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By : Samaelthekind
  • From ANON - Julie on January 14, 2006
    I love how you describe things!
    " Harry looked at his lover with those piercing green eyes that bored through Draco's soul like twin diamond drills. " XD!
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  • From Gabriella on January 14, 2006
    GAH!!!!!!!!!! NOW what???!!! Evil, EEEEEEEEEEEEvil cliffie!!!! Did I mentione you were evil? GOD DAMN IT YOU A.R.E!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Talk about getting fucked... *smirk*

    Another piece of advice that is equaly simple: read your ASS off. Both good and bad authors so you can gauge where you are in style, etc... learning what not to do and absorbing good techniques that you can twine into your own style. Never, NEVER stop improving yourself. Erotica should be as if you got fucked as never before, though all in the mind. (And often the "helping hand") It's an artform that has no side effects... 'cept for repeatedly missing the bus to work, staying up until 5 in the morning and having EXTREMELY naughty thoughts when dealing with a pair of hot guys who are naught but customers at work... they're just good friends, you understand...

    *snicker*

    AAAAAAAAAaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh life.....

    ^.--
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  • From ANON - Abcus on January 14, 2006
    WOW... i am at a complete loss of words.. WOW is all that comes to mind right now... WOW
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  • From ANON - Julie on January 14, 2006
    "He could could wait, it would just make tomorrow night all the more special." -Chapter 10! Just thought you ought to know...

    Otherwise, I LOVE THIS STORY! I have a question for you, so if you could email me that would be great.

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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on January 14, 2006
    Uh oh! Need chapter 12! Who is after his postion as crown prince? What happens? Need more!
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  • From ANON - brittany on January 13, 2006
    OMG!!!!
    this chapter was so romantic!
    can't wait for an update!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on January 13, 2006
    Oh I can't wait for 11b. Holy moly! Must have more!
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  • From ANON - QueenNilya on January 13, 2006
    Never thought I'd say it, but I definately have a new favorite!!!! This fic made me cry when Draco broke down.....what an amazing peice you have written!!!! I look forward to reading more!!!
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  • From ANON - thrnbrooke on January 13, 2006
    Wonderful! I can't wait for chapter 11!
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  • From ANON - Amessis on January 13, 2006
    I loved the way they are together.
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  • From ANON - cyn on January 13, 2006
    awww that is soooo sweet!!
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  • From ANON - Alison on January 10, 2006
    That was SOO sweet!!! I can't wait to see how they handle their relationship in public and what Snape is going to do. =o)
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  • From MagicChic82 on January 10, 2006
    3 in the morning! What am I doing reading this?!? lol. Good job! I'm really enjoying this story.
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  • From Gabriella on January 10, 2006
    Heehee... you weren't kidding, dialogue is a weakness with you! The best advice I can give is don't force it. Read it to yourself or speak it as you write it for all dialogue IS is speech. On paper. So it's gotta flow with word usage, slang, breathing patterns (if you pause where something is said, comma.) Our speech tends to be casual in word usage, though not uneducated or lazy. (Unless you've just been shagged through the mattress...) Another thing that I've got problems with as well, is don't repeat yourself. In a sentence or a paragraph, doesn't matter, just tighten up everything that's important and discard anything that is not, such as over dramatic/flowery lingo & phrasing. Use less rather than more words to describe something. This way the effect becomes more potent, and brings the message home like a kick to the groin. You describe one HELL of a peripheral sex scene so just leak that fluidity into their verbal interaction & then see what happens!!

    Don't mind my English teacher mode!!!

    (Hides under desk...)

    ^.--
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  • From CerberusSky on January 10, 2006
    I have just sat and read all three new chapters and I truly think they get better each time. As for your dialogue, I saw no problems with it, in fact I am a bit envious. My weakest area is also dialogue, so I wind up tinkering a LOT with mine and it never seems right to me. Yours, on the other hand, simply flows and that's a good deal. This is an emotional and touching piece so far and that bit with Snape - very funny. Snape has always been a source of mystery to me and I like the allusions to Lily and all that you made. I think it would definitely be an angle (or subplot) worth exploring and I hope you do so. I will anxiously be awaiting your next chapter. :)
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