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From ANON - Anna on January 29, 2006
Hey Kayy,
wow i was waiting for the pansy plan to come into play! and so it seems it hasn't worked the same way she expected it to.
i find Narcissa different from what i viewed her as to be but u r the author and after all for this fanfiction. by the way u had only one spelling mistake which was gretted , which most likely was greeted , but i reckon thats a typo lol.
i have my boyfriend chris who has been reading over my shoulder at the time being picking up my mistakes and he wishes to review even though he has only read this chapter so dont listen to him whatever he writes unless of course it is nice. I look forward to reviewing

Anna
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From ANON - Anna on January 29, 2006
hey kayy,
that was a great last line by ginny! i love it. i am once again up at 12 o clck pretty much because this time i have indigestion lol . starting to feel better.
Neway great scene with ginny and draco at the hospital...its funny but men really do close off when they lose someone so i do think draco would avoid
sharing his feelings but wheres the family or is that in the next chapter? ginny is turning out to be my fave ginny of them all ... so ginny doesnt want draco to be around her child , who will front up and help ginny out and hows molly going to help ginny. i mean my mother would tell me that i was dumb but she'd probably tell me to fhinsh my buisness course and move out of country coz my bfs younger than me........................or is molly going to control everything to baby clothes to how ginny changes dipers...haha i know if i was to stay in the country and my bfs aunt came an saw 'future' baby she'd probably tell me that i am doing everything wrong because she hates me , thank god his mum loves me...............What i am trying to say is just that you can have a lot of fun with all of this because you maybe able to bring humour into the story with just the way peoples relationships...i see narcissa as the mother and in law that tells ginny off for doing things wrong. just reminds me of the stupid aunt sorry for venting in ur review...please laugh coz i do! thats if ginny and draco get together again lol ...they are just ideas you either hate me for posting them or give u an orginal idea or nothing...so dont hate me for my rambles.

there was another thing, when is evil pansy coming back into the story, i mean she'd want to spread the turth about ginny any day now before the dream team let it spill...otherwise her plan for blackmail is down the drain and draco is a free man to love who he wants right or is there something else.....even if there was u'd never tell me.

neway this was a neat chapter, fairly short but clear , good description and a great piece of writing
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From ANON - Anna on January 28, 2006
Hey kayy,
my romantic weekend has started on a good start , just thought i would let u know, its 12 o clck at night and i cant wait for saturday. Where ill be cooking and lots of nice stuff hehehe. Neway good chapter, the emotions i think thats how molly would react after all it is her only daughter. i cant really give you anymore advice you've sort of made this chapter great... oblivously draco's parents will be brought into this too pretty soon aww the anger and the hate if they were all in just one tiny room with no one to immediate the situation. i almost cried about ginny losing her baby, i understand the pain she is going through and you've got it pretty well on the head...lot of mixtures of emotions so i like that ...an idea for a singlar chapter based around ginny and her loss of her son because its a very well rounded issue to go into , you might need a lot of tissues.
ill be honest with you kayy i seem to have personally liked these past two chapters because even though i was only two months pregnant when i had my miscarriage ... it was just so foregin to me all the emotions...so i can relate to ginny and ginny has seemed to get better as a character, great break down squence with molly very nice anyway i have to get ready for bed.

Great work , keep it up and post soon
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From ANON - Anna on January 27, 2006
hey kayy, alright there is one thing i wanna talk about that seems pretty important to the unimportant me, first of all why am i reading fanfiction at all on me and my boyfriends 1 year anniversary...lol technnically i should be getting ready for a real nice day!
okay to the story, so now draco's gonna beat himself up about the child and possibly why he put ginny through this pain, that was truly un necessary. and Ginny when and if she wakes up is going to be greving over her lost child. aww the emoitions, i definately can put myself in ginny shoes about losing a baby...ah it would be so complicated to ever forgive draco for what he has done and i mean he has taken a very selfish attitude i mean he should be with Ginny and trying to cope with ginny. I guess this story is going to get ever more intresting and emotional. Well done the story has really come together and when you fhinsh the story you should go over your chapters and u'll probably see how much of an improvement you have made.
I will read soon, just not this weekend - romantic weekend, you know what i mean

