pouts, pouts, pouts* For heaven's sake, post more soon!!! But in the meantime, hugs and smooches to you!
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From ANON - Ally on March 14, 2005
Hello my darling girl!! How I love you and your story! FINALLY MY FAV SCENE IS HERE! The club scene and the destruction to come is nearing. I have to say the intensity of their meeting is conveyed so well! You make it so utterly believable that they feel so connected right off the bat, the instant attraction, the need to protect, the need to touch. Though really if I was in a room with Draco I wouldn't be able to not touch. I would touch and poke and prod and strip... okay wow got away from me there. I have to say I am eagerly awaiting the infamous BATHROOM SCENE. Yes I speak of the scene with Harry Potter in the bathroom about to get down and dirty with 'Draco's Girl', and I use the term loosly as I am his girl. I love that scene because you write is sooooo well, but I guess I should save those comments for when the scene is actually posted eh?

Anyway, back to the task at hand. I read your page long review responses and I have to agree with you about you , me, alison, and Mrs. A. We certainly offer eachother support. I can always count on honest and helpful reviews from all of you!! Also, I agree with writing at a snail's pace. Sometimes the next chapter is sooooo elusive I beat and beat my muses and they refuse to produce anything. Like for example, I have a wonderful title for my NEXT series, and I cannot even think of the next sentence for my CURRENT series! I think I will fire my muses and hire new ones.

Okay, I think I seriously started rambling there. ANyway, I think I will take this time to mention that YES I LOVE TAD. He is such a minor character we shall call him a BUTTON character! But really you write him so annoyingly well! Makes me laugh to read his possessiveness. Like anyone really stands a chance against Draco!! Anyway, I think I have rambled WAYYYYYY too much. BIG HUG to you and I am sitting here waiting for any updates you choose to fire our way! I will read hapily!!!

Lots of love deary!
Ally
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From on March 14, 2005
Sot down, Denied. I love when girls that think they are all that get shot down. I laughed my ass off. i can't wait to read 21 and 22.

your faithful follower
jeannette
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From ANON - Erin on March 14, 2005
ahh yea that last review about them standing at the bar and me using another guy? yea that was me sry forgot to put the name!!! but omg keep updating...it just gets better!!! and we're almost...ewll kinda almost...to where we left off!!
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From ANON - Anon on March 14, 2005
ahh sry i didnt review last time!!!! but omg these are by far my fav chapters...thats just something i would do haha...although using another guy to get the really hot one is really bad...eh eho cares right? but i can so see them standing at the bar...sigh
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From ANON - RahNee on March 14, 2005
Whew! Is it hot in here? *fans self* Chapter 19...has led me to a discovery. As much as I like Draco, I am also starting to enjoy Draco and Harry together. Those two hotties in one chapter? *Heart beats a little faster* (Oh, and Ron, too, although I've never considered him a hottie until now. But if anyone can make him into a hottie, it's you Lorett, with all the talent you have. I wouldn't be surprised if you have me swooning over Ron in no time!!!) But lest you think I am as pervy as Teeny, I would only consider snuggling with them one at a time! Oh that "dangerously handsome trio"...*runs out in my new Vera Wang dress to join the girls prowlng in front of them* Which leads me to favorite line #1: that the number of girls pacing in front of the trio did not pick up until Draco joined them. I laughed at Draco's conceit! But what a picture they would have made; the blond, the red head and the brunet hotties leaning on the bar. Now, where was that fan I was using?

Fav #2: "I'm handsome, wealthy, charming, women love me...they can't help it." Heaven help me, but it's true!

Fav #3: "We need to discuss your sleeping arrangements, Potter." "Sorry Malfoy, you're not my type." "Ugh. Manners, Potter, please..." This is the witty banter that I so love! I am enjoying how you write Harry and Draco together! They are sharp, quick with the reply, and it is fantastic! I think they have all the makings of a respectful friendship someday. It reminds me a bit of the raport between me and my dearest friend (whom I've known since 2nd Grade!). We are often snarking at each other and trading little barbs, but we team up instantly when a 3rd party comes into the picture (kind of like what Harry and Draco did when Teeny asked him to dance).

Fav #4: not a line per se, but I think it is hilarious that Draco drops his dislike of Muggles merely because there are scads of beautiful muggle women surrounding him. That's my boy! Thinking with those hormones!

