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Reviews for White Roses

By : Bloodsrose

From ANON - ClaptonGroupie on April 12, 2005
Well, I came here because I love your Buffy fic and SS/HG are my fav couple as far as HP goes. I just wanted to say that I really, really hope that it doesn't end like this. I'm hoping for some explanation or I don't know something to make it "all better". LOL

Really hope you write the sequel and put me out of my misery (this was so sad).

Please? LOL
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From ANON - Caitlin on April 12, 2005
SpoiledSquish, I notice that on one hand you berate people that don't like the story, yet you feel your opinion since you like it, is valid. So does that mean, if someone doesn't like, they most conform to your point of view?

You also say if you don't have something nice to say-don't say anything at all. After that statement you go on to make nasty comments about some of the people that reviewed. In fact, your first review is nasty to others that didn't share your opinion. Take a little of your own advice.

And one other thing, if you're in your twenties, God help the new generation of young adults. The only people I have ever heard use the expression "my natural white ass" are young children and teens. It's crude, politically incorrect and extremely low-class. If that's the language you're using in your twenties, well yes, you do need someone to teach you how to speak. (Oh and note it's speak not talk).

I'm not even going to comment on the story, because the language used has annoyed me, but I will say that TigerLily's reponses were well-written, not crude and made sense. Please do her a favor and don't defend her. She's leagues ahead of you as far as defenses go.
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From spoiledsquish on April 12, 2005
Gotta agree with lightgoddess. You definitely should post a sequel to this with your head held up high. You are a brilliant author, so don't let these naysayers get you down and try and make you feel unworthy of writing such eccentric work.

I hope to see you write lots more HP fics in the future, especially HG/SS. It's been refreshing to see you incorporate real life subjects and turn it into a fic so magnificent.

And a side note to all the people like Donna, Vonda, Kitty, Candice, etc., I'm not a teenager (I'm in my twenties, thank you!). Don't tell me how to speak. Candice, personally I don't find you respectable at all, because as an adult, your parents should have taught you that if you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all.

Kitty, grammer is spelled GRAMMAR. You commend Tygerlily on her spelling, yet you can't even spell the simplest of words correctly

Anyway, Tygerlily, sorry if I was rude to some of your negative reviewers, but just because they don't agree that our viewpoints are just as valid, does not mean they have the right to go around badmouthing people!
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From ANON - lightgoddess on April 12, 2005
Oh, and I want to add that I'm extremely grateful that your lovely reviewers haven't found my HG/SS death fic. In that one, my Snape is in almost as bad of a shape as yours. No matter what, you'll always have nay-sayers. I say post the sequel and post it with pride!! Your writing is not bad at all. Good Luck!!! (And, to hell with the OOC crap. I've read very, very few canon!Snape fics. You just don't see it in fan fic, not even with some of the best writers!)
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From lightgoddess on April 12, 2005
What the hell?!? You mean people didn't like this fic?!?! OMG!! This was great! WOW!! I'm not a huge HG/SS shipper, but this was really, really good. Are readers really that anal about fic characters being canon? I hate to say this, but if we all always kept them canon, there would be no HP/SS or HG/SS...ever.
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From ANON - Irene on April 12, 2005
Harriet, I have to say I do find the whole farm idea and pet chickens really amazing. It's so different from what I do. I work as an accountant in NYC-Wall Street area.

My husband grew up in the south on a farm, so I really do enjoy when people have different experiences than me.

Being an anthopologist really sounds unique as well.

Well please take care, I'm off to one last meeting and than home for more work! LOL
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From ANON - Harriett on April 12, 2005
Irene: yes, while people usually interact with chickens only with a fork, they make excellent pets! As for my majoring in anthropology... yeah that was when I was 18 - as time went by I realized living in some foreign locale for months at a time getting shot at and dusting off quarter inch fragments of ancient trash heaps was just not for me. Give me my farm in Georgia, I'll take it every time.
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From ANON - Irene S. on April 12, 2005
Damn, I'm at work and not concentrating. I meant I agreed with the reviewer Susan not Sharon.

