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Reviews for Department of Mysteries

By : mione
  • From ANON - Anon on September 24, 2006
    I like that you brought a bit of realism in by having Harry upset over the murder of 13 people..even if they were "evil" You might want to add in some snarklyness that we love about Snape. It is part of his personality after all, he can be kind and stil sound sarcastic at the same time. You went from him being in teh hospital wing to him being in class..care to explain that a bit more? I hope you give us more chapters soon.
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 24, 2006
    I have only read the first chapter so far...i plan on reading the rest but you really need to work on your seplling, especially on characters names. Heh i know i'm one to talk..but then again i am not a writer..
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  • From ANON - jw on January 08, 2006
    i like it hope to read more
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  • From ANON - jw on January 08, 2006
    i like it hope to read more
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  • From ANON - momoko on January 08, 2006
    good story
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  • From ANON - Buckbeak on November 16, 2005
    Oh, good start. Please keep it up. You do have some small technical issues, but don't let anyone discourage you. I'll be looking for updates. Stick with it!
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  • From ANON - cdkobasiuk on November 14, 2005
    aw ratz ya left me hanging. I am very intruigued.

    cdk
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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on November 14, 2005
    Oh can't wait for chapter 2! Please let me know when you've updated!
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  • From on November 14, 2005
    wow ^^ it surely improved since the intro ^^ keep up the good work ;)
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  • From ANON - MyGildedCage (on ff.net) on July 23, 2005
    The concept and the way you are going about are both nice. my only quams are that you need a beta reader and its spelt Magonagal... look up the spelling please. Also this intro was horribly short. Ptologues aer normally atleast 3 pages and chapters can be from anywhere around 5 pages to 100. I find when I write it is good to set a goal for the length of all chapters. It makes a more consistant story and easier to read.
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  • From ANON - Jessie on July 21, 2005
    Sounds awesome so far, one thing though work on Differentiating thoughts from Spoken words
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