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Reviews for Disharmony in the Dungeons

By : Ms_Figg
  • From DarkIris on March 16, 2023

    Okay, this is an old story and I suspect this issue has already been addressed, but I still feel the need to address it. Ms. Figg is one of my all time favorite Sevmione authors and this story is absolutely one of my favorites of hers and in general. That disclaimer aside, there are some situations she presents as typical, acceptable behavior or beliefs that are harmful. I wish she would have at least written disclaimers at the end of the chapter that first presents the problem. Maybe its somewhere in a response to a review, but it needs to be prominently displayed. 

    The first one is the idea that if Hermione had not been a virgin, Severus would have had the right to demand sex from her. Make no mistake, the reason presented in the story is not because she is his wife, but because he believed she wasn't a virgin. This assertion is wrong in either instance. This is not only insulting and asinine thinking, it's dangerous. It's dangerous for men to assert and for women to submit to. In the case of marriage, it supports the idea that a man can't rape his wife, which he absolutely can! As for the issue of virginal status, there is nothing inherently virtuous about virginity in an adult, male or female, and more importantly, nothing shameful about not being one. Believing otherwise implies not being a virgin makes you less than, somehow. Less clean, less honorable, less ethical, having less integrity, (no, ethics and integrity aren't the same thing. There's a suble but real distinction. Integrity is about your motivations: what you believe is right. Ethics (as I define it) are strictly about your behavior; i.e., actions that result from decisions based on what you believe is right). There's nothing magical about being an adult virgin. It simply means you haven't had sex with someone. Something that is no one's business except those involved.  If you choose to abstain from sex before marriage because of religious beliefs or what you were taught, that's your choice, but know that this is based on opinion, not fact. Regardless of how old or widespread this or any wrongheaded belief is, beliefs are squarely in the realm of opinion, not fact. This issue comes up a lot in Ruth's (the author) stories, which always made me sad about what she was either told or any experiences that incorrectly taught her this. 

    Tied to the preceding issue is the idea that Hermione bears some type of blame for Severus' lust for her. That's all on him; regardless of how she dressed or what males she gave him the impression she was dating. Everyone is responsible for their actions, regardless of what or who inspired them. 


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  • From Persy on September 05, 2021

    A most excellent story. You captured all the nuances of all the range of emotions.


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  • From lovestruck on July 25, 2010
    You accidentally wrote Bernice instead of Denise. I assume it's supposed to be Denise cause that's what you wrote in future chapters.
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  • From ANON - Sarah on April 23, 2010
    I don't know if I am just being picky or if AFF have just uploaded inaccurately but I have recently noticed a lot of grammatical errors and bits that don't quite make sense. Sorry to be a pain but grammar and spelling inaccuaries really bug me. On the other hand please feel free to send me editable copies to adjust for you. I am a qualified teacher and pretty good at spotting typos and any grammar and spelling mistakes
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  • From FlittterKat on January 16, 2009
    Great take on the MLC! I've never read a story where Hermione takes the dark mark for Severus, ahem, and the order of course. Really enjoyed the story and now I'm off to read another of your great stories. Thanks for posting to this site!
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 13, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From smmz79 on August 02, 2008
    oooh draco has f***ed with the wrong guy.... it was lucky that hermione kept that wand ring on.....
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  • From smmz79 on August 02, 2008
    wooo draco is horrible.....
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  • From smmz79 on August 02, 2008
    OMG i love it 'little severus' that is rich.... i love this story so far and i think you have been very original with your spin on the marriage law
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  • From SilentTremor on April 23, 2008
    i would love for you to write a sequel to this. I just re-read it for the hundredth time and I still love it!
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  • From sherrithewriter on January 31, 2008
    I read Disharmony earlier, but wanted to revisit it -- it's such a great story and very deserving of a sequel. Great job!
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on August 14, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Alabaster on April 16, 2007
    Nifty, really great story. :D Loved it as i've loved all of yours..
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  • From ANON - TCFellows on March 16, 2007
    I have read this at least 4 times it is my favorite story. I think a sequel would be great, with a pregnancy.
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  • From SnapesSweetheart on March 14, 2007
    I am only on Chapter 3 and I love it!!
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