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Reviews for Broken Lives

By : AngelsOdyssey
  • From ANON - TaintedAngel on March 25, 2005
    Hey hunny!
    I enjoyed the latest chapter!!
    Re: your not so positive reveiws. You are right...this is a place for ppl to express themselves and have fun writing about our fav pair!! If your not loving it....simple...dont read it!! Congrats on this being your first story!!
    As for it not being a typical way for a rape victim to act....THERE IS NO TYPICAL WAY!!! everyone is different!! I was like Hermione. I can totally relate to her!!

    Once again - Good job Lovely...I am looking foward to more chapters!!

    TaintedAngel xxx
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  • From ANON - Virginia C. on March 25, 2005
    it's not the mistakes for which she needs the BETA, it's the formatting, ideas to draw the story out in more detail, catching lapses in logic or any inconsistencies that may cause problems later on in the story.

    to the author: yes the stories are written for fun, and yes you should write whatever YOU want to write, but maybe consider a BETA just to skim through it and make some formatting suggestions, just to make it easier to read! Because one paragraph as a chapter can be very hard on the eyes and some people won't even have to read it before they judge your story say it's bad because you didn't take the time to format it!
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  • From ANON - divine angel (not logged in) on March 25, 2005
    Interesting. Lots of potential here. Have you thought about getting a beta? I'd be happy to do it if you like.
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  • From ANON - JTBJAB on March 25, 2005
    Hey if you are getting hassle you could get a BETA....for which i volunteer....i BETA for 6 other people, so i could help sort out any problems you might have.

    Although personally i find your story so good to read i dont notice any mistakes and they must be few seen as i am a BETA and have not noticed.....great chapter....Hermione deserves a change!
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  • From ANON - Lu Ling Qi on March 25, 2005
    pls excuse the spelling and gramaticl errors above iwas to angry to read through my writting
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  • From ANON - Lu Ling Qi on March 25, 2005
    Wow you suck obliviating him that just really scres everything up i had like the beginning bu now by the third chapter i am hesitant to sy it is good myabe ok. You had the begining of a pairing and hen destroyed it. Also i want to know why you made her rape so inconsequntial to hermione i mean she was aasuletd and rapeed and then dresses up to get more attention. That just does not seem right to me. If a girl was raped they would not make themselves available for a second time they would try to make sure noo one tryed it again. Hence uglier; Mental check is hermion even felling anything after her asult and rape by large stick
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  • From ANON - Black on March 25, 2005
    Its very poorly written, the story has been done 100 times before. Get a Beta for gods sake! Otherwise you might as well give up.
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  • From ANON - TaintedAngel on March 25, 2005
    Hey hun.
    Interesting twist. I will be looking foward to the next chappie :-)

    TaintedAngel xxx
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  • From ANON - JTBJAB on March 25, 2005
    Ah no, lets hope that Dumbledore is his all knowing self and realises that Severus' memories have been wiped!
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