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Reviews for Harry Takes Control

By : jbotson
  • From ANON - Bella on January 05, 2006
    Wow, awesome fic... Loved it, I hope you keep writing it. The "bank" surprise really added something to an already good plot. I hope there's still many chapters to come...
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  • From ANON - Maria on January 05, 2006
    Oh, and I think what Harry should do with that loan depends on how he decides on the question in the prologue, if he wants to take Voldemort on on his own or with the help of the ministry. By working on his public image I think he is already leaning towards the second option. He could hold the loan back as a trumph card if he plans to reform the ministry after defeating Voldemort, but either should be interesting to discuss with Lucius. I think Lucius would use it for blackmail. Reforming the ministry publicicly whould alert Voldemort of Harrys sheming, after all, and Lucius is a Slytherin. He would attack from behind.
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  • From ANON - maria on January 05, 2006
    Hi, do you have a Beta? I think you could use one, no offence meant. There are several things I noticed. First, while the Daily Profit would be an appropriate name for that newpaper, I think its really called Daily Prophet. Also, there were some minor grammar mistakes.
    Lucius never answered Harrys question how he should call him. Also, should he call him Harry in public? I think Master or at least Mr. Potter would be more appropriate.
    I think their relationship is developing very quick. They were enemies, and suddenly they both want to be 'more than friends'? Sure, they both thought about that before, but neither of them knows that. I think its to early for such a statement. It would be better placed later in the story. They agreed to work together, after all. More than enough opportunity to develope things.
    Now that I'm done nit-picking, I want to say I like your story very much. I'm a big Lucius/Harry fan, and I hope you keep on writing and update often.
    About your questions, I think Harry should at least return to Hogwarts for a short visit. The princes book is still there and who knows what else is hidden in that hiding room?
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  • From ANON - badluck on January 04, 2006
    Great story. Update again soon please, I can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - avihenda on January 04, 2006
    lol it's getting interesting ^_^

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  • From ANON - badluck on January 04, 2006
    Great story. I am thoroughly enjoying this one. I love the interaction between the characters. Please update again soon.
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  • From ANON - crazytaco on January 04, 2006
    I love your story. You are doing a great job so far, however there is one mistake that is occurring throughout your story. I don't mean to sound rude, but your consistent misspelling of Albus Dumbledore's last name is a little annoying. Other than that you are doing a great job. I have found myself returning multiple times during the day to see if you have updated the story. Please continue on with the good work. I commend you, I couldn't have written such a fine story myself. I shall leave that up to you.
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  • From ANON - Liz on January 01, 2006
    Oh now I'm starting to get very interested....can hardly wait for more.

    Harry has a point....Lucius is hot...

    Liz
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  • From ANON - JJ on January 01, 2006
    I love it!!! You've set up a plot with lots of possibilities and I can't wait to see what you do with them!!
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  • From ANON - Meyra on January 01, 2006
    Finally a new chapter :) I love it and update again soon ^-^
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  • From ANON - Kristin on December 31, 2005
    Update soon...please
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  • From ANON - XxNumaNumaxX on December 31, 2005
    Good update, I have enjoyed it as always, looking forward for your next update soon. Hopefully Lucius will be enjoying himself with Potter.
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  • From ANON - avihenda on December 28, 2005
    great main plot, but hte chapters are to short for me to really know if I like it for not, but potential is definitly there :-)

    hope you continue, there have really been to litle h/l fics latly :-(


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  • From ANON - haidde on December 27, 2005
    it looks promising. update soon :)))
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  • From ANON - Liz on December 26, 2005
    great start, chapters could be longer, but I didn't see any errors, so far, I'm just wanting to read more of it now, gotta love Harry/Lucius....it's sooooo hot...

    anyway, I'll check back as often as possible for updates,

    Liz
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