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By : AraLuna
  • From ANON - Kaye on January 07, 2006
    I'm sorry but you have failed to convince me that you are a 12 year old posing as a 24 year old. That was a tad too erotic to pull off as a 12 year old, and this story is a bit to literary based.

    Sarcasm put aside though... that was hot. Very, very, very nice. I loved that Draco was able to hold back, as interesting it would be to have them shag right there in carriage, I suppose it wouldn't be very appropriate. Excellent chapter. I loved it. Don't worry, I have the upmost confindence in you that you will manage to keep writing this story. Excellent. I can't wait for me.
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  • From ANON - kris on January 07, 2006
    I see nothing to complain about in your erotic prose. It is actually quite good! Keep up the great work! (And please update more often if possible!!!!)

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  • From ANON - soph on January 07, 2006
    great instalment... surprised there wasn't a footnote for "teddy and jo" :)
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  • From ANON - TNgirl on January 07, 2006
    Beautiful chapter!!! If I was Hermione I'd have said screw the Fred and George, take me Draco!!! Update soon!!!
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  • From ANON - oetbmalfoysmom on January 07, 2006
    YEA SMUT! I think my family might find it strange if I switched off the furnace in favor of air conditioning, but I swear the temperature in the house just went up about 20 degrees.... Nothing sexier than a man quoting a love poem while expertly catering to your needs~loved the verbal foreplay beforehand at the start of their date. I'm really enjoying Draco's POV throughout this story. Hopefully, you'll allow Hermione to return the uh, favor, uh soon.
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  • From ANON - Really? on January 07, 2006
    Absolutely brilliant! This is the best fan fiction story I have read in a long time. I love the back story with Bill breaking Hermione's heart and the dynamics of the Weasley family.

    Thank you such a high quality story (with correct spelliing and grammar, as well as a plot) I love the different references to great literature - well done!!!

    I am thoroughly enjoying the build up of Draco and Hermione's relationship, please keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Moreteadk on January 07, 2006
    Blixen! Yes! I love finding references to my own nationality in fics! :D

    This looks like it will be a wonderful story! It was recced on a Draco/Hermione yahoo group that I'm a member of as equal quality to "Dowry of a single galleon" and "Pansy's Volcano" with the dialogue and build-up of relationship. Naturally with such glowing recommendations it would have been a crime not to have a look at this story too.

    I am ever so glad I did. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this one!

    Moreteadk
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  • From ANON - Donavon on January 07, 2006
    I love reading your story, it brings back childhood memories in the books you mention
    Personal favourite, James and The Giant Peach. First serious look at WW1 was when my
    teacher loaned me All quiet on the Western Front, and then I read a book of poems from a Shropshire Lad
    about his time in the war. Both brought a lump to my throat. So I adore your story for the memories
    you invoke.

    Reveiw, I have to be honest you would know you hadn't wrote Sex scenes before, it didn't quite flow. However,
    it was a brilliant way of writing it, the Opera, Champs, Carriage Ride, I honestly think they would have gone
    the whole way. But perhaps that was wishful thinking.
    Still looking forward to more. Keep going with the naughties the more you write the easier it gets.
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  • From ANON - kat on January 07, 2006
    i love it!!!!! u should continue
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  • From ANON - b0rn s0 awed on January 07, 2006
    who are you trying to kid?!? that was HOT!!! they're not even doing the horizontal mambo yet, "just touching". although, i spotted a grammatical error back there. it's still damn good! update soon!
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  • From ANON - Phoebe on January 07, 2006
    You never cease to amaze me! Don't worry,
    It's not rubbish at all, you've written is wonderfully. =)
    Keep up the lovely work! ^^
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  • From ANON - tamargrl on January 07, 2006
    Hot stuff!
    Anyone who mistakes this for the writing of a 12 year old virgin can't read and must be blind with no imagination.
    Lovely, despite the wait. (As in update soon!!!!!) And you're building up anticipation for the climax (big bang?) is fun. (And my sense of humor is why I stick to reading and not writing.)
    Keep up the good work.
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  • From cruttan on January 07, 2006
    Okay, so I know I said I was going to sleep, but I have no self control so I came to read instead. It is now 3:30 and I'm getting up at 8 and I'm still awake and reading because your story is just THAT good!

    12 year old virgin my ass! I don't know where this insecurity comes from, but you must let it go immediately because that was aaeow;rtjqaekljfnl;sdcnv! *bangs keyboard in approval*

    VERY hot. You must not be nervous because I am proclaiming you a smut master. I loved it. You kept it very classy, which amazes me considering how very hot it was. I loved the use of the Neruda (which consequently, is the name of the composer of a trumpet concerto I'll be putting on my doctoral qualifying recital in a couple months). I love how helpless they are to each other's charms. You've really captured that breathless and intoxicating feeling of starting a new relationship with someone that you just can't keep your hands off of.

    I have this vision of Hermione in the pink dress, looking like she's ready for the Oscars. One of the things that I'm unhappy with in my own writing is the descriptions of their physical appearances. It's really hard to convey that type of stuff without turning it into a fashion show or makeover story. So often I think it just trivializes the story, but you did it quite well. It really added to the story rather than being random eyecandy of the imaginary variety.

    I'm probably being very nonsensical here as I am utterly exhausted and half asleep but I'm just so excited that I'm going to continue. If this doesn't make any sense, as I suspect is the case, let me know and I'll clarify when I'm NOT braindead.

    I love your Luna. I don't know if I've mentioned that earlier, but I LOVE her. What a great minor character, and I love the friendship that the two women share.

    The scenario involving Bill and the rings was heartbreaking. It rings very genuine as well. It was extremely well done and a very original take on the past heartbreak idea. Will there be more backstory? I'm really enjoying hearing what happened through Luna's eyes. I really do love the way you've written her and it was very touching to hear her recount the part of the story that she knew regarding Bill and Hermione.

    Oh wow, Ara. I'm sure there's more to say but my brain is totally shutting down at this point. What a wonderful chapter. I'm so glad that you are writing for the HP fandom and I can't wait for you to be on LJ!
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  • From ANON - :P on January 07, 2006
    Your story is awesome. Haha. I want more !
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 07, 2006
    awesome. no really it was really great.
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