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By : ras

From ANON - Lioncourt on January 28, 2006
This is very thouching. Please continue.
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From ANON - Blondel on January 25, 2006
Thank you for another excellent chapter! I truly love this story and what you've done with the characters. Well, obviously I don't love Lucius Malfoy (if you won't disembowel him, would you consider flaying him alive?), but I'm fascinated by your take on his character. I still haven't figured out whether he is abusing his son in cold selfrighteousness because the boy disappoints his insane expectations, or if he has a sadistic streak that makes him look forward to Draco making a mistake so he can punish him, or if it's a little bit of both. He makes a very good villain, in any case.

Snape is all that Lucius should be, but never will. He is strict without cruelty, not only demanding but also encouraging in his role as teacher, and most of all, he shows Draco that he loves him unconditionally. I really like the way you write him - I know he can be a right b***d to the Gryffindors, but I've always thought he had a protective streak a mile wide towards his Slytherin and a soft spot for Draco in particular. Making him the boy's godfather is fitting.

It breaks my heart to see Draco still excusing his father's actions, still protecting him by keeping silent about the spy spell Lucius put on him earlier, but it would be unrealistic if he just shrugged off the brainwashing of years in a couple of weeks. You've captured his progress very well by showing that he is starting to realise that Lucius' punishment of him is excessive in the extreme. He's also beginning to trust his godfather not to hurt him for making mistakes, and it's lovely to see him (and his grades) blossoming under Snape's care. See, I've always thought Draco is one of those children who thrive on positive attention, and if they can't get it they settle for negative attention instead. Knowing Snape, he probably hasn't gone easy on Draco in his tutoring, but he hasn't been stingy with his praise either, and it's doing the boy a world of good.

Dear Lord. I try to write a short thank-you note for a well-written chapter, and end up with half an essay instead. Well, at least it shows you that I am engrossed in your story and very much looking forward to next chapter!
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From catsintheattic on January 25, 2006
I like your story very much!

Draco's reaction to his father's brainwashing is so believable. I hope that Snape can help Draco to reevaluate his father's behaviour and name the deed by its real name - 'abuse'. Otherwise poor Draco will never be free from Lucius. *hugs Draco*

I like Snape here a lot, very grown up and caring. *hugs Snape* As was already pointed out by others: I, too, like that you don't slash Draco and Snape in this story. 'Sexual healing' after abuse doesn't work for me, especially not between an adult and a minor. It would simply be another form of abuse. (This is not an anti-slash comment! I like reading it in general. I only think the 'sex heals everything'-approach of many stories doesn't work too well.)

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter(s?). Thank you so much for sharing your story. *beams at you*
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From ANON - Alyson on January 25, 2006
Aw, how sweet. Poor Draco.You're story just keeps getting better Ras, one of the best I've ever found from the Harry Potter genre. A plot that is attempted by others and usually screwed up. I look forward to reading chapter 5, honestly I'm hoping for Severus to confront Lucius. It's so sad that Draco feels so ashamed and can't see that he isn't at fault. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - Jewel on January 24, 2006
I just found your story and I have to tell you it is really amazing. I totally agree with Daisy Mae about the abuse thing and I must admit it is one of the best written stories about this Draco/Lucius abuse topic I have ever read. You do not overact it but make it very very realistic. The way you portray Draco's feelings about the abuse and his desperate fight to gain his father's love and affection...
I also love the portrayal of Severus Snape very much...and what I love best about the whole story is that Severus Snape's comfort and love for Draco is purely parental and in no way sexual as in most other stories.
Keep writing, you are brilliant.
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From ANON - Blondel on January 16, 2006
I found your story by mere accident, but got hooked by it very quickly. Finding Snape/Draco stories where the relationship is purely parental is rare, which surprises me a little because I definitely get father/son vibes in all of their canon scenes, but finding one as good as yours is a joy indeed. Draco's desperate striving to meet his father's impossible expectations, and his fear and feeling of worthlessness when he fails almost broke my heart - I came close to crying when he kept insisting that his father was right to beat him half to death. Snape's affection for his godson as well as his growing horror and anger when he discovers the abuse Draco has been subjected to is also excellently written. He is exactly the father figure Draco needs - he is strict with the boy when he needs be, but also quick to show him unconditional love and appreciation, which is something Draco has rarely, if ever, had in his life before. Lucius, of course, is the ultimate b***d, and what makes him so terrifying is that not only does he himself believe it is right to beat a 12-year-old senseless for losing a quidditch match, he has carefully brainwashed his son to accept the abuse without complaining. Even after the horrifying beating he received, Draco's prime concern is that no one except Snape finds out what happened, because he thinks his father did the right thing.