Anna
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From ANON - Tarra on January 26, 2006
At least we know he love's her even though he feel's horrid about everything .... Maybe he should have told he what had happened ..... so what's next?
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From ANON - Anna on January 25, 2006
Opps it was dean i mean for the other fathers bit

sorry
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From ANON - Anna on January 25, 2006
Hey kayy, that was intense and that will make ginny think differently of draco! maybe change her whole point of view on him...
Draco is definately a strong character and ginny will probably have a lot more depth and conflict now to ! thats good its great actually. but to be honest i dont think ginny would take back a man that could have possibly killed her children... thats another thing you can put in with your next chapter , how draco feels ...when he finally realises he could have killed his own blood. (after all bloods important in the malfoy family) it will be good to see the families now get involed and the other possible fathers i.e seamus and harry maybe becoming protective , offering safety and plans in what they can do. . . jeaslousy is on of malfoys down falls well thats what i think.
I reckon you have a heap to play and toy and i like that fact your getting into draco's character maybe get into ginnys thinking and feeling now, it most likely be more motherly ...but interesting

keep the good work up and i will be reading again when you post

Anna
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From ANON - Sara on January 25, 2006
plz write more i wanna know what happens. I wanna know if Draco and Ginny get together and if they tell their parents??
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From ANON - Tarra on January 24, 2006
Okay newest chapter is effin great! So what's the break? what's Pansy going ot do, Tell the entire school that they're dateing and Ginny's Knocked up? seems risky if you ask me...... if everyone if afraid to go around Draco when He's pissed then why would Pansy turly even try to do anyhting? Please hurry with posting the next chapter!
~Tarra
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From ANON - Anna on January 24, 2006
hey Kayy,
okay Pansy really sick! but more to the writing it just seems to improve so much more and more. great conflict !!! cant wait to read more.
Anna

p.s sorry for the short review i am just going to look for jobs

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From ANON - Cas on January 23, 2006
Congrads at the long storiee its really good LoL see you at school tommorow...Later
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From ANON - Anna on January 23, 2006
Hay Kayy,
Sorry to hear that you've been sick , i've been sick to with glanjla fever (kissing dieseas) i have just had a flair up and boy i have been sleeping! Neway with this chapter it was well done i like the effort you've put in and draco is just getting so much better i like it!
so whens pansy going to make her move?
i have got to go , tired again and i want to write before i fall asleep. Keep it up and look forward to the next chapter! Get BETTER

Anna
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From ANON - Cas on January 22, 2006
TWINS
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From ANON - Cas on January 21, 2006
Stupid Pansy i dislike her Oh oh look

RUM TUM TUGGER!! OH YA
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From ANON - Anna on January 20, 2006
Hey Kayy, i have to say this was one of your best chapters yet it was clear, precise and pretty emotional on pansy part. i liked the way it panned out and the way the story ended on a very good clif hanger. and honestly i think draco was a much better character in this chapter...just the way he lost control of his anger, its one of his inner battles, while staying dominant. thats good conflict! as you can see this is a short review from me because well i am going in town with my bf...would have reviewed sooner but i was waiting for a phone call yesterday.

oh by the way i have been writing a smilar story like this at the start of Novemember different parings its Ginny/ Oliver wood and set when ginnys in her 20's...i dont think ill have it done by this month or the next i am only at the start of my draft all 57 pages of it but when i do post it on ff.net its not graphic in anyway i dont know why just didnt know adultfanfiction.net exsisted its gonna be posted on ff.net ill let you know, thats if you dont mind of course.

oh what was i going to say i love Pansy she is evil and she's been well done no doubt you have known a bitch lol

cheers Kayy waiting for the next chapter!
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