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By : brandnewdaydawning
  • From ANON - Lorett on June 12, 2005
    Love it, Darling! BIG HUG TO YOU!

    And, I did get that he was protecting her. I thought maybe he was doing it in case the window broke with the bludger possibly coming back and hitting it, to keep her from getting hurt. But, I got it.

    And, she's SO NUTS! She had Draco Malfoy between her legs and what does she do? She goes and gets dressed! Let's him kiss her and then let's him walk away!

    OY! Crazy, nutty girl!

    Anyway, filler is fine, have no worries. All I try and do if I have a 'transitional chapter', as I like to call them; is to make sure that there is at least one plot point in the chapter to keep the story moving forward, however slowly it goes. So, that's my constructive critiquing. NO criticizing here, as you don't need it. You're doing very well and I'm loving it! (Which you know!)

    I'm glad to hear that Ronnie visited you and left you a review. She's AMAZING and she's SO TALENTED TOO! She's a good person to have giving you a review, cuz she makes you feel grand and still manages to give you helpful info too. When you have a sec, you should read her story, over at FF. You can get to it through the links pages at the group.

    So, this was a good chappie overall. Don't think twice about filler chapters, they have to be there and this one went down nice and smooth!

    Oh and I have to say, the idea of Draco whispering in Hermes ear, asking her if she thought about him...touching herself?! WOW. Sent shivers down MY spine!

    Looking foward to the next chapter!

    Cheers,

    L
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  • From ANON - lunastar on June 12, 2005
    grrrrrrrr......why did it have to end.
    You are so good at writing. And
    nothing is OOC. Please please update soon.
    I plan to keep you in my favorites and reading
    the rest of your works.
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  • From ANON - RahNee on June 11, 2005
    Hi Rain! I just wanted to let you know that I am really really enjoying this story! I like how you are writing Draco and Hermione's encounters. Chapter 5 was my favorite...very hot! I am eagerly anticipating another chapter...so hop to it! Please?

    I'll "see" you around on Lorett's 3Keys group page!
    Ronnie
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  • From ANON - concentrated and harmful on June 09, 2005
    right ok got it
    sorry about the computer comment in the first review. i have now read a liitle further. From now on i'm going to shut my face and finsh this so that i can indulge my moaning side with out embarrassing myself.

    and sorry about the uk rant i've had a really bad day.
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  • From ANON - concentrated and harmful on June 09, 2005
    **ok a quick pick up on one of my own mistakes- it's conceNtrated not conceRtrated**

    Now let me set this staight. The drinking laws in europe vary because Europe is a CONTINENT!!
    It is made up of LOTS of countries each with its own laws and most with their own languages.
    The drinking age in the UK (united kingdom = Great Britain (or England if your really stupid)) is 18 years old which is the highest drinking age you will find throughout Europe. However most children - that's children in the legal sense ie people under the age of 18 - are given alcohol in small amounts at a younger age by their parents.
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  • From ANON - concertrated and harmful on June 09, 2005
    umm ... it's not really ooc for hermione to be drinking. Most people start drinking from about sixteen upwards. Although it would be difficult to get into a club, with out a passport or a driving licence, in london.
    Also people don't bring electrical items to hogwarts because the magical fields interfere with the electrical fields and stop them from working. i'm pretty sure it says that in one of the books.

    apart from that this is quite good
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  • From ANON - fiona on June 08, 2005
    LOOOOOVE IT!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 06, 2005
    i love this fic. i can't wait to hear more. i love your portrayal of hermione's character... she is still herself, yet incredibly sexy.
    i also enjoy the interaction and tension between her and draco. please update soon... even with your so-called grammar
    mistakes, the caliber of writing is much higher than 99% of the other stuff on this site.

    nnt
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  • From ANON - Pixi on June 05, 2005
    Gee I like your stories.
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  • From ANON - Eddie The Black Maru on June 05, 2005
    THE BEST!!!! this fic is tops, love, utter and beautifully tops. omg.....omg....PLEASE write more? update sooner? make the chapters longer? I know I ask an awful lot of you but, *sobs into her hand* it means so much to me, to readers in general, to read a wonderful story about their favorite characters in love (not that they have admitted it yet...) but, you have to understand....its just soooooo great, wonderful!!! Is there a word that can express that delicious bubbly feeling in your stomach that fills your heart with joy, that sears your soul with its passion? its just.....so, so, so, THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you for making my day, my week, my, month with your wonderful work. the nine have favored thee, and i do hope that they continue their patronage. blessed be the muses.
    much love
    eddie
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  • From ANON - anonymous on June 05, 2005
    Can't wait to read more!
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  • From ANON - Jessica on June 05, 2005
    I couldn't agree more about Ron. Harry is more suited for Hermione, so is Draco and they are better looking as well. I can't stand stories where people put Ron and Hermione together. I see a good premise and then they kill it by mentioning Ron/Hermione. The whole series is headed towards Harry/Hermione as a couple anyways
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  • From ANON - lorett on June 05, 2005
    Well Rain, this was a fun chappie. I really like a challenging, smart Draco. I actually really like your Hermione as well. She's nice and well rounded. I just think you're doing a fantastic job on both stories. (By the by...when is the next chappie of my other favorite 'Rain' story going to be up? HINT, HINT)

    Anywhoo..liking it more and more.

    I added both of your stories to my Yahoo Group story links file. I have a small HP group of about 45 people and we're building up quite a nice library of great HP stories...I added yours the other day and was singing your praises too! GRIN.

    If you'd like to check out the group, here is the link: http://groups.yahoo.com/group/hpthreekeysfanfictiongroup/ - I'd love to have you stop by some time!

    So, okay, I'm off. Think you're doing a wonderful job and can't wait for the next chappie!

    Cheers,

    Lorett


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  • From ANON - Serena Tsukino on June 02, 2005
    MWAHAHAHAHAHA! I'm really enjoying how things are playing out in this fic!! Please write more soon!

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  • From ANON - 421-10 on June 01, 2005
    That last line was priceless. I love the plot, the writing and basically everything about it! Keep on writing!

    -Lost in a fairytale
    (421-10)
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