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Reviews for White Roses

By : Bloodsrose

From ANON - Wyonna on April 16, 2005
Lilith, I have to say reviews like yours always surprise me. On the one hand you say that people shouldn't attack the author, yet you turn around and make nasty comments about other people that reviewed. Isn't that the same thing? And as for saying that people that didn't like the story are living in Lala Land for not liking it, does that mean you're a pathetic wimp that likes to be abused because you do like the story? I would hope not. Just as people not liking the story are not in Lala land. People have different opinions. Grow up honey and get into the real world. You claim to like raelism in fanfiction, but obviously not in real life. Reviews aren't always sweetness and light, and I think most authors realize it.

And think about it. We're all reading fanfiction based on a children's book. Yup, we're all in fantasy land however you look at it.

TigerLily-I would never say anything bad about you because I admire anyone that has the guts to put up a story. Did I like it? Well not really but that's because I hate the fact of SS cheating on HG. It's as simple as that, yet I do believe that you have the right to post the characters as you see fit.

May I add my please to the many others. I really do hope you post a sequel. And I will toss a penny in the wishing well and hope tha things are not as bleak as they seem for Severus and Hermione.
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From ANON - lilith on April 15, 2005
Me again.
I just read the reviews (yes, I actually read the story before reading the reviews. I always do that because I prefer not to be biased by others opinions) Well, those reviews brought up a few more thoughts.
First omg, I can't believe how many horrible reviews you got. Honestly, I admire you, I don't know if I had kept up my story if it had happened to me.

To all those who wrote they didn't demand to take the story off: That's not the point! I always thought reviews were a way to encourage writers and offer constructive criticism. Well, perhaps I'm idealistic. All I can see is that you most certainly didn't. You just bashed the author because the story hurt your feelings. Tell you what? That's actually a sign of a good story. A story which wouldn't make me happy or sad or anything would certainly not count among my favourits.

Then there are those who raved about the roses. Honestly. Can't you recognice symbolism when it stares you in the face?

Sadly, the characters are not unrealistic. Perhaps that's what enraged so many people... they prefer to stay in a happy Lala-land where nobody get's hurt. Why do you read dark storys then?

There are those who write they prefer happy, unrealistic storys because they want escape real life when they read fanfiction. Well, nobody forces you to read this, right? I personally enjoy realistic storys, and I would be very unhappy if they ceased to exist because of you.

To the author:

You are a brillant writer, just ignore those who said otherwise. This story is a good one, and your charcters are NOT totally OOC.

There is one thing about the story I want to criticise, which I overlooked before: I have to agree Hermione is a bit young. Did you write it before the fifth book was published? Because while I read this it seemed as if they were already in a longer relationship, say, one or two years. I just asumed she was around 18/19 and overlooked you said otherwise. I don't have a problem with the professor/student relationship. It's just that a relationship such as theirs needs some time to develope. She said she loved him, they got into a relationship, he proposed to her... I thought it happened over at least a year.

I agree with the reviewer who said that based on the books, the characters could have very likely developed this way. I remember JKR saying in one of her interviews (as some guy asked her if there would be some romance for Severus in her books): "He was a deatheater. The things he did... How could anyone love him?" I never wrote him that way either, I just quote this to show the CANON Severus is not the honorable, loving person many fanfiction-writers make him out to be.

What I love in your story is that you made Hermione loving him, despite him being a dysfunctional person. Out of all HP characters I think Hermione is most likely to develope that kind of obsession, because she is an idealistic person who believes she can change everything to the better.

btw Before anybody makes some of these ridiculous asumptions about my person which seem to be common among your reviewers:

I am no teenager, and I had my fair share of experience with abusive relationships in my life. That's why I claim to have some authority in saying this is realistic. Also, I very much like the Severus/Hermione pairing. I know my grammar is bad, but this is because english is not my native language, so please excuse me.

