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By : MsMatty35

From ANON - Robyn on December 29, 2005
Another GRAND story you've told us!!
A million thanks for doing what Rowling has not, and by that, I mean finishing off some pieces, and giving resolve to certain issues. Certain people.
With this one? You know, I had always wondered, that, "What if?" with Snape and Evans. This was told in a nice way, about who it was that did the deed, in telling Voldemort, and WHY (cause HELL yeah I wondered) Voldemort told Lily...."Step (move?) aside, you need not die." I was like, WHY would he say that, he always killed without any sort of remorse.
This is a nice chapter, to set aside in my head, that tells that 'untold' story.
I also love the touching way it ended with Snape holding close to Lily. And his thoughts of, "I do not deserve to hold her, to touch her". That was so sad, and not for one Moment do I not believe that's how he felt. Sorrow at having betrayed one of the Few people that ever showed him friendship without strings or devious plans behind it.
I ALSO (heh) love the part of where he ran past James body, showing nothing. ha! I mean, can you BLAME him? But it was a nice touch.
And I also loved hearing Lucius tell him, "Like you don't know who else had a child". He's so sly and wicked even in his bit parts. ha!!
Waaah! I have to go. I must finish so that I can read yours and Keelys' Prologues. ha! Then on to the main course!
Wonderful job you've done, Yet again! Thanks for sharing it with us!
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From ANON - kB on December 29, 2005
Hi Mattykins! sorry it took me so long to give you a proper review... you know, real life getting in the most pooish ways! Anyway, sorry again..

anyhoo... before I start, I just want to say THANK YOU for sharing with us your brilliance! I mean, I know I'm such an emotional piece of sap (if that makes any sense) but I just realized that it really is not so bad because it means that I am only human, and having such strong feelings makes me feel alive, and feel like I care, and that I have some sort of understanding and knowing that I'm actually not the cynical, cold-hearted person some of my friends think I am... hehehe... yeah, I'm pretty cynical if you don't know that!

ok, enough with the stupid ramblings.. sorry... just had to get that off my chest! *phew*

alrighty... this time I prepared myself NOT to cry because I really want to give you a proper review (although my reviews aren't really what you would call "proper")...

First off, this fic just gave me such chills, and right to the bone! I mean, it delivered great emotional aspects to it that your reader would certainly feel, well it did for me!

The fact that you talked about the prophecy here, incorporating that to what really is the main point of this story was so good! I mean really, it was great, and I can't think of anything better to tell you....

You wrote the characters so well, and I just loved how you wrote Voldemort and Lucius! Gave me chills man! Chills!

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I was sure that all color drained from my face, I certainly felt lightheaded and sick to my stomach.
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I know that this line doesn't seem like where one would catch one's eyes, but for me, it kinda did... reading that, for the oddest reason, I thought I felt it too... having the sick feeling to my stomach... I guess because right from the beginning you had Voldemort there, talking about the two boys... and then carrying on with Lucius, having that voice in him saying those things about the woman who just had a son... Mind you, I thought at first, could Matty be writing about Neville's mom? and who is this person whose ego is bruised? I mean I was sort of racking my brain for two minutes trying to figure out who this death eater could have been... but then it finally (LOL) clicked to me that it's Snape... BWHEHEHE... so anyway, well, I guess that's why I felt (kinda) sick to my stomach too... I was like, "OOh shit! I think I know where Matty is going with this" but I wasn't entirely sure...

Honestly, re-reading this fic while writing this review is getting quite hard, because it isn't easy for me to stay focused and separate my emotions and feelings... because I just love this fic so much... But in any case, I shall carry on... LOL (I talk to much!)

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He never understood my feelings for her, even though he was aware of them and keep them to himself. Oh, he understood that she was beautiful and why I would be physically attracted to her but not why I would love her. Her, a Mudblood, unpure, tainted, beneath me..... He never understood why I didn?t hate her, even after she rejected me, rejected my love. He never understood it because he, himself, had never let anyone like her inside his heart. She was everything good that I wasn?t, she made me want to be better. I even told that her that I would turn away from the darkness for her but she didn?t want that. She didn?t want me. At least not in that way. That hurt me even more. To know that she truly cared about me, about what happened to me and about my happiness but didn?t love me like I loved her. If she hated me, if I disgusted her, or annoyed her it would have been so much better. So much easier to deal with because those are all feelings that I knew how to manage.
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OK.... I know.... sorry but I just had to put that all there to let you know, that ALL OF THAT was so... I don't even know which word to use! Brilliant? Amazing? fucking good? (sorry).. I mean, this part broke me down... and right now, I am on the verge again... I just felt so bad for him that I want to give him a hug and tell him that it'll be ok.. that no matter what, life moves on... that he should learn to accept things as they are, learn from them, and don't dwell on the bad stuff.. that it should make you stronger, and become insightful and just be.. I know, easier said than done, but one ought to try, right? *sigh*

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She didn?t want me. At least not in that way.
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rejection is a bitch... and nobody wants to be rejected... and all that bit, well, you pretty much captured what a person would feel, think, or whatnot, in Snape that is.. UGH!!! MGM!!! you made me use 'MGM' and I haven't used it in a while! lol....