Well, love, I'm off to Chapter 20! Hugs and smooches to you, my darling!
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From ANON - mrs_accio_firebolt on March 14, 2005
Helloo.
I liked it a lot better in Laurel's perspective, maybe because it was not confused with anything else.
And I love she's got an advantage over him: she KNOWS who he is. Not completely, but she knows where she has seen him before. And to me, that's and advantage.
I also think that even though everything was centered on Draco, you gave the characters around Laurel a lot more life than you gave those around Draco (in Draco's chapter). This one seemed more alive, more real. Again, maybe it's because Draco's chapter was dealing with two plot points, and this one is focused in only one.
Laurel seemed to me more the shy type and wow! she's not. I'll love to see her interact with the Hogwarts students. She will, right? They're just so different, but I think it'll be like fresh air. Wonder what her best subject will be? Will she like Trelawney? JIJIJIJIJI. Todavia no salen del antro siquiera y yo ya quiero saber hasta sus calificaciones.....! Any ways, great chapters.... Pity you didn't post 3. But, such is life, I guess. =)
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From ANON - mrs_accio_firebolt on March 14, 2005
Mmh...
I'm undecided.
First, I didn't like that you mixed "Harry's death plan" information with "Draco meeting Laurel" information, but as you explained at the end in your A/N, it does make sense. He's a teenager, and if Harry won't take his own death seriously... why should Draco?
I'm worried however, at what will happen with Draco being totally distracted by Laurel and Harry and Ron just not paying any attention.
Draco's recommendation sticks out in my head, however. They should warn Ron's family. Will they? Will they believe the warning? Will anything happen in the Burrow?
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From ANON - Krysta on March 13, 2005
omg wowzer, narcious is a firecraker! LOL or so i might say. wonderful job *yawn* sorry this taint such a good review as normal. I'm having a bad weekend, plus I'm sick o.o. well toodles!!!
~Krysta, the lynster
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From ANON - dracosgal on March 12, 2005
Can't stay long tonight love! The man and I are doing movie night...yay! so, I must say that I adore these past chapters...You already know I do though. Can't wait for the club fun to really begin. Mucho love and hugs to you my dearest! Love, M
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From ANON - Alison (Or Blood Rust) on March 12, 2005
Ah, goodie. Finally got to read the fabulous chapter after a REALLY LONG BREAK (why do my parents insist in kicking me off the computer?? Especially when it's your fic....sob)!! Yay!! I can definitely see why this was one of your favorites....you wrote the frustration, suspicion, and drama really well. Their characters are so perfect in this scene; the chemistry between them makes it really enjoyable to read. The thick-headedness of Ron and Harry made me laugh. Those boys. Letting the past get in the way of the future. The sad thing is, everyone does it (some not QUITE so transparently) at one point, and it can cost lives. In this case, of course, it would mean the downfall of the Good Guys.

What I found really impressive was the way the Draco swallowed his pride to warn the two of them. It was depicted so subtly and (odd as the circumstances are) beautifully. Pride is the weakest point of our darling Malfoy, and it reigns just as strongly in Harry. Maybe that's what makes the drama between the two of them so intense. Really, if you think about it, they
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From ANON - Alison (Or Blood Rust) on March 12, 2005
Hello hello hello....AGAIN!!

Ah, I'm most definitely glad that you're putting all three chapters together. I would have killed you for making me really really really want to read this next chapter (which sounds so good) and then not have posted it. Man, it was hard enough taking the time out for a review before rushing off to the next chapter. I'm really excited for it!!! Top 3? Really? Wow!!

I love Tad and Teeney. They seem the kind of people who you can't say one name without saying the others. You know, the kind of TadandTeeney (or simply The Twins!) effect. One name for the both of them. I thought you designed their character(s) really well, too. Just snobby enough to be annoying, just having enough connections to force you to withstand their very preppy company. I know so many kids like that. And the thing is...the two haven't even talked yet!! Not a single word. It makes your writing that much more enjoyable when you can give the idea of a character before you have any real contact with them. I mean, you often take the time out to give some background about them, but you don't stray too far to set their personalities in stone. Leaves the reader a little room to imagine. Personally, I try to just insintuate the characters, let the personalities show through their actions and words, but with you...you make it an enjoyable read. Tres, tres bon. Mark of a good writer.

I love the scenes between members of Laurel's family. They're blunt, but they really do give the idea of a happy American family. I can't help but draw parallels to my own family (just replace Willow with an eleven-year-old brother), and can imagine the dialogue so vividly. It's nice to have splashes of Muggle culture in there, to relieve the dark magical world that you capture so perfectly.

Right.....Chappie 18 ho!! Love you, darling. And this brilliant bit of Fan Fiction. (You wouldn't mine putting me on the Had to Be You update list, would you? I'll go give it a read reeally soon.)

Love,
Me.
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From ANON - Alison on March 12, 2005
Hey-a!!

I decided since you were so kind to give us a three-fur, I might as well review every chapter!! Ah, but they will be a bit shorter...hope you don't mind TOO much. Sigh. These review things take so long to write sometimes.....and I'm such a slow writer. Gr...that's why Puppet Master is so long in coming.

Okay. Back to you. Draco is soooo sexy as a contemplative, subtle hero. I mean, he has STYLE. And that was a brilliant tie-in to the Goblet of Fire. You're now going to FORCE me to read back over that scene. Hmph. How dare you make you read over J.K. Rowling's fabulous writing!!! Yahhh!! Whew. Sorry. Had brownies for breakfast (they were GOOD too). I was a bit confused over Potter's Secret Weapon, though. The one line that I didn't quite understand was the one that went: "Besides
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From ANON - dragon34 on March 12, 2005
I'm sorry I can't review after every chapter, I have to read everything first. I love it, I can't say enough about it. It's brilliant, captivating, sexy, intriguing, funny, etc, etc. I look forward to reading more.
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From on March 12, 2005
*dancing with you* lol, I had my wisdom teeth taken out, so I was out for a few days, but I AM BACK!! *looks around, too* I like it here. The review pages could be a little more structured, in my opinion, but otherwise, it's good. I actually stumbled on this place a while back, so I'm used to the layout and such, but I had NO IDEA that you were here, too! lol, Hey, since you don't get emails when we review, it's more of a surprise when you see ALL the new ones! hehe..

Yes, I am getting the updates! *grin* I see the subject line CHAPTER UPDATE, and I get all excited....and then whaddaya know, I click and there's THREE chapters at once!! I thought Christmas came early this year, I was so FRICKEN happy!!! lol, I am on the It Had To Be You update list too, yes? Just wanna make sure, haha. I'm looking forward to the next chappies!

Toodles, love!
P.S. Did I mention how much I LOVE your stories, and that you're a wicked awesome writer? Just wanted to make sure I did, lol...

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