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By : brandnewdaydawning
  • From ANON - Pixi on June 14, 2005
    Rain, I am getting such a kick out of your stories. *turns fan on, takes cold shower*
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  • From ANON - k on June 13, 2005
    This is the one of the best D/Hr fics I've read. You've managed to make their relationship so realistic. Though Hermione is a bit too beautified (but hey, it could happen in 6th or 7th year), I felt that your characterizations hit right on. I liked how you compared the Malfoys to the Grangers and though it was made up, I felt like Hermione's parents would really do that, after all, they are rich dentists and they want the best of everything for their daughter. I can't wait for more of this story soon. Hopefully more D/Hr interaction will come up. I want to see them develop a relationship of some sort because it seems like what all these past chapters have been building towards. Also, I think perhaps Voldemort will come into the picture soon. Of course, only you the writer knows what will happen next, these are just some predictions that I have (which could very well turn out to be wrong). Good job!
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  • From ANON - Bambu on June 13, 2005
    No, his pulling her from the window didn't read as if he was afraid of their being discovered... at least to me. The fact that he remains half-nude only underlines that. Otherwise, I would think he'd be dressing just as fast as she. I think you've got Hermione's confusion written very well, and since you're writing this from her perspective, Draco can remain enigmatic without problem. We, the reader, are kept in the dark as well as Hermione. I do wonder why Dumbledore's warning to her hasn't bothered her more, but she might be so driven by her hormones and her confused reaction to his possessive/protective waffling that she's unable to think beyond that. I look forward to your next chapter, Rain.
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  • From ANON - Cecille on June 13, 2005
    actually, the malfoy-moving-granger-away-from-the-window scene read more like him trying to protect her from random projectiles than anything else. to me anyway.

    this chapter didn't seem as polished as most of the previous chapters have been, but i like it still. i like how quickly draco's moods change--it fits him--here largely because you don't make him look bipolar. i mean, no going from super aroused to insanely confrontational all of a sudden, just because of one comment. actually, both malfoy and hermione seem more complex and sane and three-dimensional in your stories than in many others for precisely that reason i think.

    keep up the fantastic work :)
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  • From ANON - Stag on June 13, 2005
    *Sigh* I must say, I am a HUGE fan of a possessive Draco...Please, go on...My only request would be for a couple of possessive Draco bits.
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  • From ANON - Kitty Kat on June 13, 2005
    I really do love this story! Hehe, it's soo good. I don't see how you could have offended anyone. I mean, it's obvious that you are American (lol, I can tell cuz I'm one too^_^), and probably don't have as much knowledge of the British as I'm sure all Harry Potter fans would like, but you work beautifully with what you have. Screw anyone who has suggested or will suggest otherwise. This is one of the few *really* good stories on Adult Fan Fiction that I have had the pleasure of reading. (And, even though this story is also in regular Fan Fiction, tha'ts alright. Lol.)

    Waiting for your next update!

    ~Cheers~
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  • From ANON - Fallenrose on June 13, 2005
    What a great chapter!
    You made Draco so delicious in this chapter too.
    Don't worry about your English and the slang it's great so far.
    Can't wait for chapter 8 and more Draco!

    Fallenrose x
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  • From ANON - Narcissa Black on June 13, 2005
    You shouldn't worry, it came through that Draco was hiding her semi-nudity from anyone else's eyes. They can be so possessive. Still loving it.
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  • From ANON - vampkiss on June 13, 2005
    Loved the update! Can't wait till the next one. ;)
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  • From ANON - fiona on June 12, 2005
    loved it update soon!!!!
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  • From ANON - slyswn on June 12, 2005
    This chapter was just so damn exciting and entertaining I practically fell off my bed.

    The idea of those two doing oh so semi-naughty things while a Quidditch practice was taking place, freakin brilliant.

    Ah I can not wait for the next chapter of the this wicked story

    rock on!
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  • From ANON - ~Kat~ on June 12, 2005
    Great Story!!!! One of my absoult favorites!!! Please update soon!!!
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  • From ANON - Frank on June 12, 2005
    Hi, Rain. I just love your story. I love it because you conbined the muggle version of a confussed woman with all the training and all the stuff you wrote. And also the passion she is sharing with Draco. I belive that you said that he was obssesed with her right? Well, I hop that you can update soon. I am the moderator of the group you have recently joined. I hope that we can have a little more information about your story in our group. I hope that you like it! And Welcome
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  • From ANON - Michelle on June 12, 2005
    Wow. Another GREAT chapter. Although it was a filler chapter, it was excellent. The plot and your writing style blow me away. Keep those updates coming.
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  • From ANON - bubbles on June 12, 2005
    Once again a fantastic chapter. I really like how you write. The only complaint I have is that it was too short - again. :P Also, I think that though you explained Draco to be volatile, I thought that the way that he treated her after the bludger incident was a bit 'not him'. In my mind, when Hermione was having a bit of a breakdown, Draco seemed to not care at all . . .

    Other than that, that was lovely. Update quickly please. :)
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