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Reviews for Shared Intentions

By : BlackDragonHeart
  • From ANON - Missi on June 05, 2005
    I don't know if I need an actual rape scene, but maybe having Dragon write it in the diary...? Can't wait for H/D "talking" via Diary, & please tell me Ginny's not going to be stupidly evil and steal it or something? And you didn't answer my last question yet, but I'm sure you will!!
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  • From ANON - The Queen of the Darkness on June 05, 2005
    Very good! I'm liking the story a lot. I'm very interested in seeing what's going to happen, esp. when Harry realizes who this is happening to and when Draco realizes someone is listening...well reading. :) As for a rape scene...it could work. The process of writing and reading it may be benifical to the two...Draco would probably (imho) be more likly to write about it than talk to anyone and he would need to work through it...so it could work. As the writer though it is for you to decide. :) Keep up the good work and I look forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - veira on June 05, 2005
    good so far, please write more asap.
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  • From ANON - LPhoenix on June 05, 2005
    update update update!!! this is going to be good!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Lady X on June 05, 2005
    More!! Please more!!! really goodness!! Poor poor poor poor Draco I want to hold him and love him and make his pain go away... well maybe i wouldnt have myself take the pain away, that would be Harry's job, but i would definatly wanna see it. jk but yea up date soon please. I love this kinda draco thing you know? Lucius is a bad parent thats all there is to it. Maybe before Voldie came bach he was ok but not while Voldie is aoround he can't be. I just can't see that. Anyway update please please please.... I will make you some of my special home made cookies.
    Lady X
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  • From ANON - sbkar on June 05, 2005
    Point: Don't be afraid to use contractions. Say the dialogue out-loud to see if the cadence and rhythm flows.
    Without contractions, language seems very stilted, and all your characters aren't Professors or Lucius Malfoy...
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  • From ANON - Alexa on June 05, 2005
    Wow! A new chapter already - Yey!
    I don't feel a need in a rape scene, but if you want it - o.k.
    Get to the talking!!!! :-)
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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on June 05, 2005
    If given a choice.... no rape scene. My imagination does plenty. Feel for Draco though. What happens when he sees the "hello"? Can't wait for chapter 3!
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  • From ANON - Kristina ^^ on June 05, 2005
    Mmm, lovely chapter, and definantly a good girl in doing so. I enjoyed this chapter, much. I wish I could write as good as you. Maybe...lessons during free time? xD Much love.
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  • From ANON - YamiNoWedge on June 04, 2005
    I'm reviewing. Does that mean you'll update soon? Because I want you to. Happy Writing.
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  • From ANON - Missi on June 04, 2005
    I have a few questions, but that's to be expected when I've only read one chapter. Hopefully some of them will be explained soon. The most pressing question is--does Draco KNOW that Harry can read his diary? Otherwise, I really like this story, so please don't feed me (or my review *perish the thought*) to the monkeys!! And here I thought I had the only domesticated flock in the US...
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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on June 04, 2005
    Did Draco send him the journal? And if he didn't does he know Harry has the other one? Why hasn't Harry written back? Can't wait for chapter 2!
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  • From ANON - sbkar on June 04, 2005
    Ducks...proofread for yourself. Self-editing isn't a chore; we all have to do it. You've got a good basis here...You caught my interest. Now, build on it with just a bit more editing/spell-checking, and you'll be scot-free!!!
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  • From bookwyrm378 on June 04, 2005
    A very good beginning. I don't mean to be rude, but does your computer have spell check? I noticed some mistakes with that. I'd be glad to beta for you if you need one. I do like the story itself, so please update soon. :)
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  • From ANON - Alexa on June 04, 2005
    It's a VERY good begining.
    And it's daring, because many writers threaten with giving Draco to Voldy, but most avoid it. So, making it reality and dealing with it is good.
    I also like the way Draco treats the situation - with both pain and some strenght of will. And how he didn't fight/found a way to fight being given away, and how he is trying to stay strong in his predicament... Really good. Very well writen diary entries, you provoke a good gut reaction.

    Now I wonder how Harry will procede and respond. There is such a contrast right now between their situations... Maybe Harry could tell Draco about some fun stuff, once in a while, so that Draco remembers that there is something outside of his suffering?

    Please update soon - I want to read Harry's responce.

    P.S.: If Harry were a bisexual, where would Molly put him... ? :-) Oh, and you seem to be daring to let Harry have fun with gender roles (Hermione's clothes...) - that's cool! :-)
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