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By : WillowSun
  • From ANON - angel on November 29, 2005
    ~sniff sniff~ man ...i feel sorry for mione and lucius..ans remus ... remus because of the miscarriage ... and i hope lucius come up with some this big and soon .... please update soon and later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - ancientgirl on November 29, 2005
    What a sad chapter. I hope Lucius is able to get himself together enough to go to her. And I hope she listens to him.
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  • From ANON - Melinda on November 28, 2005
    Its great!
    Update soon,ok?

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  • From ANON - storyfreak on November 28, 2005
    Love it!!!
    Hermione/Lucius, Ginny/Remus, Draco/Harry!!!
    Could this story get any better!!!
    Only if it had Marcus and Oliver it could.
    Muse talking sorry.
    Love the story and hope that you update it soon.
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  • From ANON - Amethystique on November 28, 2005
    fan-flaming-tastic! More, More,More I NEED MORE!!!

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  • From on November 20, 2005
    I love Lucius/Hermione fics. so few compared to the Severus/Hermione fics. Please continue, I would love to read more.
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  • From ANON - Gaps of Misery on November 16, 2005
    No smut :( but nice, though. I like how you give us the background later than usual cuz it gets so boring with having that all the time in the first chapter. Besides, it was just great!! :)
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  • From ANON - JenKM1216 on November 16, 2005
    As I already told you, this is a great chapter. I just love the rants throughout. You are a gifted writer and I am honored to help you through this process. I can't wait to look over chapter four!
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  • From ANON - ancientgirl on November 16, 2005
    Cool chapter. Now, Lucius needs to get Hermione a huge ring and Hermione needs to stop dipping into the Absinthe.
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  • From ANON - angel on November 16, 2005
    i hope lucius ask mione to marry him... i love it please update soon ..keep up the awseome work and later for now

    angel
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  • From amanda20 on November 15, 2005
    I like this story and cant wait to read more
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  • From ANON - JTBJAB on November 14, 2005
    Interesting chapter - update soon, please!
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  • From ANON - thankyoupp on November 14, 2005
    Amazing! I like it very much!
    come on, expecting the next chapter!^-^

    thankyoupp
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  • From ANON - Hanna Delacour on November 13, 2005
    I'm normally a DM/HG fan but I've been expanding my horizons lately. I really like this fic and think it has a number of possibilities. I can't wait to see the direction you take this fic. Please continue.
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  • From ANON - FictionalBadGuyLover on November 11, 2005
    Lala,
    Personally, I didn't like it. It was too much smut. A really good story needs build up and time to grow on itself to make it more believeable. You gave some background on how he was alone and all and how he got into the Ministry of Magic, but it was all in one small paragraph. This scene would have made much more sense if you had AT LEAST five chapters in front of it. Try getting something going before jumping right into the sex, otherwise, it's tacky. Personally, I think the only time you can go right into a "sex scene" is if it is a one shot, and even then, it needs to be a well written, a believeable plotline, not just some jibber-jabber.
    I would love to continue reading this if you put a little more into it. Good luck!

    Heidi Hoe
    Hobey-Ho
    FictionalBadGuyLover
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