And again: Please write the sequel!
lilith

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From ANON - luvssnape on April 15, 2005
I thought this was a good fic. I would like to see a sequel.
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From ANON - lilith on April 15, 2005
Well, if it wasn't supposed to be the end, write the sequel! I honestly don't understand why people don't like this, I think your story is great. Sure, the characters are not exactly as JK made them, but earnestly... this pairing would never exist in JKs books. I personaly like this pairing very much, and I think your characters are way more IC than in any of those many sappy 'falling spontanously in love and living happily ever after' storys. I liked the way you described Severus feelings and Hermiones too. I have to admit though, that I am a fan of happy endings (not living happily ever after but at least somewhat happy endings), so... Write a sequel! I'll definitely be waiting for it.
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From ANON - Ariel on April 14, 2005
I enjoyed this story. I do believe that because she's a mudblood Snape would have a problem with Hermione in any relationship the two have. I think that if he hadn't been so cruel to her, and her so forgiving (face it, she's always forgiven Snape his behavior in all of the books) it would have been even more OOC. It isn't a healthy relationship, but Hermione admits to it in the story. I say well done.
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From ANON - Moira H. on April 13, 2005
I'm hoping this is not the end, because I hate to see Hermione and Severus like this. Real life issues can be crappy, but I just don't seem them behaving like this. And funny enough it's not the total lack of respect SS has for HG, and HG apparently has for herself-it's the intelligence/respect factor as others see them.

What I mean is that Severus did join the DE, however as far as we know he's redeemed himself. I would like to think, that even for his own self interest, he would not want AD and the other staff thinking of him as a disgusting sex maniac. It's far too personal. That's why I can't see him bringing women into "his space". He seems to private.

As for HG, she has her rep in school to maintain and later her rep for a career. I'm not to sure I'd hire someone with such little self-esteem. And since SS is screwing women all over and right at Hogwart's-people would know. And I can only inagine HG facing Harry and Ron with this going on.

My hope is that you have a nice plot twist or something else planned. And please note I'm not criticizing your writing, or even the story (I understand a pic in time), I just had the feeling that there's more than meets the eye hear. LOL Especially when you do mention a sequel, and did from the beginning. Hope you write it. I first read this story a few days ago, and I saw sequel so I was holding onto that thought (hoping things would change). Please write it soon? LOL
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From ANON - Katie on April 13, 2005
Oh wow, this was such a beautifully written story. You're quite a talented writer!
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From ANON - Calicat on April 13, 2005
While I can honestly say this isn't the worst fanfic I have ever written. It is probably the most well-written story I have ever read and still do not like. The grammer, spelling and tenses are just about perfect. However, I have to agree, that everyone is OOC. I am not even talking about Canon, cause I sure don't stick to Canon. And while the issues you brought up do in fact exhist in this world (sadly). I do not see Hermione or Severus ever being like this. It is just alittle too extream OOC for my tastes.
As for your frequent angry responses, you have put up a very contraversial(sp?) story, full of real issues, and expect everyone to be all happy about it. Your reaction to this comes across as a extreamly childish and are making people loose respect for your otherwise decent work. So do us all a favor and grow up. If you can't deal with other peoples opinions, then don't post such contiversial stories on this site!
Delete this if you want, it will only go to show that you cannot deal with critisism like an adult.
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From ANON - Annika on April 13, 2005
I noticed a lot about the age of women here and after checking myself (through YaHoo mambers, webpages etc.), it really is true that very young women like the story and older ladies don't. Maybe because older women have "been there" and feel uncomfortable and sad seeing a young women in a situation like HG, and young woman maybe see "an out" with the sequel? Who knows?

In any case, I am hoping for a sequel and being an old biddy, hope there's light at the end of the tunnel or some type explanation.

Have a great day all!
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From ANON - Ericka on April 13, 2005
This is a tough one. I do think the story is well-written however, I still just can't see Hermione watching Severus have sex without doing anything. I'm not saying the relationship between them wouldn't have problems, I just don't think Hermione would put up with "that" much love or not. Most of the women that stay in these type relationships have other problems before that relationship (abusive homes, etc.). HG at least as far as we know doesn't. I just can't see any reason she'd stay with a older, abusive and if we're canon-ugly man. She doesn't need his money, she's not trapped with anywhere to go. I guess there's complete idealized but on the other end of the spectrum-it's extremely "extreme' and the angst HG goes through here is so much. I also think that HG, would also be worried about the humiliation of everyone in the wizarding world knowing how SS behaves (he doesn't hide it and brings it home). I think that may bother her even more.

