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Reviews for Before and After The End

By : MidnightGuardian
  • From ANON - Tasha on July 22, 2005
    This is a wonderful story. I love where it's headed (even though I was hoping that this would turn into a Harry/Snape story.) Please continue this. I must have super horrible grammer because I didn't even notice.
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  • From ANON - Audrey on July 22, 2005
    hey, i think your idea's pretty decent. i think you should continue it since it's going pretty well [to me][sorry about the lack of capital letters. my shifts are malfunctioning and using the caps lock button is a pain] if you'd like, i'll happily be your beta, just drop me an e-mail. i'll try to reply within a few days. =]
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  • From ANON - little_prongsie on July 22, 2005
    WHA??? Nononono you can't discontiue this story!! It's very good, and different from any other creature!Harry fics out there!!
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  • From ANON - jewel of the sea on July 22, 2005
    i really like this story and i think you should finish it.if you like i could beta it for you,iv'e never beta'd anything before but my spelling and grammer's not to bad.
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  • From ANON - Cecilie on July 22, 2005
    You have to continue the story! Your grammar isn't bad......and I guarantee that I have read 1000's of stories worse than yours. It has a nice plot and I think you're good at writing. Did someone flame you??? Ignore them, don't let others control how you feel about something or what you do. It's your story so I can't make you continue writing it, but I honestly think it's a good story and if you let those bad feelings decide for you then you will have lost something. If people don't like your writing, or have complaints then they can just stop reading it, but there are people who like it. Write for the people who want to read!
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  • From ANON - Kali on July 22, 2005
    Hey, I love the uniqueness of your story. Harry is the cutestest little cat I've ever seen. I'd like to say that I hope you do continue the story. I can live through grammer; I had to take a couple months in school focusing all about grammer and somehow I survived...I don't know how, but it happened. I think this is one of the many fanfics that I though was awesome, and I saved the link so I could check up on it for updates :)! Your Harry is great as a cat, and I can't wait for how the story progresses! So, please finish the story or I'll be very sad!!! You don't want to make me sad do you? No? Good? :D
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  • From Alexa on July 22, 2005
    You need to continue, just get a beta.

    Now, I think there is a whole other problem with the plot - if all fey ase submissive than they always mate with someone who isn't fey. The resulting child would still have to be fey - otherwise the whole spesies would have dissapeared after the very first generation. So all fey are sort-of half bereeds. There is always something else mixed in, and it shouldn't stop them from coming into the inheritance and being fey. Because of that, these is no such thing as "dormant" fey blood. If Snape's grandfather had a kid with a fey, the kid would be just as fey as it's mother. That kid could have kids on his/her own (and carrieng them) and those kids would be of mixed blood, and, as usual for that kind, fully fey. And it would continue down the line in the same way. So Severus can't have some fey blood and not be fey. Any fey blood would make him fey, since that is the only way nature could ensure survival of the fey spesies when they are all "submissive".
    So you might want to find a way to work around it.

    Also I dissagree with your use of the term "submissive" here. What you were talking about is that all fey are the carriers of children, that is not the same thing as submissive. Submissive describes behavior, which can be from biological reasons in animals, but being submissive in behavior does not mean carrieng kids. Techmically, one can still be the... penetrating participant, while being submissive. For example the dominant riding the submissive. This way submissive can easily be the "daddy" and not the "mommy" of kids. The way you had Snape say it, was as if there is no difference between the two, like carrieng kids and being submissive is obviously the same thing. That's just... steriotyping, in a way, and plainly incorrect.

    Other than that, it's a cute story, and you just need a beta. And as I have offered before - If you want I can do it. (Alexandrayusova@yahoo.com)
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  • From ANON - sundance-gurl on July 22, 2005
    First off, no matter how bad your spelling is it will never get any better if u don't practice. The key is to reread ur work before posting it and/or get a beta or something to check over the mistakes you made and tell u where u went wrong and why. Secondly, I know there are a lot of weak stories, I've read some of them too and ur's honestly isn't that bad otherwise I probably wouldn't have continued reading it. You have great ideas you just need to work on how to express and describe them. I know this will sound prissy but grammer classes and books do work if u try to use them to there full potential. Finally, never compare your work to the work of others. This is mainly because u don't know how long or how developed the author's writing experiance is, therefore you might be trying to judge ur work against the work of Leonardo DeVinci. That doesn't mean, however, that you shouldn't read or aspire to be as good as better authors then yourself. keep trying and don't give up.
    CHEERS!
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  • From ANON - Sannukaz on July 22, 2005
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  • From ANON - Spiritkat on July 22, 2005
    Hey, I don't review stories often, but here I am reviewing. I just wanted to say that i love your story and your grammar is not that bad at all. I truly hope that you would continue to write, because you have an excelent story line.

    Take care
    and don't give up
    Spiritkat
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  • From ANON - Amy on July 22, 2005
    Oh, please continue! If your reason for not continuing is just the grammar, I'd be happy to beta for you. I love your plot ^^
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  • From sesshomarufangirl on July 22, 2005
    please don't stop writing this story its really good. i love reading it. i wouldn't mind you just writing it for me personally and shouldn't pay attention to what some people say about it they don't know what their talking about. oh and if you ever need something cheering up about your writing feel free to email me. update soon please. ^_^
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  • From ANON - NightOwl on July 22, 2005
    Continue, please. I like your "kitten-Harry" very much. I like your story very much. Don't be sad because of one stupid review. There are many people who like your story and who are impatiently waiting for next chapters and all this people would be sad if you quit this!

    sorry for my poor english. It's not my native language. But you can see here like REALLY POOR english looks :-)))
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  • From ANON - jlo on July 22, 2005
    i think youshould continue this storry i really like it.. the writting is not bad
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  • From ANON - kyoji on July 22, 2005
    contin.
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