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From ANON - deeta on August 05, 2005

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From ANON - Sorceress Black on August 05, 2005
Yayyyyyyyy a new chappie!!! Wow I loved that chapter! Hermione storming in like that and her and Pansy going at it lol that was great. But the best was Draco's word's of concern for Hermione, I just loved that part. And then the whole Lupin capture, I just can't wait to see what happens! I love this fic and you've done a wonderful job so far. ~*~Shannon~*~
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From ANON - Truth44 not logged in on August 05, 2005
You had me with the first paragraph.

I swear to God, by the first paragraph I was so into this that I couldn't stop reading if the devil came to rip my from my seat himself. Oh my FRIGGIN' God. Awesome, awesome writing. I mean, seriously. You're style is fucking amazing. It's so unlike what we usually so--so unlike the usually paragraphs and italics for thoughts and gasps and groans. I swear, you're friggin' fantastic, and I love you for writing this.

Possessive Draco, by far, is my favorite Draco (Draco the cynic is second). And I loved how you wrote Malfoy saving Hermione time and time again, and how this little... *thing* between them has been building up for years. I love how he just pulls her into classrooms and stuff. I mean, God, he's Draco fucking Malfoy. And you write him so well: he's smart, graceful, an asshole--everything a good D/Hr writer should have Draco be. All I could think of while I was reading is: Omg, he's so fucking hot. He's so fucking hot. I was getting hot and bothered over your little lime scenes and omg, they didn't even sleep together yet!!!

And your dialogue is absolutely marvelous. There are far too many fics out there that have the characters OOC when writing dialogue. And while, generally speaking, the characters in you fic are OOC (but this really doesn't apply much, seeing as their personalities have adapted to fit their current siuations--i.e. Hermione learning martial arts in order to feel safe after being abducted by death eaters), your dialogue is unbelievable. I love Draco and Hermione's conversations. You can always sense the passion behind them, and the tension--God, the tension! You're gonna make me have a heart attack by the time this is finished.

And I absolutely ADORE a hurt Draco. Hermione hurt his feelings and his entire attitude changed because of it, which shows the depth of his feelings for her and what affect her words and actions have on his... demeanor (I'm not exactly sure if that's the right word, and I'm far too riled up to dwell on it). I like how you have Neville portraying him as well (and my God! I nearly screamed when Neville asked Harry when Ron was going to ask Hermione out!)

When Draco said he wanted to rip Zabini's eyes out (or some other foul, painful thing) for staring at Hermione... I swear, you had me there too. It really gets me though, how Hermione is so oblivious to her good looks when everyone is noticing--even friggin' Snape (even though I find *that* to be a particularly frightening thought).

This fic is dark, and it goes into issues that a lot of writers usually only skim upon. I love how possessive Draco is in this, and how dark the romance is. And Hermione is so well written; despite what she thinks--all the answers she comes up with to Draco's questions, she always says something completely different, never giving him, I think, what he wants to hear.

And when Malfoy had her up against the wall, holding her like she was the last thing he could cling to until he fell into some bottomless abyss (forgive me, I think I'm getting poetic here), and said that he could deny her nothing... Jesus Christ, had I not been sitting, I surely would've fallen. I could feel that sensation that you get when your knees get weak, and I swear, despite his desperation, it was so unbelievably *sexy* You wouldn't believe how hot and bothered that made me. Jeez. I don't think my fan is turned up high enough for me to be reading things like this.

Wrapping this thing up, I think that you're a marvelous writer, and that you've definitely strung your words together well with this one. I was so intrigued by this. I've been teetering near exhaustion for the longest yet when I came upon this there was no way in HELL I was going to stop reading.

Anyway, I'll say it again: Awesome work. And I seriously can't wait until you grace us with an update.

Fantastic work!
Truth

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From ANON - PinkPig on August 04, 2005
Amazing - this chapter is my favorite. You put so much into so little. I love the idea that it's actually Slyterin who feel's prejudiced against. Brilliant actaully. Draco is so complex, everything is becomeing more complex and that is a wonderful twist. you are right: Hogwarts isn't a fairytale and Hermionie probably does need to realize that. I just hope you have them hash out thier feelings: explain why he was being so git-esque and have her tell him how much she likes him. AHHH! I'm just dancing after this chapter. Please update soon!!
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From ANON - love ur story!! on August 04, 2005
wkd update- thanx soooo much 4 updating again!
but can we plz c more possesive draco action? He's soooo flippin hot! best draco characterization ever! well done! :D
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From ANON - meg on August 04, 2005
this is awesome...i love how you portray draco...his character is so deep, but most people only see what's on the outside...i love how you bring out what's inside... and i don't think your portrayal of hermione is really that ooc...if she was assaulted, as she was in your story, i think it would definitely prompt her to learn how to defend herself, in one way or another... all in all, i think this is a great piece of fanfiction...your writing style is so attention-grabbing...you really bring out the passion between draco and hermione, and it's not punctured w/ major grammatical errors and ooc dialogue like many other stories on this site... update soon!
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From ANON - Static Wolf on August 04, 2005
All I can say is wow... that's it just wow. This has to be one of the best plots I have ever read. Hermione wearing muggle clothes and using muggle things is a angle that I never sought to explore. Updates are a MUST! I need another update so please hurry!!! ^_^
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From ANON - selene on August 03, 2005
This story is briliant! I adore it! I hope that you plan on updating soon! I know that I have some gall asking for an update so soon after you posted an update... lol. But what the heck... I am greedy for more!

You really depict both Draco and Hermione is such a beautiful way... rounding them out and giving them motive for their actions. Great job and thank you for sharing this wonderful story.
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From ANON - blade on August 03, 2005
good stuff, keep it up
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From ANON - jessysgirl on August 03, 2005
Must. Write. More. I would love to think this is how Malfoy is underneath the sneer. Since HBP, Malfoy has changed in my eyes. He was always sexy, but now he has more depth. In the book he showed intelligence, hesitation. I can see that Hermione will soon be at the end of her sexual rope, so to speak. Draco has now left her unsatisfied numerous times. Granted, I don't think she was quite ready for full-on sex before now, but I believe she has reached her limit. I look forward to reading the rest of this story. It is refreshing to come across talent such as yours, Rain. I do hope to read more from you soon. May writers block never exist for you!to
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From ANON - Eddie The Black Maru on August 03, 2005
Everytime I read your work, it blows me away. Your talent and beautiful way with words leave me, no pun intended, spellbound. You have a gift. It is a great and rare thing, develop it. Hone it. Blow away the world like you blew away me. Please don't wait as long to update this. HBP should not distract you....this story is much more preferable to JK Rowlings cannon. Malfoy and Hermoine forever. May the Nine shine and never leave you wanting again.
much love and devotion from
Eddie
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From ANON - Liz on August 03, 2005
hey; well, yeah, this rocks!! I love how real the story seems; and how much thought you've put into fleshing out the characters. Keep it up
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From ANON - Ini1412 on August 03, 2005
Wow, I'm looking forward for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Debbi on August 03, 2005
I am very impressed with your story, although the characters are not totally in keeping with cannon you have made their actions very believable. I also love the way you have made Draco's focus Hermione and not had him switch over to the good side so easily.

Can't wait to read more!!

Just quickly: in the beginning of the story when Hermione is talking about her mother, you might want to change the spelling to mum instead of mom as this is the english way of spelling it :-)
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From ANON - M M on August 03, 2005
This is absolutely my favorite Draco fic. Even after HBP I haven't given up on Draco, or Snape, and this playing both sides fits that theme. Its well written with good character development and awsome sexual tension. Write more soon.
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