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Reviews for Deadly Obsession

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  • From ANON - Steph on January 14, 2006
    Ohh. I like. You better write more!!
    Love Me

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  • From ANON - Maniac at your door on January 08, 2006
    A bet? I'm intrigued. She'll win, of course. Draco can't help but fall prey to her charms!
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  • From ANON - Risika8 on January 06, 2006
    this chapter was much better. your writing was a lot more smooth and easier to read. it flowed a lot better. keep it up!
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  • From ANON - rush22 on January 04, 2006
    great job, i think that this is a fun story to read and i hope to read more of it soon!
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  • From ANON - Cristie on January 04, 2006
    Can't wait for Hermione to put those two in their place. Gonna be hard to get Draco to go public though.
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  • From ANON - Stacy on January 04, 2006
    Great job! I loved this chapter i hope you keep updating this quickly its awesome! keep up the fantastic job!
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  • From ANON - 0o0itznitelite on January 04, 2006
    hahahahaahha... i likee da chappieee... needa update more...
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  • From ANON - Jennifer on January 03, 2006
    It is a really cool story.I am kind of surprised that hermione decided to talk to harry and ron.I like the whole change of hermione.She is so cool.Also is hermione in love with harry and ron?Keep on writing .I can't wait until your next entry.
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  • From ANON - Cas on January 03, 2006
    intresting bet haha
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  • From ANON - Cas on January 03, 2006
    LoL...This one will be intresting haha Draco/Hermoine...hehe throwing rocks at hermione is funn hehe
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  • From ANON - lemonade on January 03, 2006
    I have lots of concrit for you. I hope it helps. I adore your concept of Hermione wanting to change her look and be noticed by men as a woman instead of one of the guys. It's very plausible in canon, and I want to see a story exploring that. I love the idea that the boys would still ignore her, but Draco would notice her (the forbidden fruit). It would have helpful if we had seen prior situations that made her feel that she needed a big change, (you know- reactions, ignoring, and even thoughtless insults.) Something that would drive her to such drastic measures. If we knew where her former romantic attachments were aligned, then perhaps we could have felt some of her pain. (she has to have had a crush on SOMEONE by now.) Draco fighting his attaction should be addressed, too. Having dreams about your object of desire is a great way to have your subconscious tell you something. We also need a convincing bridge to Hermione's attraction to Draco. We want to hear her thoughts and feelings as they come. They need to be developed, and you have a good start with the tutoring. Just don't waste the opportunity to use that for lots of interaction, and maybe explore how they get along during tutoring as opposed to the rest of their classes. And I have a teeny nitpick. They seem to be going to school in a public school in America so far. Hermione calls the boys 'jerks' and she visited the mall. Maybe someone could britpick for you, and your story will be even better.
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  • From ANON - Maniac at your door on January 03, 2006
    Draco's not just gonna give up that easy is he? Of course not!
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  • From ANON - Stacy on January 03, 2006
    Good start!
    I can't wait to read more!
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  • From ANON - Risika8 on January 03, 2006
    it's a good plotline, and a pretty good start, but you really want to elaborate of feelings and emotions and be descriptive about the situations etc. especially draco's emotions towards hermione. you can't jsut have him keep on describing her as 'hott.' that doesn't keep the reader interested. if anything, come up with a long list of adjectives you want to use to describe hermione and dracot o each other, and use those. try not to repeat the same ones too much. Also hermione's character is more passive -aggressive than you've made her. For example, she wouldn't be DEMANDING her parents to take her shopping, but (this part was fine) she would be demanding of Harry and Ron. Same goes for Draco. He's got to have a better reaction to finding out that it's hermione than he does. it's a good story, and if you need any help, you can always e-mail me. KEEP IT UP!
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  • From ANON - arianwen on January 03, 2006
    For starters, let me say I love this fic and very much want it to continue. As for ideas, right ow 'Mione *hates* Malfoy. How's he going to change that, woo her or slip her a love potion? What if someone else, say Ron, got the potion by mistake? (hint, hint)
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