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By : bellgirl
  • From ANON - Bellgirl's BETA on July 29, 2006
    To quote Ms. Gracie:

    "Gracie

    Well....this isn't a bad story. You need a new beta...probably someone with a basic understanding of the English language and sentence structure. There are many grammatical errors and that made it difficult to read the fic. I would recommend writing it in Microsoft Word and using the spell check. I would also recommend getting a better beta reader that will read the story more than once and fix what needs to be fixed.

    From an entertainment standpoint, your writing is okay...but technically, I find it hard to take it seriously.

    That is just my opinion though. Definitely keep at it. This fic is worth finishing if only to give you more experience.

    But seriously....get a new beta"


    As Bellgirl's beta, I would like you to provide me with examples of your so called grammatical errors. Ms. Bellgirl writes all her works in MS Word and I perform all editing services in MS Word and use my training garnered while obtaining my degree in English as basis for my corrections and edits. As such, I would like you to provide me with a few examples of these errors so I may correct them and make sure not to overlook them again. I do find it unlikely that you will do so for as far as I can tell there are no errors in grammar and therefore would like you to back up your accusations with facts. I trust that you have an English degree as well and have been published in a major publication as I have and therefore will provide the requested information promptly. Please take notice that what I believe you are referring to is the sentence construction of Ms. Bellgirl's story and her manner of presenting the story. While everyone likes a different way of telling a story, the grammar is in fact correct though you may not like the way the story flows. Some people don't like the works of Picasso, and some adore it. Sentence construction is what differentiates authors and makes them unique. If everyone wrote the same way, think of how dull it would be.

    Since you feel I need to be replaced, please provide your email so as we may use your most excellent skills as a Beta in the future.

    P.S. To Ms. Bellgirl: I enjoy the story!

    Cheers




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  • From ANON - Darkephoenix on July 28, 2006
    That was loads of fun.
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  • From ANON - Gracie on July 28, 2006
    Well....this isn't a bad story. You need a new beta...probably someone with a basic understanding of the English language and sentence structure. There are many grammatical errors and that made it difficult to read the fic. I would recommend writing it in Microsoft Word and using the spell check. I would also recommend getting a better beta reader that will read the story more than once and fix what needs to be fixed.

    From an entertainment standpoint, your writing is okay...but technically, I find it hard to take it seriously.

    That is just my opinion though. Definitely keep at it. This fic is worth finishing if only to give you more experience.

    But seriously....get a new beta
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on July 28, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - fiona on July 28, 2006
    first off i am so happy to see you have updated! second, this story is so amazing it is nothing like anything else here and i love it! third this chapter was hot! OMG!!!! i am at a loss for words it worked out well, really well you should pat yourself on the back, don't worry it was so good! i am loving the fact that pansy and draco have a thing for her, and the way he got upset was perfect i couldn't help but laugh, i have to say i am giddy with excitment to read what happens next so please update soon!
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  • From ANON - pinkwands on July 28, 2006
    good gods this story is hot!! I normally don't like girl/girl stories but the last chapter was beyond hot!@ hehe Love poor Draco storming off :D
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  • From ANON - Hanna Delacour on July 28, 2006
    Loved it! Can't wait to find out what happens next, Draco blowing up was great... I'm sure he'll feel he has something to prove to Hermione now.. Oh she is a lucky girl :D
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 11, 2006
    I like it.
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  • From ANON - Katie on February 09, 2006
    hahahaha Draco's a little pervert. Man I love him. Update soon.
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  • From ANON - Katie on February 09, 2006
    I love your story and should have reviewed before but I was too anxious to know what happened next. The only real reason I'm reviewing right now instaed of seeing what happens next is... Valmont? As in... Sebastian? Please say yes because honestly that would make me love you story about 100 times more. To know that you (the writer) were also a Cruel Intentions fan. As I am a huge one. Actually the only stories I've ever written were about Cruel Intentions. Well not the only stories but the only posted fanfics. Hah ok though so I think that's enough rambling for one chapter. On to the next.
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  • From ANON - kayko15 on February 07, 2006
    not bad. not bad at all. It's allright I guess. Anyway when you get the chance to update please do. Later. K15
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  • From ANON - anjellic on February 04, 2006
    Very erotic...love the plot line and how you didn't just throw Hermione and Draco together. Nice...very nice
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  • From tikiguy10 on February 04, 2006
    I love your story...
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  • From ANON - angel on February 03, 2006
    wow please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - fiona on February 03, 2006
    me again sorry, but i didn't catch any comma problems or anything it was easy for me to read but then again i was so into it i could have missed it, lol well anyway keep up the great job! i love it!
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