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Reviews for Stolen Wings

By : ShinigamiKitsune
  • From ANON - Winterineden on January 08, 2006
    Ok, I have read all four chapters and am enthralled. Now I am looking forward to dialog and interaction between these two. I do not mind short chapters as you are using them to divide the action. Nothing is worse than a really long chapter that start at point A, travels here, there, and yon, then leaves you totally confused. I hope that you continue this story as I find it unique and so well thouht out.
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  • From ANON - Winterineden on January 08, 2006
    "He kept his reasons to himself, for obvious reasons". Maybe could have been more like "he kept his motivation to himself, for obvious reasons". Try to avoid using the same noun in a sentence twice. Something one of my professors used to beat me over the head about. I actually feel strange making suggestions for your work as you are one of the best writer's already that I have seen posting on any fanfic site.
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  • From ANON - Winterineden on January 08, 2006
    Another very strong chapter. There were a few minor spelling or verb tense errors, but nothing that would hamper the enjoyment of reading this. I would like to make a suggestion though. Please name your chapters instead of numbering them. When I am following a story, it is easier to remember a chapter title than it is to remember I stopped reading on chapter 14. In the story "Darkness, Shadows, Light", the author Maddy uses clever sayings as chapter titles, whether or not they have anything to do with the story.
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  • From ANON - Winterineden on January 08, 2006
    I cannot believe this is the first time you have written fanfiction. This first chapter is absolutely incredible. I also cannot believe you do not have a beta as I am used to muddling thru on this site, some of the fics here really need a beta. Even your punctuation is excellent! There is another site http://www.cipher-wotr.com/fanfiction/index.php that you might be interested in posting this fiction on because the members are really fabulous about helping other writers achieve thier potential. One of the writers there has even "retired" from fanfic to persue publication. And you have a lot of natural talent and potential. They do, however, require a beta, so although I haven't betaed before I would for you if you needed me to. I believe you are gonna produce a lot of awesome work.
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  • From ANON - Katie K on January 08, 2006
    Oh my! Poor Harry! This is great.. wish the chapters were longer though.
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  • From ANON - Katie K on January 08, 2006
    Ohhh no, Poor Harry!! Severus need to rescue him right now. *pout* Please update soon!!
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  • From ANON - Jaima on January 08, 2006
    Look forward to more...
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