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Maybe I didn?t forget, maybe a part of me knew that it would be her son, maybe a part of me wanted to punish her for not wanting me, maybe I wanted to be the only one in control, the one that she would beg for help in the end... Just like Lucius said.
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I don't even blame him one bit for saying/thinking this... well because like I said earlier, rejection's a bitch... and it really hurts.. so again, BRILLIANT!!!!

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Don?t let turning myself in to Dumbledore be for nothing.
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one word... 'FUCK!' (with one bob of my head..) I don't know how else to explain my reaction with that one! honest!!!

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Pride that kept me from admitting that I had failed myself. Pride, because I didn?t want to let him see what I had become. I didn?t want her to see it.
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I wanted to smack him and then hug him right away! LOL it such a Snape thing to say... How can you write so well Mattykins? HOW???? You must have been SOOOO inspired eh!

You know, I thought it was so brilliant of you write that part when Snape saw the green lights, and he was asking those questions, and everything was just happening so fast, well because I thought they ought to... The way he couldn't move but then he thought, "MOVE!" that was excellent! I could so see it happening if it were canon!

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I saw James, and moved on. I didn?t want to deal with his death nor what it meant, if anything, to me.
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this left me curious... I mean I know Snape doesn't care about James.. but he still said, "I didn't want to deal with his death..." and that really left me curious... because Snape is human, and humans are complex... no matter how you say you don't care for a person, but in his case, James is so much a big part of his life, one way or another, I want to know what his TRUE feelings could have been... even with such hatred and all that stuff between them, I still wanna know... maybe I want him to just come right out and say, "Phew, glad he's dead" or ugh, I dunno... Snape is just... Snape! he's mysterious, and nobody REALLY knows what is inside that man's head (except for JKR probably..hehe) am I making any sense here? I'm probably talking gibberish.. sorry..

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If you leave all the darkness that surrounds you behind it can?t be for me Severus. It has to be because you want to leave it. Because you believe it?s wrong and are ready to make amends.
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AMEN! you are so right on for making Lily tell Snape that... I totally believe at what she said, and I wouldn't want a guy to leave the dark side just for me and only because of me... I mean sure it is rather flattering, that I could change one person into being on the good side, but that doesn't really change the fact that he doesn't entirely believe it's wrong...

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?You?re pregnant?? I said, taking a step away from her. It was as if a door had closed.
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or more like a slap on the face.. well for me that is... I can't even begin to imagine what he must have been TRULY feeling right at that moment.. all I know that it must have hurt so much... (okay, seriously, you are making me start to cry again!!! NOT FAIR!!!! ) FYI, another part that made me cry... coz just the fact that I can't even begin to imagine the feelings from Snape here just blows my mind away! I HATE BEING SO DAMN EMOTIONAL! UGH!

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I quickly removed my hand, I knew that I had no right being here with her, not now, not ever. I did this, I killed her. I robbed her of her life and her family. I left her son an orphan.
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just to let you know.... when I first read this, and when I got to this part, tears were FLOWING! crying like I'm going to produce a freaking river! NOT FAIR!!! (lol..) and I refuse to let it make me break down! no siree! nope. nada!

Oh the guilt, the anguish! Man... these stupid emotions can really fuck one up eh? DAMN! tsk tsk...

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?I am sorry.? I whispered, but my words were carried away by the wind. I was left there alone with her dead body, Unforgiven.
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I'm suprised he didn't off himself yet.. I probably would have if it were me... Kidding!!! but seriously speaking though, the amount of grief, guilt... not knowing the 'could have beens' and being left with nothing... just stupid feelings that will make you mental.. I am overwhelmed just thinking about it... I don't quite know how to grasp it..

anyway, this was quite an exhilarating experience... the amount of tension, angst, surprise, huge emotions is almost kinda like reading the HP series... I am truly, honestly blown away by the amount of emotion in this fic... I am surprised that I haven't had a heart attack yet! LOL! oh my poor heart! may be small in size, but I think it is strong enough (for now that is) to handle such sheer brilliance of things like this one! BWHEHE....

Matty, I hope you never get sick of me telling you how brilliant you are... not just with writing fics but also with everything else...

I don't know what else to say... oh, sorry about all the F words..
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From ANON - Mai on December 29, 2005
It's beautiful! Poor ol' Snape has to live with so much guilt now. No wonder why he's so crabby.
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From ANON - Keely on December 29, 2005
HOLY SHIT!

I honestly can not say a damn thing, I am so ... DAMN YOU! Why do you do this, you write these things to make me cry.

It is so lovely, so heart breakingly lovely and depressing.

I am just... speechless and we all know how hard it is to make THAT happen!

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From ANON - Marian on December 29, 2005
Petrified?! That one word sends chills up my back Matty. And the picture you
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From ANON - Sea on October 21, 2005
Sad but beautiful. Well done.
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