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Reviews for The Truth Behind The Past

By : lonlyheart
  • From DravanaMyst on April 24, 2007
    i will gladly beta for you just drop me a line on my email
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  • From DravanaMyst on April 24, 2007
    i am so excited about this story.. i cannot wait until u get more up.. sorry about the lost papers and the health issues... feel better soon
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  • From misslala on April 23, 2007
    I didn't read the story - I did read the reviews though because I wanted to see what people said that got a story (++). I am not going to read the story because of your notes: You simply refuse to change things. You should not expect respect and people not to flame if you aren't willing to write and take pride in it. Not only that, but be willing to learn from your mistakes...you really should try. People would appreciate that a lot more. :) Writing is for you and the reader, don't get discouraged because of bad reviews. They should make you want to try harder and harder. I know they make me want to scream, but it always makes me go back and fix the details. I am sure the story had loads of potential, but take pride in your work and yourself.
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  • From Extraho on April 22, 2007
    im REALLY not trying to be mean, but you need to give your beta the sack. your story is really good and i hate to see it ruined by grammar and line-writing.
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  • From otherkate on April 22, 2007
    Please, English is obviously not your first language. Get a better beta and learn how to write better. This story isn't the worst thing I have read but it's definitely in the bottom half. Your writing is choppy and stagnant. Your characters are wooden and unnatural. You have few if any transitions that flow from event to event, and the pacing of the action is far too fast and (again) choppy. Many of the characters are out of character. These are just a few of the problems in this piece. I applaude your attempt at writing a story, but don't get pissed when people have issues with how it's written. You are the one who posted it flawed.
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  • From on March 14, 2007
    I enjoy the story. However I have to agree with some of the other reviewers and say that there are parts that are confusing and hard to read. Again I repeat that I like the story and the plot, but I think there are something
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  • From Wingedmerkat on March 02, 2007
    Thought I would review . . . I think you have a tough outer skin . . . I would be bitching like a drunkin sailor! I have a temper. I think it's good that you keep writing even with the vile F*%^ing reviews. Looked at two or three of them. Ouch!!
    But some of them are right, detail can be a pain but it
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  • From SnarkyB on February 28, 2007
    You asked for a review, so here's my honest opinion
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  • From eroburn on January 21, 2007
    gotta love the plot. geez such mean reviews you have yet you keep writing.
    this in itself is what will eventually make you a great writer.
    the perserverence to continue on even faced with rejection and scorn.
    i like your story. It could use some work though.
    Two beta's are better than one.
    One to catch all the major stuff and the second to catch all the minor mistakes.
    please continue on with your story.
    trust me when i say we rely heavily on our beta's.
    -eroburn

    ps. if you wanna talk or anything my email is iamsoabad1113@hotmail.com. send me an email on how to get in touch with you.

    i hope you feel better soon.




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  • From spiritchild2000 on January 20, 2007
    Alright, I normally don't do this but I felt compelled to give a little constructive criticism. I know you are on the defensive due to a few less than helpful comments, but I do hope you listen and do not feel I am attacking you. I can assure you, I am not. First and foremost, your plotline is good. The story reads fairly easily. A great beta is a godsend. If you have a great beta, give them love. They deserve it. I only really have one difficulty with you story. It's dry on the details. It just seems that you are glossing through a story, instead of truly making the reader live the story, and bringing it to life for them. Do not let me discourage you in the least. The only way to get good at something is to keep going at it. Please continue writing. I look forward to future pieces from you. Blessed Be. SpiritChild
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  • From dropedonmyhead on January 20, 2007
    I don't normally complain, but....

    I like your concept but your beta must be an idiot. I find it hard to read because the errors are not fixed. 'busts out' wtf. I'm not blaming you that's the beta's job. I would enjoy it more if it were easier to read. I do like the concept though.
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  • From Solaris on January 20, 2007
    I had read your entire story and I must say that this story is by far the most poorly written story that I have ever read on this site.
    You have a good idea on Harry being abused by Vernon and is saved by Severus, who ends up being his father.
    I really think you should get a new beta from the beta group that we have and get down and dirty with your story. It has potential to be a good story but as it stands it is a very poorly written one. I suggest a total rewrite of the story from start to finish.
    There is almost no sense of plot or direction to where this story is going.
    And the Aurors wouldn't go after a muggle, no matter what they did to a Wizard or a Witch, they would go after a Wizard or a Witch. Have the muggle police go after the Dursleys. That would be the only proper thing to do.
    Please listen to the other reviewers and what I tell you, we only want to help you improve your story to be the best you can produce and to be proud of. This story can be something you can be proud of but how it stands it is not even that. You can improve it with the help of a new beta reader and a reworking of the story.
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  • From on January 20, 2007
    First chapter's a dissapointment filled with inacuracys.
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  • From thrnbrooke on January 15, 2007
    Soooo can't wait for chapter 13!!!
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  • From ANON - Drew on January 13, 2007
    Hope to see them up soon :d
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