Hmm back to work for me now. I guess I can't do two things at once.
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From ANON - Irene on April 12, 2005
Oops I meant the reviewer Sharon-more reviews came in, so it's not the previous review.

And Harriet-Pet Chicken and anthopology? LOL Cool.
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From ANON - Irene S. on April 12, 2005
You know I agree with the previous reviewer on all aspects. I also loved the first part that was romance. It was great. The rest, I didn't really like (but agree it's your option to write the way you see fit).

Maybe in a way I felt a bit cheated because the first part was so lovely and romantic, that I didn't see the rest coming.
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From ANON - Harriett on April 12, 2005
The phrase "The masses are asses" has been around for _decades_. And so have I, very nearly 3 of them. So while not a grizzled old harpy, my spring chick days are behind me. My comment to go out and volunteer was to ANYONE leaving a hateful cookie cutter review. AND to everyone calling ANYONE bitches in reviews. Sometimes I love to root for the underdog and it was 200 to 1. Seems like we have some communication and understanding here now.

As for my studies... I graduated with a degree in anthropology many moons ago, got a job working in IT many moons ago, was recently laid off with a tidy severance package (I'm young enough for my mind to have volunteered 'Severus Package'), and now am enjoying working from home. Life is sweet.

Ladies, I enjoy you all. Ashwinder, AFF, there is some major talent and lovely writing. I've reviewed your work there (under my usual pseudonym) and expressed my appreciation, but here's as good a place as any to do it again. Thank you!

I must go walk my pet chicken, take a nap, and go back to work. Y'all take care now.
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From ANON - Susan_peri on April 12, 2005
As many people have pointed out, this story is extremely well-written. And I don't have a problem with you tackling a controversial subject. However, if this is meant to show co-dependency or emotional abuse I think you've missed the mark a bit. What I see in this story is sadism. (Which makes Hermione a masochist.)

I've dealt with people in bad relationships, in abusive relationships, and in co-dependent ones, and I can't relate any of my real-life experiences to this story. As it happens, I've also dealt with people who have a sex addiction. Snape might fit in to that category. But in that case, rather than feeling needed, the partner felt dirty and useless and saw no reason to stay. They felt as if the sex addict saw them as just another one of his whores.

I don't see that Hermione is getting anything from this relationship. I know that you make the point that he gives her, and only her, the roses, but I don't get what else there is for her. I'm also not clear on what he gives her that makes her come back. She has a room to escape to; she's able to walk out on him, so she's not completely dominated.

I know you say the characters are OOC, but I guess one of my problems is that you have written a story in which it doesn't matter *who* the protaganists are. You could put any names in and the story would hold up. I come into this site to read stories about two characters I like. This story could star Romeo and Juliet or even Illya Kuryakin and Napoleon Solo and the story wouldn't really change. What makes it HG/SS?

And I'm one of the oldest people here for those of you tracking those things. :)

You have such talent, I really look forward to reading more stories. But maybe try for some different plots. The first half of this story, if read as a straight romance, is fantastic.
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From ANON - Kimberly on April 12, 2005
Look I wrote a negative review the other day and I'm so sorry. I looked over the story again, and you did mention a sequel, so who knows what will happen or what the story is.

I would really like to read the sequel and I apologize for being an ass. In my defense I can only say that I'm pregnant, and emotional over everything. The thought of SS doing that just made me almost cry.

Again, I'm so sorry and if you decide to write the sequel, I'd love it.
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From ANON - Bonny on April 12, 2005
I noticed you mentioned a sequel-I would absolutely love to read it. Hope you write it soon-and please post-forget everyone else, think of me. LOL Serioulsy, I really do hope you write a sequel. Pretty please???
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From ANON - Kitty on April 12, 2005
I and a few others from a SS/HG group were going to review but, we than found you were really a teenager. Please let me say that we wish you the best with your writing. We didn't realize you were so young and since some of us have kids your age, to comment on the story would be inappropriate.

Let me say that your grammer and spelling are very good, it's nice to see when younger folks have actually learned something from school.

Whatever profession you choose-we wish you well in life.
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