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By : Mrriddler

From ANON - DarkHercules on January 15, 2006
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From ANON - DarkHercules on January 15, 2006
Listen friend, would you like to tell me what eating you about the Gryffindor? Yes, I won't lie, they can be irratating at times, but still if Harry were in real trouble, they would ALL fall in line(Okay, probably not Percy). He's for the most part their leader, and most DO see him as such. About Ron and Hermione, yes, I agree with you about Ron. He is way too jealous. To the point you want to stomp a mudhole in his ass. But, don't you even start on Hermione. She has ALWAYS been loyal to Harry(yes, I am counting the Firebolt incident. She was just looking out for his safety). She always been there when he needed help. As for you saying that the Beauxbatons girls would see Gryffindor as the most prejudiced?! Got two words for you. Bullshit and Slytherin. Oh, and prone to act without thinking? I love Harry to death, but he can be one of the worst perpetrators of that at times. And, even If amost all of Gryffindor turned their back on Harry, he'ld still have at least four people who would be loyal to him: Hermione, Neville, Fred, and George. The Weasley twins have never turned their back on Harry, nor are they likely to. Listen, I understand that this is an AU, but damn, friend, this is a bit much. Listen, for the most part I love the story, seriously, it's well written, thoughtout, and loads better than a good piece of some of the crap I read through. If you disagree, or just want to say something, email me. Just to let you know, if you respond, two to one, I'll probably send one right back at you. Whether it's to agree, disagree, or merely to state something, we'll have to see thank you for your time.
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From ANON - Riven on January 15, 2006
wonderful story so far, only one problem i see so far, not enough sex and make it detailed.
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From ANON - makotochi on January 15, 2006
The Patil Twins, Hannah and Susan, and a muggle girl that Duddley likes but cant get
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2006
Keep up the good work. Oh and I vote for Narcissa (I don't really care about anyone else) just because it would be funny if Malfoy found out Potter was doing his mom.
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2006
I vote for Blaise (fem) and Narcissa.
Also, drow and vampires are hot, so include them too. :P
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From ANON - firelordeg on January 14, 2006
o my vote is all but narsscisection
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From ANON - firelordeg on January 14, 2006
please update realy need an update
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From Mrriddler on January 14, 2006
Spike of Doom - don't be too sure just yet about narcissa and tonks. ;)

Treck - lmao, sick

Jamie - hmm, afraid, draco might not be redeemed. I like the ferret just the way he is in this story. As for: "no I won't stop reading if you do decide to go with Harry/Narcissa," you have no idea how badly that kind of comment is swelling my ego =P. Thank you for the vote confidence. I'll definitely consider what you have said.

No-one - Holy...SHIT!!! long review. Very good points. I'll be sending a reply to your email-box to address my position on Hermione specifically, but I'll comment on the rest of the girls bellow.

Ginny - If she did that, she's liable to be lynched by Harry's more fanatical girls/worshippers. =P Interesting idea about the patils.
Katie Bell - on a broomstick?...this deserves some thinking on my part.
Luna - Good idea, but I am really bad at writing her specifically so I'll have to think about it.
Susan - "You also have to watch out for the quite ones." **nod**
Tracy/Daphne - " May need some Disciplining." I see someone has read Big D's "the News" ;)
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From ANON - No-one on January 14, 2006
First of all congratulations on a well written story, while the idea may not be a new one your story manages to handle the development and reppercussions really well.

I like and appreciate the Dumbledore and Ron bashing; Dumbledore deserves it for trying to run Harry's life for him by manipulating him at every turn, while Ron deserves it for being such a crappy friend. The only other person that deserves it as much is Snape but he's one of the characters that I love to hate, there is a lot of untapped potential in the Snape character, most people are content to leave him as just a bully to Harry.

