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Reviews for Discovering the Hidden Heart

By : belladonnacordial
  • From Riskybusiness on October 31, 2015
    I would love love love to see this story finished! Please don't leave it!!
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  • From ANON - hermioneSNAPEfan1983 on February 05, 2014
    Dont you mean She wanted to curl her arms around SEVERUS (not Lucius) and sleep then. His chest smelled like sun, lemons, bay leaves, and wealth. She wanted to pull his cloak over her head to filter out the stink of war, the mingled scents of blood, smoke, and feces, and to employ the stillness of his chest for a pillow. She wanted to use a cooling enemy to shut out the death all around her.
    you said by mistake that she wanted to hug etc Lucius when i know you meant SEVERUS, pease FIX that BIG mistake as it VERY confusing!!!! DUH!!!


    Hermione wasn't exactly sure what happened after that. She came to her senses when Snape removed a large rock from her hands and would not give it back to her no matter how much she begged. That was when she noticed the mushy mess she had made of Lucius Malfoy's skull. She wanted to curl her arms around LUCIUS and sleep then. His chest smelled like sun, lemons, bay leaves, and wealth. She wanted to pull his cloak over her head to filter out the stink of war, the mingled scents of blood, smoke, and feces, and to employ the stillness of his chest for a pillow. She wanted to use a cooling enemy to shut out the death all around her.


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  • From ANON - kitty on November 28, 2009
    I shall start by saying that this is the most inventive and well written piece I have had the pleasure of reading, as well as the most frustrating lack of continuance the likes of which I haven't seen since the ever memorable Ms_Figg. includes believable post-war characters in the familiar scene. although no standard chronology was presented I could have cared less. (A high complement from me.
    My only complaint (and I say this while mentally throwing previously bribed imaginary chocolate frog at your head, as well as standard mob tomatoes and cabbage)was this; WHY DID YOU STOP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    [five minutes later]
    How could you!!!!! I'm upset and hurt and rather shocked!
    That said with all the seriousness of an avid bookworm who was just cut off from one of her new favorite authors.
    I beg of you to continue the amazingness that is your story.
    I will even review EVERY new chapter just for your!!!!
    PLEEEASSEEEEEEE (holds plot bunny)How could you say no to this face???
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  • From MorwennaAmy on May 23, 2008
    I thoroughly enjoyed reading this story! You write both Hermione and Snape so well, whilst the addition of a little shyness with humour makes him even more accessible. Their friendship seems genuine in its slow beginnings and his justification for it; I'm very interested in the magical parasite and how that will affect their relationship.
    The only negative aspect is that it can be quite difficult to establish who is speaking when they get into a long conversation; although the lack of identification of speech shows that their conversation is unstilted, it would be helpful every now and again.
    Fantastic!
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  • From ANON - Ariathel on March 25, 2008
    Really good story. You have a way of writing what I have termed "Snape-sarcasm" in my own mind. I enjoy reading it, and while I haven't the wit to come up with it, it's always refreshing to find an author that does. Hopefully you will someday pick up where you have left off.
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  • From ANON - keri on September 30, 2007
    I love this story, and I know you haven't updated in awhile, but I just wondered if you would consider continuing it.
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 17, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From gwenivere73 on July 01, 2007
    I Loved it, I'd propose but I think my husband would be upset. All I can say is update soon please.
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  • From ANON - Christa on May 21, 2007
    Wow, I love this story. This is amazing. Your dialogue is brilliant a I've been waiting for an update in probably months. I really have to put this away sometimes and forget about it becuase I want to kick and scream again to get you to update quicker. I truly hope you update again because i cannot wait until something happens. The twists and turns keep me on edge and the promise of romance makes this so exciting. A slow dance always got me when it came to love. A time for the characters to fall for eachother. Death and romance. Oh please, I beg of you write MORE!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 23, 2007
    wow! amazing.. i cant wait for more.

    pleaseee updaye soon!!
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  • From ANON - doki doki on January 04, 2007
    All I have to say is:

    "After we play we will switch positions to give you practice playing on both sides."
    Double entendre, much?

    Okay, I'm a liar! That's not all I have to say!
    I absolutely love this fanfiction! It's wonderfully written, and intelligently, too. Somehow, it just seems like if Hermione and Snape ever got a chance to just get together and talk, this is how they would eventually become friends.

    I can't wait for an update! You're amazing!
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  • From ANON - Alvin on January 02, 2007
    I love this story. I especially like how it's slowly building, I can't wait for the next update.
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  • From SnapesSweetheart on December 27, 2006
    I have enjoyed reading your chapters very much. It is exactly what I would expect from Hermione and Snape if they were in that situation. You are a very talented writer and I thank you for the entertainment. I can't wait until your next chapter comes out.
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  • From ANON - sinbad on December 25, 2006
    Very nice. I think this story is moving along nicely, slow on the romantic buildup, but enough action to keep you interested. Nice piece of work.
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  • From ANON - Nightmare on December 23, 2006
    I remember this song... it's a good story, which I am enjoying.

    You asked for crits. Chapter 4, in Snape's library, you mention "ancient tombs"; suffering from a Homophone.

    TomBs are for burying dead people, TomEs are books. Both are pronounced the same. Hope this helps.
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