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Reviews for Harry Potter\'s Rise to Power

By : oldwolf

From ANON - jw on January 05, 2006
great update hope to read more soon
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From ANON - Sean on December 24, 2005
Can't wait for more, please keep up the good work and try to update this story as soon as you are able to
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From ANON - loneicedragon on December 23, 2005
please update soon!
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From ANON - Prince Charon on December 21, 2005
Very hot, interesting part.

More soon, please.
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From sasqch on December 21, 2005
Chapter 3

This was a nice plot advancement chapter. From the beginning scene with Hermione outlining the pros and cons of the different approaches to Harry's end goal to the eventual fallout at the Auror corps now that the Death Eaters have been eliminated to the idea of reaching out to the persecuted members of society such as the werewolves, you have done an excellent job of setting the stage and giving the reader a keen understanding as to exactly what is motivating the different players.

A couple of things stand out as very interesting and yet positive (to me) items. The first is Tonks. I am glad you decided not to have her be inducted into Harry's cadre of wives (at least not yet). This action immediately differentiates this story from the other Harry-Harem stories out there and prevents anybody from accusing you as just rehashing the same story as your last multi-chapter saga.

The second point was the Parkinson family; rather than have them be irredeemably evil; they are merely "dark" and self-serving. This in itself is not "evil"; it just makes them not on the side of "good". But given Harry's recent experience, he would feel more comfortable dealing with people who are open as to their desires and wishes. So for Harry to deal with them may seem odd at the surface, the Parkinsons, too, would find Harry's abrupt frankness to be quite refreshing. And even if their apparent bigotry might be real, and they would be placing their daughter in a position subservient to a "lesser" being (a muggle-born), she still is attached to the future leader and therefore would be better off than a majority of the populace.

Another very key event, although it had a left me feeling a little odd, was Hermione's actions against Pansy. By having her acting out on her own wishes and ideas when prepping Pansy for Harry's bonding, you explicitly show that even though Hermione had to be enslaved in order to be freed from the spells that Ron placed on her, her situation is completely different from Pansy or Ginny. With the latter two, neither one seem to be able to have the ability to have the initiative to act out on their wishes; I would guess that similar to "Sisters Black" they might have an innate connection to Harry's subconscious and will never be able to deviate from his wants. Hermione on the other hand, was "taken" with the desire that she be as she was before she was assaulted. This means that she is her own person, if only that she will make her decisions. As in the case with Pansy, she took it upon herself to make sure that Harry could not be accidentally bound to the witch. The reason this scene felt odd to me is two-fold. First - Hermione knows that Harry knows the limitations of the spells involved with the binding. So why would she think that he would be stupid enough not to bind Pansy to himself first? Second - Hermione's experience. As far as I remember, Harry hasn't even had vaginal intercourse with Hermione. Again, so why would she assume that Harry would do so with Pansy, especially given the ranking of the wives? The only assumption that I can come up with is that she is jealous, and that makes sense only if Ron took Hermione's virginity. If he did, she *could* be jealous of any other witch that Harry might have sex with. But again, as the rules of the spell are that the witch can bind the wizard through vaginal sex, and that Hermione stated that she knew that Ron was trying to bind her, it doesn't seem likely that Hermione would have let Ron take her virginity. Anyway, I would expect that Harry's anger at Hermione to pass -- it is an offence that is too minor to keep a grudge over.

As to upcoming scenes, I am looking forward to a few different events. The first is Harry's revenge on Voldemort's peace offering (By the way, thanks for the explanation on the quick death of the Weasleys. Hermione wanting it over quickly makes a great deal of sense). I would think that Harry has some serious issues to deal with given the assumed identities of the three Death Eaters. The other scenes I am looking forward to both deal with school. The first will be seeing the fallout over the shake-up of Dumbledore's sudden death coinciding with Voldemort's "fall". I would think the social structure of the school will be completely shot to hell. But more importantly will be the reaction to Harry and his newly required living arraignments. And who will be next on his list of girls to suborn into his power base

Chris
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From ANON - wouldn't you like to no on December 20, 2005
not bad, not bad at all.... a little sick, but NICE :P
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From ANON - Anon on December 16, 2005
more plz..
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From Muggleman on December 07, 2005
intresting story a wee bit disturbing but good none the less update doon
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From ANON - Liahm on December 01, 2005
Great Story keep up the good work
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From ANON - m on November 23, 2005
What's taking you so long?
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From otaku2525 on November 15, 2005
That was truly sadistic, of course in that kind of situation I would be as well
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From ANON - Sean on November 11, 2005
Can't wait to read more please post your newest chapter as soon as you can
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From ANON - chris on November 11, 2005
grate fic plz update
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From ANON - Spike of Doom on November 10, 2005
Im pleased that you posted an expescially long chapter! looking forward to the next one.
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From sasqch on November 09, 2005
Chapter 2

