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By : vertejaune
  • From ANON - JTBJAB on June 08, 2005
    Please update soon!

    This is really interesting!
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  • From ANON - Pen to Sword on June 08, 2005
    This is a very good story. I am looking forward to seeing what Hermione does. Maybe she should read a bit more of the diary before just going off on them. I'm not saying she shouldn't just go off on them. I think that several people need to go off on those to men. Ergh. They make me sick. I was wondering, could you possibly email me directly or post it WIKTT when you update? I would like to know when you do so I can come read it as fast as I can.

    Love your story,
    Pen to Sword
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  • From ANON - Susan on June 08, 2005
    That kid has dealt with some serious shit. What a crap life. I feel terrible that Hermione is being sucked into Laura's delusional world. When is reluctant hero Snape going to appear? Keep going with this, please. Thanks for the new chappie. I personally cannot figure out which of her abusers is the papa, but am betting on her loving brother. Looking forward to chapter 4.
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  • From ANON - ishfet on June 08, 2005
    You're trying to suggest that Hermione is in anunequal relationship with Severus by contrasting it with the relationship betweem Gully and the student. However, the analogy won't hold up because Hermione is Severus' apprentice and not his student which moves the relationship from teh abusive one between student and teacher to the merely unwise one between employer and employee.
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  • From ANON - Miari on June 08, 2005
    Oh gods! NOW you have me wondering if the father isn't in on the abuse of this poor stunted child as well. The neglect is obvious, given that she'd no records of routine checkups and that the father took her out of St. Mungo's even though the medi-wizard was reluctant to let her leave. Given that his son was abusing the girl, the mother has been in St. Mungo's since the girl was 3, and his aparent neglectfullness of her... *sighs and shakes her head* At this point it would not surprise me if the father weren't abusing one or both of the children (perhaps where the brother, Davy, got the idea?). Sorry, I guess I've seen too many episodes of Judging Amy. By the way, the squib comment by the brother was just an unfounded insult, right? If the girl actually were a squib, she wouldn't be going to Hogwarts.
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  • From slygriff21 on June 08, 2005
    This is definately an interesting story so far. I hope you will be updating it again and soon.

    Tiffany
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  • From ANON - nightowl on June 08, 2005
    Hello,

    this story is more than interesting cause you take a point most of the other stories didn
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 07, 2005
    u need to bring sevvie into the next chappy
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  • From ANON - Miari on June 06, 2005
    As someone with a very suspicious mind, a checkered past, and a working knowledge of how older men can warp a teenage girl's mind, it has been obvious to me that the father of the "bathroom baby" was Gully since about the second diary entry mentioning him. Then there's the inappropriate touching (fondling her tits) while insulting her (weight comments)... I've known men like that. First they tear down what little self-esteem a girl has and then take advantage of that weakened state later with a turnaround in outward behaviour. Sorry, this tale has lots of my "buttons" in it. Good progression thusfar, however. As to how immature the girl is/was about sex... I have NEVER understood parents of female children who do not at least give the child "The Talk" upon the girl's reaching of menarche. Sorry, another of my "issues". I eagerly await the next installment. By the way, is the girl really as vapid as the diary entries make her seem? Or is she, because it is intended for her eyes only, just being "simple" to vent quickly in privacy? Sorry (again) for the quasi-rant:)
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  • From ANON - lovethelab on June 06, 2005
    Wow, powerful stuff. I really want to see where you go with this story!
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  • From ANON - Mswigglesworth on June 06, 2005
    Not to blackmail us? If this is why you write then you are doing it for the wrong reasons. I liked your story, but after reading your A/N I don't care if you finish it or not.
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  • From ANON - auntbecky on June 06, 2005
    no........no........NOOOOOOOOOOOO! Write more please! We'll be good i promise. Seriously, i thought you have a really good start.
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  • From ANON - Miari on June 06, 2005
    A quick follow-up: Perhaps, given the immature reactions of the girl as written in the diary entries, this incident will prompt Hogwarts to have a mandatory sex-ed class (paying special attention to contraceptive charms and/or potions). Hmmm... maybe that would work better as classes, a girls' class and a boys' class. This would enable those shy about asking questions in front of the opposite sex to ask freely. Also alternating teachers (a male and a female) in both classes would be a good thing so the students could, by turn, ask a member of thier own sex and find out what the "other side" thinks/feels about a given topic. Sorry, I am babbling now. Great start to a story:)
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  • From ANON - Miari on June 06, 2005
    First off, how old was Hermione (including time turner usage added in) when her relationship with Severus was consumated (if it has been)? Secondly, I can't decide which "Gully" deserves more (along with young Stuart)... Azkaban, quick merciful death, or slow torture till he/they beg for death only to then be killed or thrown into Azkaban. Was the girl able to hide the pregnancy due to her "fat" and loose student robes? How premature was the baby (if you need info on premies, feel free to ask me as my own child was 6.5 weeks premature) and how does s/he fare? This is too heavy of a start not to follow up quickly with an update!
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  • From ANON - lemonade on June 06, 2005
    Well, I like the idea of Hermione seeing her relationship from a different view. I read the diary entries and they make her seem much younger than 16. Perhaps it is supposed to be casual entries, or her abused/neglected mind has been stunted, but my ten year old son writes like that, so I have a hard time picturing her as 16. (well, he doesn't talk about breasts ;D ) Still.. you have an interesting angle, I'd like to see what you do with it.
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