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By : Vingilot
  • From ANON - Seulwolfe on October 14, 2005
    if you're gonna pull in the students... a place where they can study... as well as eat... hip enough to draw in the kids and young adults... and older ones... maybe even a deli and maybe in the evening time... wine and what not.. for the older ones
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  • From ANON - Missi on October 14, 2005
    Ice Cream Shop, or maybe just something called, like, Dorian's Desserts, where he has candies and cookies and cakes and ice cream and anything else you could imagine, but there are tables and coffee and stuff, so it has a Starbucks feel. Sell sandwiches or something, too, and the older students could go down there everyday to do homework and take younger sibs on weekends or something. Maybe have bookcases everywhere for reference or enjoyment and have him helping students with their homework, getting to know them......I'm getting WAY too into this, I'm sorry. You did ask, though. Thanks for this amazing chapter, I can't wait for the next one!!
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  • From Teirnia on October 14, 2005
    First I'd like to say I'm enjoying your story. I haven't run across another quite like it and I check for updates every night. Second ideas for a shop. How about a bookstore with a nice comfy cafe area where patrons can read and enjoy something to eat and drink? They could even have some copies of magazines, newspapers and a variety of books available to read on the spot for those who might be a bit tight financially. I would think that they could spell such items to be impervious to food and drink stains. If they made sure that there were a variety of items available to read such as Quidditch books and magazines, things geared towards girls who are into fashion etc and anything else they can think of it could be quite a pull for students. Add books, magazines and maybe even book club and or debate nights geared towards aduldts and they could get quite a cross section. Shoot having bookclubs and or debate times for different ages and you could introduce ideas to students. On this they would have to be careful not to arouse suspicion of course but that should be doable. Any debate must have both sides presented to be balanced so even if only the "good" side seems to win the full set of ideas get presented.

    Well I'll head out now, looking forward to more.

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  • From ANON - Max on October 13, 2005
    Great story! As for store. Well how about a store that sells alchol to kids or something that would get the kids to come into the store, as well as force them to talk to Dorian. It could also be a store that has lots of contests with prizes to ensure both the town's ppl and students spend time thier. As for what type of store, well he could buy out the three broom sticks, or run a prank store.
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  • From ANON - saske\'s iris on October 13, 2005
    hummm Sounds like everyone goes to get butterbear and not much else, so someplace to eat would be good! Maybe an american food restaurant that would attract a younger target audience so harrydorian would have a chance to "corrupt" the youth. I love the relationship you created for sev/harry especially keeping it a secret from all the other peoples since its fun hearing them speculate on what the hell happens behind closed doors (giggleing).

    Keep up the good work I'm sure whatever store shop you use will be great!
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  • From ANON - Bella the Dark on October 13, 2005
    Heyla, I would love to say what a wonderful job you've been doing. I really don't mind the time between updates because the work you've put into your fic shows, it's well thought out and clear and consise and your characters are pretty close to canon considering the situation you've put them in. Lovely work! Also, I'd like to suggest a sports bar type of pub/resturant, it's something that would attract older kids and young adults. They would be interested in sports and the ambance would be good for someplace for them to hang out.
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  • From ANON - Adia on October 13, 2005
    No worries about updating more often- you do a lot better than most authors! I LOVE Your story and check for updates all the time. I am excited to see where it is headed!

    -Adia
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  • From ANON - dmalfoy on October 13, 2005
    How about a muggle clothing store? Kids love to shop for clothes. It could have everything from preppy to gothic to attract all types. By the way, loving the story.
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  • From ANON - gypsy rhodes on October 13, 2005
    As always, great work!! I love this story!

    Hmmm... What kind of shop? Something kids, mudbloods, half-bloods and purebloods alike would enjoy... There may be a select audience desired, but the shop would have to attract all to prevent drawing attention, and it must encourage lingering... An arcade? A trendy clothiers? A coffee house or ice cream parlor (but most of the time they're in school, it's cold)? Got it! A shop that specializes in music, wizard or muggle convert to wizard. Posters and related books and such, could work their way in, too. That would provide a medium for getting the msg. out wide scale, and yet only visable to certain eyes... Subliminal stuff... Quidditch would be great, but it is too much like Harry. Dumbledore would watch it, as it would be of interest to Harry. In fact, it would be of interest to most guys, but only a few girls, and Voldie seems to run short on female soldiers. Any way, that's my two cents worth.

    Keep up the great work!
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  • From ANON - ann on October 13, 2005
    how about a jokeshop. then you could inclued the twins maybe
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  • From ANON - Ferball on October 13, 2005
    How about a malt shop. You know... Girls in short skirts on roller skates, malts, milkshakes, rootbeer floats, smoothies, soda fountain (with lots of different flavors), ice cream, cakes...etc... I think it'd be interesting. It's definitely give the students something to talk about, and talk with him about. It'd be something they'd've never seen.
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  • From ANON - Hambares on October 13, 2005
    Loved this chapter! It was interesting to see the conflict Harry had trying to be a leader and please Severus. As to the type of shop...maybe a coffee shop. What better to attract teens?
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  • From Sylvanus on October 13, 2005
    Great as always!
    I want to know more about Remus and Sirius... and how did he know about Harry-Dorian true parentage
    And as for the shop... How about a coffie shop which is also a bookshop or poetryclub...^_^
    Anyway... Keep it up!!

    UPDATE SOON

    Syl
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  • From ANON - lazy cat on October 13, 2005
    imthiking like a cafe into a shop/bookstore or store withthings forall occasions or something of the sort but the cafe has to be inside
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  • From ANON - PJ on October 13, 2005
    This is a great story!! For the shop/pub idea I was thinking along the lines of maybe a bit of both. A place that sells food & such but also has a bit of like a 'gift shop' that sells a variety of things. Or kind of like a 'sports bar' theme where they sell food but have like Quiditch stuff hanging on the walls... you know little flags, pics, broom sticks. Maybe some pic & stuff from when quitditch first started... how the snitch came to be in the game.... things like that.... the first model of broom used in quiditch... some quiditch trivia. Of course it would have to have good food so it would draw in those students that aren't that big of quiditch fans. Maybe the place could have more then one theme like one area be quiditch another be I dunno magical creatures? Or have it relate to the subjects at the school... little known facts that way it would be more of a reason that it was opened in Hogsmeade instead of Diagon Alley. Or little known facts about the magical world.... that way it would kind of start the "education" they would talking about. Just some ideas hope I didn't confuse you.
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