Okay, I like how you had the reinforcement of the truce between Harry and Voldemort shown. Harry's plan was elegant in its simplicity as well as showing his honesty in regards to his planned interaction with Voldemort. I thought Voldemort's concern of how his oath could interfere with Harry's plan for revenge on the Weasleys in turn showed his faith in the truce. Although there was one minor problem here: before going to the meeting, Harry tells Remus that when the meeting is over, he is going to go to the Burrow and extract his vengeance. But during his dialogue with Voldemort, Harry tells Voldemort that his Death Eaters will find the Burrow empty. And upon his return to Remus, Harry asks how the rescue/kidnapping went. Just a minor point, but it did cause me a little confusion during the meeting.

Harry's treatment of Ginny upon discovery just how evil she has been was a bit unexpected. I'm not saying she did not deserve it for her betrayal of both Harry and Hermione. Just that leaving her suspended by her broken limbs would be extremely painful and out of the blue. The level of violence leveled against her in that on scene seems odd when compared to the duration of punishment given to Molly and Ron.

Now, don't get me wrong. Molly and Ron's fates were deserved. And I have no problem with the end-result, but I guess I may be a bit more vengeful. It seems that neither one suffered enough. To clarify, Ron is mutilated and killed. Fine. But he had continually raped and brutalized his friend. He attempted to enslave her. Considering this, his death seemed to be excessively quick and therefore merciful. I do like that he continued his arrogance to the point of demeaning Hermione, even in front of Harry, even while bound.

And Molly was worse. She was responsible for her two youngest children's attitudes. She was also warping her husband. Upon revival, she railed against Harry and Hermione as being unclean. She begged her "pure" child to kill herself rather than be polluted by the lesser-beings. Yes, Harry killed her in a nice and gruesome manner. But again, given the level of pain (and on-going mental anguish) she was responsible for, the very short time of mental torment seemed to be much too kind. Granted the acidic tears were a nice touch, but it just came across as a minor inconvenience. Also, she again was livid at the idea of Ginny being with Harry. This attitude begs the question of why then was she allowing Ron to enslave Hermione? Ginny enslaving Harry is almost understandable, given his fame, money, and such, but it still goes against her character type given the arguments here at her death scene.

The one argument for the apparently quick kills is of course that Harry (and Hermione) have not yet gone completely dark yet. That they still have a streak of good within them. That the mercy they showed the two was the last glimmer of their former selves. I don't know; Harry has enslaved Ginny, made a deal with his parents' killer, plotted the killing and torture of the two Weasleys. Hermione brutally emasculated her rapist. So, why would they show the kindness of a quick death?

I do like that you had the Weasleys being split over Molly and the others actions. Rather that making the family unified in their attitudes, Arthur and the older sons were disgusted at the idea of the actions. I like this for two reasons. The first is that it does not completely remove Harry's support structure. If everything he believed in and all he trusted were taken away, he would be too unstable to be an interesting character. This way, he can begin to become a meaner, nastier character but still be a viable lead. The other reason is that it juxtaposed well against the Junior Auror (nice name, by the way) being the poster child for the less-polished members of the general public and their attitudes towards the non-pure bloods. Again, if every member of society was against Harry, it would not be believable enough to be interesting. This way, we see that the general consensus is, but that there are still those that are honorable.

I am curious as to Hermione's future. Harry had to enslave her in order to restore her. Yet, unlike the spell that was used against Ginny, Hermione appears to be her normal, uninfluenced self. So, I wonder if your use of the spell was plot device to help the two characters get around their previous defenses, as well as the ones that would have developed due to the summer's events. Normally, both would be leery of getting into a new relationship so soon after such drastic events, but here they have been forced to become intimate. This allows them to bypass any lingering doubts they may have about themselves. But, there could be other long term effects of the spell. For all we know, Harry may be influencing Hermione's thought patterns and decision making in a subtle manner. Which could accelerate her slide into the darker emotions and reactions than would have been foreseen. Or even something else.

All in all, a nice chapter. Like I said, I found the fates of Ron and Molly to be a bit too quick for my tastes given their actions. I may be a bit too blood-thirsty, but I am comparing the speed of their deaths to the amount of pain Harry has already inflicted on Ginny. I look forward as to the next steps in Harry's rise to power. I wonder what his plans are that he has Ginny getting back into the noose. And personally, as we have seen Harry be brutal to both Ginny and Molly, we have only seen Hermione truly get her revenge against Ron. Yes, she has used Ginny as her post-loo cleaner, but what about the beatings? I would like to see Hermione show just as tendencies just a evil/dark as Harry's. But that's just me.

Chris
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