That being said you mentioned a sequel and I for one have faith that you have something up your sleeve regarding this story. You're too good of a writer not to. LOL

Looking to see more.
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From ANON - Angi on April 13, 2005
Well I don't care about what everyone else says... but I like your story... I think it keeps the characters in character... Severus being unable to express feeling... and Hermione though brave on the outside, weak and dependent on the inside... I loved it.... and even though you said that you may leave the sequal unfinished, I hope that you at least post it unfinished or not :D... Relationships are not always wonderful... and you portrayed this perfectly... Keep it up... and ignore people that want to crush your creative, independent spirit... :D

XOXO
Angi
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From ANON - Amanda on April 12, 2005
Tygerlily,

I really enjoyed this story - it was nice seeing an emotional, yet not-so-reformed Snape with Hermione and I'm always glad to hear a new spin on the SS/HG pairing. I enjoy idealized stories just as much as the next person, but if Hermione and Snape were to have a relationship, my money would be on it being much more unhealthy than the one you painted so well. Thanks!
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From ANON - Caitlin on April 12, 2005
Oh wow. Penny that was beautiful and I for one am ashamed.

TigerLily-I'd love to see more of this story and will keep my fingers crossed that SS/HG come out OK.

SpoiledSquish-I apoligize, I read your comments and was a bit offended because being a person of color, I guess the "white ass" part irked me a bit, but upon thinking about it, I'm sure you meant nothing racist. I jumped too fast without thinking and I'm sorry.

I suppose we all need to chill a bit. Penny, thanks for reminding me that it's better to be nice that nasty. A good lesson for us all.

And TigerLily, wishing you all the luck in the world.
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From ANON - lightgoddess on April 12, 2005
I just want to say, Penny, rock on sister!!! And keep writing Tigerlily, you are drawing out emotions in many of your readers. Isn't that what it's all about?
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From ANON - Penny on April 12, 2005
I will say that I hope there's a sequel that lightens or somehow "betters" things up. That's just me though. I read SS/HG for relaxation and don't like too much stress. I have lived enough bad things to want to read fiction where true love abounds, men don't cheat and there is a happy-ever after. Maybe it's not true to life, but I think we're all drawn to Harry Potter books because it's a fantasy. So many lousy things happen in real life that somethings it is nice to take a break with fantasy and fiction realistic or not. Personally, as I stated I kind of prefer fantasy over realism in fanfic but, my life hasn't been all sunshine so I'll take sunshine where I can get it. LOL (And I'm certainly not telling TigerLily or anyone what to write, to each her own, this is just my opinion).

What worries me as a woman, is that whenever a internet group is mostly female, "fights" break out. There's nasty comments, catty comments, one person responds in a nasty matter, another one rebutts in a nasty matter. It never fails.

My personal feeling is that women are usually under more stress than men (working at jobs, kids, working at home etc.) and are also much more subject to hormonal changes. For instance on this review board, at any given time a lot of us have PMS, or are pregnant, or menopause etc. As a result of all these things-women do appear to be more "nickpicky" than men. Agin, just my opinion.

On the other hand, I also believe that whatever a woman's viewpoint is for this story, and no matter how many nasty remarks are traded back and forth, I do like to think that if one of us needed help, or sympathy, or just e-mail contact to feel better, we would all rush to that woman's side. I really do believe that.

I guess in a way, it's good everyone can express their feelings positive, or negative, nice or nasty, over something that we all know really doesn't "hurt" anyone (I hope you weren't hurt in this TigerLily). If people are taking the time to write anything good or bad, it means your story was noticed. And any celebrity will tell you, no matter what type publicity, it's the being noticed that counts.

So ladies all that being said-I hope that everyone eats well, sleeps great, and has the man (or woman) of her dreams at her side for all eternity.
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