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Reviews for Unleashed - Book 1

By : loola
  • From slygriff21 on October 05, 2005
    INteresting? How can the dead come back to life? I can't wait to read more.

    Tiffany
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 04, 2005
    Good Chapter but i hate cliff hanger.. please update as soon as possible..
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  • From ANON - Kathryn on October 04, 2005
    brilliant! :)
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  • From ANON - calamitysandra on October 04, 2005
    You have got me hooked!

    I really like the way you write and develope the characters.

    Please update soon!
    Sandra
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  • From ANON - Severessa Snape on October 04, 2005
    Oh my God this is WONDERFUL and so close to Halloween, too! How nice ....
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  • From ANON - hi on September 23, 2005
    great
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 20, 2005
    Where have you gone???.. please post its killing me : (
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 11, 2005
    PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 28, 2005
    Love it please update soon
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  • From slygriff21 on August 20, 2005
    Great chapter 4! I love it! I hope you will be updating again and soon!

    Tiffany
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  • From ANON - curls on August 18, 2005
    Very good beginning. You captured the mayham and irritability of the airport perfectly. You do an excellent job with your descriptions of places. I can't wait to read the other posted chapters. Now, the criticisms. Please explain why Hermione and Snape are travelling by airplane and not floo,portkey,or broom. Please provide an explanation for why Snape is so comfortable doing things the muggle way. As Snape would say," Remeber you are a witch." Why did they have to carry their luggage; wouldn't they have shrunk it at least and put it in their pockets? Although I like the sound of the word tinkle, it refers to a sound not a feeling. Consider changing to tingle or tickle. Also, I think you should re-work Snape's explantion for why he could magically put away their clothes but she couldn't perform more advanced magic. At least change the phrase "big magic." My biggest peeve so far is Hermione's attitude. This just seems so out of character compared to cannon. I just don't buy that after being the smart one, the brains,the bossy one, and spying for the order, that Hermione really just wants to give up control to have a man solve all of her problems. I also didn't understand why,in the taxi, he referred to Hermione as a tramp. Where did that come from? Overall, I like this story and can't wait to read the rest, but I hope you take a more critical examination of your characterizations of the Hermione and Snape.
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  • From ANON - Killer Kadoogan on August 18, 2005
    I'm sooo glad you finally updated! Damn real life for it's untimely intrusions! I am enjoying your story very much, it's great writing! Hope you can update soon as possible- maybe you can just barricade yourself away for awhile! That would be so nice, but very unrealistic, I know! Keep up the writing, dearie! Tengo que irme! Salud! Killer K
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  • From ANON - Bree on August 18, 2005
    UGH! I was so bummed when i finished and realized there was no "next chapter" button. I hope that you plan to update this story. I love the way you have the two interacting - so fiery and passionate. Wonderful and I cannot wait for more!!!
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  • From ANON - firewall on August 17, 2005
    Well, Snape put his foot in it didn't he? Of course, after the names and comments he made to her, I can't say I felt much sympathy. Thanks for the update, hope tere is another one soon.
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  • From ANON - firewall on August 15, 2005
    Well, heck! You've got me hooked. I hope you are a quick updater...I need to know the bad news. Soon I hope.
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