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Reviews for First Feelings

By : lornder
  • From WaywardSon on November 26, 2007
    Very nice One-shot, The true essence of a shag and run, I wonder what will happen when he wakes and has to explain to whoever why he's in the common room all exposed. Good fic keep em coming...er no pun intended.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 15, 2007
    The scenario is interesting. The rest is utter crap.
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  • From ANON - cat on December 16, 2005
    People's comments ought to come with a disclaimer that they aren't always accurate or even coherent. Some of the criticisms of your story are just plain moronic.

    I actually think that you have promise as a smut writer. Not so much the plot maybe, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. PWP can be very, very good, and your sex is inspired. You just need a really good beta. There's no shame in that. Lots of us do. I depend on my beta. I LOVE my beta. Without her I would turn out nothing decent.

    Lots of people take this too seriously, and lots of people are incredibly rude in their reviews, probably because they have never written anything themselves, have no life outside of fanfiction, and have an over-inflated sense of self-importance. Don't let it bother you. I enjoyed your fic. No, it wasn't perfect, but it was very enjoyable, and you have some really hot ideas. So thanks.
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  • From ANON - Dave on November 18, 2005
    HAHAHAHA fell asleep on the chair... aha i'm tired... AHAHAHAHAH on the chair how pathetic... AHAHA ... chair him sleep on. Damn i'm thirsty to, i wonder whos gona wake up first and see harry... oviously not herm ... "i put those ...'s alot" .... i'm to tired and careless to put something else... HAHAHAHAH FEEL ASLEEP ON THE CHAIR AHAHA!! AAAAAAHHHHHHAAAAAAHHHHHHHAAAAHHHHA I like to move it move it, i like to move it move it, i like to MOVE IT.
    ozzy crazy train BEYAW... good story, it seemed that herm had done it before. tho.
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  • From ANON - I hate you on November 03, 2005
    1Hermione would not do that
    2she might but not that way
    I HATE YOU YOU FUCKEN PUSSY GIVE HER A BAD NAME
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 02, 2005
    so friggen good but Harry probably has a 10 inch cock
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  • From ANON - someone on October 28, 2005
    a majority on the words i had to look up in the dictionary, you illiterate prick, nice smut, bad spelling.
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  • From ANON - chitoryu12 on October 27, 2005
    It has some potential, but script format isn't good for sex scenes. Also, you should work on your spelling, and try and make it less like a fantasy(like Hermione having huge tits) and more realistic(in reality, Emma Watson is more along the lines of a B cup).
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  • From ANON - coco puffs on October 25, 2005
    that was pretty good :D
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 23, 2005
    Oh My...
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 23, 2005
    Oh My...
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  • From ANON - Catie on October 16, 2005
    sorry very poorly written.
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  • From ANON - DarkWizardKiller on October 12, 2005
    Umm...I your gonna write smut, at least pass English class first. Wasn't even remotely interesting or sexy or erotic. I hope you invest in a dictionary and read your grade school English primer!
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  • From ANON - Erik Starmstyr, Angel of Innocence and Honour on October 11, 2005
    Ok... sorry if this sounds mean, but could you learn how to plot, write in character, and learn how to spell, before you put anything on here?
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  • From lornder on October 11, 2005
    HAHAHA I wrote this but there was no reviews :( i guess writing isnt one of my better qualities! lol o well better luck on my other ones i hope. lol
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