Reviews for No Longer HelplessBy : DB2020 |
Awesome adventure and great Dramione. I love the new creature (angelus) and your unique take on vampires
I was with you all the way up to chapter 29. I loved the fact that you didn't have Draco declare his undying and long suppressed love for Hermione. I loved the fact that you subtly developed their relationship - though it was obvious where it was headed. I really liked that there was no attempt to throw them in bed, then have the regret, and inevitable how-do-we-cope-with-this that seems to be prevalent in a lot of Dramione stories.
Then, suddenly, with no prior build-up, Hermione's talking about revenge. Had you built this as an undercurrent throughout, the sudden inclusion of her intent to seek vengeance for her parents' death would not be quite such a hindrance to my suspension of disbelief. As it is, the only indication I had that you intended to revisit her parents' horrifying demise was the statement made by 'the Angelus' in her last visit to Draco that she needed to let her parents' death go and move on.
It wasn't something you'd touched on for quite a while - the story had moved beyond that point. So I was rather taken aback when suddenly Hermione's talking about revenge. I'm not saying that she shouldn't have had some further reaction to their deaths (I was rather expecting there to be some climactic moment of taunting at her next meeting with Bellatrix, much like Harry in the Half-Blood Prince). But I was not expecting this, nor does it seem to fit at all with how the story was progressing.
The sudden diversion to this theme derailed me, as far as reading the story. I'm not sure I can make it through another chapter (I skimmed 30, and have not yet touched upon 31). I daresay I'm too curious to see if you ever answer the questions about Draco's motivations and Moody's affinity for him (which you've only thus far alluded to) to just let the story lie without finishing it.
I will say that I was enthralled by the tale; creature fics are rarely completed for this 'ship, and this one was progressing very nicely.
Regardless, thank you for sharing the story. Happy writing to you.
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