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Reviews for Inside the Blackest Heart (Edit, Not Update)

By : Ms_Figg
  • From ANON - denise on December 18, 2005
    interesting. i like the way u wrote the chp. seems a bit diff from the rest, btu in a good way. i think that for the next chp, you should start out where hermione commands snape to be gentle w/ her and stuff, and then she finds out that that isnt satisfying enough so he goes back ot his 'old way' but along the way he tunrs a tiny bit nicer, and then partway through their little session, she is summoned my the dark lord about somethign, so snape is once again left unsatisfied.....so, i think u should do somehting along htose lines, and incorporate a few more ideas.....update soon!
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  • From ANON - beeky63 on December 18, 2005
    Hi It's me again. I've just read some of the other reviews and I also like the option of Hermione taking another deatheater and Snape having to watch. That too could ignite the little spark of genuine affection via the jealousy route.
    Toodles.
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  • From ANON - Dea on December 18, 2005
    I agree with willowwisp and kasiie. Maybe seeing her with someone else will make him think twice about underestimating her. Besides, a jealous and horny Snape could be fun
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  • From ANON - Edania on December 18, 2005
    I just reread everything and i should say, if you don't really what not to do , for now for next chapter..leave it as cliff hanger for now, and go back to harry. I would like to know what does happen to him , whats going on? That could give you some kind of break for a while..so no rush at all. Can't rush good writting.
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  • From ANON - *Ramos* on December 18, 2005
    I think she should tie him up and have her naughty way with him
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 18, 2005
    I don't think Hermione would like it slow and gentle at this point. What with the situation, her mood, and the surrounding lust, she would be more satisfied with a hard Snape. But she should make him kiss her. I think he would be surprised to find out he liked it.
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  • From ANON - Wilowisp on December 18, 2005
    I'm with Kasile on this one, I'd like to see Hermione take on a different Deatheater and see how Snape likes to be put on the sidelines--plus it would have to irk him that Hermione is just as capable of getting what she needs *physically* from someone else. Hell, now that I think about it a threesome might be fun too. Hahahaha.
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  • From ANON - beeky63 on December 18, 2005
    Hello Ms. Figg. First off, I have to say that this story is bloody brilliant. Second in answer to your poll, I would like to see Hermione give Snape leave to do as he pleases. He in turn would be a gentle lover for her, and in the process maybe start to feel genuine affection for her (just a little spark to start with and then as the story progresses that spark can fan into a flame). Despite the fact that Snape is dark in this fic I'm still a sucker for a happy ending. Look forward to the next update. Toodles.
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  • From silverslytherin394 on December 18, 2005
    I hve been coming to this website for about a month now, and just recentlygot a user name finally. I just wanted to say that this story is one of my favorites on this site. I think that hermione would want to keep the dealings between herself and Snape honest. I did like the idea another reviewer had of her primordial powers nullifiying the carnal spells Voldemort has cast. I would also like to see what happens to Harry with that whole situation soon as well. I think that bit is intrigueing as well. How will Voldemort play that? He will have Harry there in front of him, but because he is trying to woo Hermione, will he play nice with Harry? I can't wait to read more! SS
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  • From ANON - Catharine Clemens on December 18, 2005
    Hi there,
    This is a great story ! A couple of times I got the impression that Snape did feel something more. One thing you could do for the next chapter is they start to
    have sex and part way through there is a small change in Snapes behavior and he notices it.It freaks him out so that he can't ummm...continue(WEG).
    Hermione gets frustrated either because he doen't follow through and or because she notices the difference too. When I say difference,I don't mean instant
    "hearts and flowers" from Snape,just enough of a difference that he can't ignore or deny to himself at least. Am I wrong to think there were those moments where Snape did feel something more? This is a really intriguing set up.
    Catharine
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  • From ANON - dips on December 18, 2005
    love ur story keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - a_reader on December 18, 2005
    I think that, all brutality aside, he's always been mostly honest with her. And I think that sexually, their tastes suit each other. I don't think she'd really like if he were all tender and etc. In fact, you could possibly let her finally acknowledge this fact, by initially perhaps trying to force a gentler lovemaking, and realize it's not doing anything for her. Then, allow him to be "who he is," but make her assert that part of herself more, and force him to realize that his "brutal" nature does, in fact, please her and give her pleasure. In this way, she is no longer "submitting" to his treatment of her, but maybe becoming more reciprocal. I think the struggle for dominance between the two of them is very interesting. Perhaps the tables can be turned on him, in that respect.



    You initially posited that she yearned for him to dominate her because she was under so much pressure to perform at the demands of others (Dumbledore, etc.). Now, she is in a situation where she needs to take control of her self/powers in order to overcome the dictates of others. Sexual assertiveness would be a part of that, I think. However, unless she wishes to become his master (i.e. the equivalent of a Voldemort/Dumbledore in bed), I think she and Snape need to strive for a balance. It doesn't have to be a kissy-kissy balance, but a balance all the same. Am I making sense?
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  • From ANON - Koda on December 18, 2005
    No, I don't think she should force Snape to do those things.. I can't really think of what she SHOULD do, though.
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  • From ANON - Edania on December 18, 2005
    just to add,..though you still want to keep snape in control a bit, since the readers or some i am sure would want snape still in some type of control.. but thats just me.
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  • From ANON - droxy on December 18, 2005
    re- chap 40 youw anted an opinion so here it is.

    It really depends on how you want to develop Hermione and then keep it consistent with the rest of the story. In my mind Hermione wouldn't force Snape into being a dishonest lover. This reminds me of a star trek episode with Q, where a girl had powers to make Riker lover her, but then she decided the false love was not what she wanted, She wanted it of free will. And isn't that the theme of this story? The desire to live of one's free will. I would expect her to continue to want to protect Snape in some regard, he is really he only ally at this point. Also, you could have Snape want to kiss her at some point but not out of sympathy but becasue he was caught up in the feelings. What would be interesting and youstated this inthe chapter was Hermiones thoughts concerning Snape and the fact he is under the influence. If she can indeed cure unforgivables, perhaps she can cure the most unforgivable of all. That Snape despite his darkness would take a hit for her, one emitted by Albus. SHe may loose her powers to do this, then Snape will owe her inthe biggest way, but it will be done out of free will, not obligation.

    Good luck
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