I wanted to ask Why are you against having Hermione as one of Harry's Girls: I personally see the two of them being quite good for each other they seem to complement each other quite well. (Harry manages to help Hermione live a little without unessacerrily antagonising her and she helps to curb his rash behaviour, work out his problems and supports him even when she thinks he is being foolish.) I realise that they are all to often paired together and most people like to avoid cliche pairings. I just believe that Harry and Hermione together seems more likely than Harry/Narcissa pairing not that I haven't read a fanfiction where that was written very well. Mainly my opinion on the pairing is that Hermione is my favourite character in the books, she reminds me a lot of what I was like at school, I think it's unfortunate but inevitable that the books focus so much on Harry that all of the other characters aren't developed as much as they could be. I sort of think that Hermione could do better than most of the boys at Hogwarts but I do like seeing her with Harry who does seem to be a "Fine Young Man" it also doesn't hurt that I believe that he needs and deserves someone like her as a partner.

That's just my opinion and despite that I still like and will keep reading the story.

As for Pairings I'd go for a fairly small but diverse group:
Fleur - Foreign Girls are definitly worth including ignoring that she is both a beautiful girl and is a possible link to other Veela.
Nymphadora - The Older women has a certain appeal even if you put aside the possible kinky/cosplay relationship options a shapeshifter has.
Excluding Hermione the other choices from gryffindor are a pretty poor Ginny could be fun as she is such a Red-headed spitfire but is more likely to move on rather than stick with him, I would bundle Pravati and Padma together for Harry possibly organised by his girls for a special night like his birthday.
Appart from that the next best choice seems to be Katie Bell - She is only one year above Harry and it is possible to have to resit a year (Marcus Flint was a 6th year when Harry started and was still playing Quidditch in book 3) She should be athletic and keen on quidditch. And if anyone is going to prove that it's possible to have sex on a broomstick it will most likely be them.
Luna - A Ravenclaw girl who will certainly keep you on your toes she seems odd but its not clear how much of that is real and how much is an act.
Susan - A kindly Hufflepiff girl who has shown support for Harry before & also provides a connection to the MoM. You also have to watch out for the quite ones.
Tracy/Daphne - Random Slytherin girl whom little has been said and that gives a relitivly blank slate to work with. May need some Disciplining.

Good luck with the story, hope to read some more soon.
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From ANON - Jamie on January 14, 2006
Er, and I meant "coup", not "coupe". hahahaha *blush* whoops.
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From ANON - Jamie on January 14, 2006
Hey :) I'm really liking your story; it's a lot of fun. A bit of a twist on several different story ideas (Male Veela, Harry-gets-Fleur, Harry-takes-action-after-the-Rebirth, etc). Pretty good. I don't mind so much that this chapter had no PWP because it was a good "development" chapter, if you wanna take this story further. :) So good job. I will, though, add my own two cents, which say: PLEASE don't put Harry with Narcissa. :-/ ewwwwwwww. It's weird of me, I know, because I like stories where Draco is redeemed. But I can't ever stand stories where Lucius or Narcissa "get some". It just weirds me out in the extreme. (Ok, occasionally Lucius can have some slash, which might be ok...) But it just seems too weird to me for Harry to be getting it on with his rival's mother. True, it's a huge in-your-face coupe. But *shudder* eww.... Ok, that's my two cents there. Whether it affects your decision or not is up to you, but I feel better for telling you. :) I'm looking forward to the next chapter (and no I won't stop reading if you do decide to go with Harry/Narcissa). Keep up the good work. O:-)
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From ANON - Treck on January 13, 2006
Is there a chance of a Dudley/Dementor/Draco triangle?
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From ANON - jw on January 13, 2006
great update it just gets better and better i say padma and im still a big saprter of tonks see is gat a lot going for her with her shapshifting and harry can like her and use her power
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From ANON - HornyPhoenix on January 13, 2006
Hannah, Susan, Blaise, Narcissa, Tonks, Daphne, Another Veela sounds cool, so would a vampire @_@ hmm and a muggle girl that dud likes? >_> pure torture ^_^ LOVE IT
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