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Reviews for Love is a Battlefield (COMPLETE)

By : kelliechar

From ANON - inkslinger on June 01, 2006
May I offer constructive criticism, not on content, but form? A lot of your paragraphs run long, which is fine on the printed page, but tough on the eyes here. A way to remedy that is, whenever a new character begins speaking, treat it as a new paragraph, otherwise it's confusing, and disrupts the rhythm of the narrative (at least to me). Don't be afraid of punctuation either, that also helps create a smooth flow.
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From ANON - Ally on May 21, 2006
you are a great writter I cant wait until the next installment love is a battlefield comes out it is awesome! cant wait

Ally
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