It will be interesting to see what happens in the future - whether more people than Snape finds out about Draco's home situation, whether Snape can help Draco raise his grades (or even better, "un-brainwash" Lucius' teachings from him), and what Snape will do next time he meet Malfoy Sr. Personally, I vote for letting Lucius spend half an hour under Cruciatus, followed by a nice disembowelling spell... *eg*
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From ANON - Kayla on January 13, 2006
This is fantastic. I wish there were more stories like this.
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From ANON - Daisy Mae on December 29, 2005
Oh, and a couple other things.

1.) I like the Godfather bit. However, my godchildren call me "Aunt". Try using "Uncle". I don't agree with using "Snape". One's godchild would never refer to the godparent by the last name.

2.) I can see Draco as an abused child. Sometimes the most abused children are the ones the world never suspects. That's the true cruelty of child abuse. I say this from experience. Harry has no more reason to be seen as abused than any other character in these books. His is simply 'in-your-face'.

3.) I can see a Slytherin worrying about lying. Sometimes children do not have the chance to truly be who they are because they are too busy trying to be who someone else wants them to be. That fits with the concept of abused children. Many times the abused child will be in overdrive trying to please the abusive parent. This, too, I say from firsthand knowledge.

I have always thought that perhaps living with Lucius was not a boat floating down the middle of lemonade stream. I am pleased to see that you have a true awareness of what goes on in the reality of child abuse. The nuances and the effects on human behavior.

Now...more, more, more.
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From ANON - Daisy Mae on December 29, 2005
I'm addicted. I need my fix. MOre, more, more, please, please, please.

Where is this writer's award? Is there a Nobel Peace Prize for this wonderful person?
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From ANON - Alyson on December 27, 2005
I loved it! It was really interesting to get to see a different side of Snape who actually seemed to care about someone. I hope you update your story soon, looking forward to reading it!
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From thePrincesJewel on December 24, 2005
*cheers Snape's reaction* I feel awful sorry for Dray, though, having thought for so long that Sev knew and approved of what his father was doing. Poor bratling, he's got such horrid issues to work through, in addition to the healing he'll need.

*very long pause for thought* Um, what year was it that Buckbeak bit him? Cause, well... I do remember him being whiney about that for canon ages, and it would tie in well with this. I just dunno what year it was.

Exuse me, must go thump Lucius with his own cane. Repeatedly. *grins*
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From ANON - En4cerMax on December 24, 2005
Love the second chapter. I do hope you keep writing more. Is Severus gonna adopt Draco? That would piss off old Lucius. :) Keep going please?
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From ANON - Sarah on December 23, 2005
Hi! I just read this off the link on our list, Harry Potter H/C. I liked it a lot, once I got past the basic premise that Draco is abused (I don't really think he is in canon, but it's nice to imagine it. Well, not nice, but you know what I mean. We h/c'ers are twisted little things ). I think it's very well paced, the tight Draco's POV works very well - nice touch about his not knowing what the Room of Requirement was and assuming it was some kind of holdover Hogwarts torture chamber. I love the euphemism "spanked", and the gradual revelation of its meaning. His hatred of "Potter" is, I think, very realistic and I can actually sympathize with it (even though, in canon, Draco is my least favourite character and I think Harry has many more canon excuses to be seen as abused). I like the plausibility of Lucius being there and the logistics of avoiding people after the match, going to Snape's room, etc. If you go over this I would you suggest you replace about a third of the "his godfather"s with "Snape", and then another thirs with "Uncle Severus" or whatever he calls him. Theyt need cutting down as they stand. Also, I doubt that that a Slytherin would obsess over lying. he lies. It's convenient. Done deal. Finally, if you want a Brit- and general- beta, I'd be honoured. Email me if interested. Thanks for a luscious read!
Sarah
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From thePrincesJewel on December 18, 2005
Yikes. Now, how the devil am I supposed to figure out when this gets updated?
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From ANON - mira on December 16, 2005
Your story is really good. Please dont abandon it!
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