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From ANON - gypsycarmen on October 24, 2006
I find the struggle of emotions quite humman and truly well written, heart bound to honour can only try and live by that honour
but a heart bound to unconditional love is open to all....

carry one dear...bravo

gypsycarmen
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From ANON - Natyslacks on October 22, 2006
I love this story and thank you for reading it, after reading your author response I agree with you. I looked into the characters and I liked the way you formatted this story. Thank you for writing it!! I loved your characterisation and where this story is going. I can't wait to read more so please update soon!
Love Natalie
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From ANON - LCDrusilla on October 21, 2006
There's a very easy way to make me disappear from your reviews for Tainted White and that is to remove my review. I made the mistake of not reading any of your Author Notes so I missed every part that talked about grammatical errors and writing from one language and into another. Forgive me for being a smarmy, arrogant American.
My only reason for defending myslef is this: I wanted to see how well your story was doing and if my review had affected anyone elses opinion because that is the last thing I want done. What I say is to be taken with a grain of salt because I am ONE preson among a vast sea of people, what I tell you should mean absolutely nothing. Just because my tastes don't coinside with your writing styles doesn't mean you are a bad writer.

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From ANON - 2bfoundwanting on October 21, 2006
I love your story, it is extremely interesting with a new plot and an amazing title. I do love the choppiness in which you write because that is the way i think many times.

However, i just read thru the review that you got so upset about. I think you may have misunderstood her because from what i read it did seem that she was trying to be constructive. I think at one point she even points out that you have an amazing plot. Just because some of it is criticsm doesn't mean it is a Flame.

Now obviously you have an amazing emotional tie to this story, having gone through some of the things you put Hermione through, or so I gathered from your author not. Thus, it is expected that you might be upset by criticsm for something so close to your heart. But I just think the extra post was not needed especially because the reviewer did give you some very good compliments.

I hope you continue with your story because i am waiting at the edge of my seat for the next insallment, but i also think you should take down your response to that reviewer, for the ammount of bad things she said I think that it would look better if you rise above it and the anger it created in you.

Just my thoughts, but just know that overall i think you are an amazing writer with a great plot. Keep up the great work!
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From ANON - Lanie on October 20, 2006
First of all, congratulations on a nice story - I like how you actually thought things through and have an explanation to doing the things you do (most authors kind of just go into their fics willy-nilly and make stuff up and it's obvious). However, I felt I had to comment on your response to a certain reader - despite your talents as a writer, I felt you over-reacted. I felt dedicating a whole chapter/post to addressing him/her was unnecessary. Here you are asking for reviews, but when a person gives you criticism, you blow up. Now, granted, that person sounded a tad superior and condescending, and their choice to focus on stupid shit like "human servants working at the malfoy mansion" was pretty lame, but I felt it was still pretty constructive.
A tip: when a person tells you some bad things about your work along with good things, it's not insulting you and then adding unnecessary compliments, it's called CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM. Although that person could have phrased things better, he/she probably just wanted to help, however unwanted that was. By merely criticizing or worse, just saying a fic sucks for no reason at all is called FLAMING and THAT may be worth a post or two (lord knows a lot of authors here do so). But the person took the time to say why she didn't like something and where and it was obvious she read the story through and through.
In any case, since you have a very strong will, i know criticism and this post won't stop you from writing, which is good since you have a very large group of fans eagerly awaiting you next real chapter.
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From ANON - JUST A READER on October 20, 2006
I WANT TO CONGRATULATE YOU FOR YOUR FANTASTIC STORY, I JUST LOVE IT. I ALSO AGREE WITH YOU ARGUMENTATIVE TEXT, I ALMOST GAVE UP WRITTING DUE TO SOME NASTY REVIEWS. PLEASE KEEP FILLING MY DAYS WITH YOUR WONDERFUL WORK.
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From ANON - Malinda on October 20, 2006
Sorry, I must write some more since I just finished reading LCDrusilla's (I think that was their name) review...

"Reading Tainted White was like reading an internal monologue on fast forward. Bits and pieces were left out or skipped." That part made me laugh my ass off cause, as you know, it's one of the reasons I love your fic so much! I love the push-pull inner struggle. The choppiness, the skipped parts; it all makes my imagination run wild. LOVE IT!

Oh, and by the way, LCDrusilla, it's spelled A-D-V-I-C-E, not A-D-V-I-S-E (which is a verb). Maybe you could use a beta...
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From ANON - Malinda on October 20, 2006
SWEET BABY JESUS! So, I just read your "author's note" and let me say that, at first, I was laughing - especially the part about 'when you write a story in Croatian (Oh God, I think I spelled that wrong, sorry) you can send it to me and I'll tell you all the mistakes you made' (paraphrasing). BUT, the farther down I read, the more and more upset I got. Who was this person damning you for your work? Well, at least, who the hell did they think they were?

After reading your response, I am stunned, saddened (at what you went through) and embarrassed that another person would be so totally ignorant as to try and stuff you into some category, when they have no idea who you are. It's appalling, frankly.

Your response was well written, heart-numbing and brought tears to my eyes (I am so sorry for what you've been through.

To whomever wrote that 'review', next time maybe just click the "back" button and save yourself the embarrassment.

P.S. Can't wait for the next chapter!

P.S.S. Did they have a problem with House-elves? Ummm...cause they're canon, JK created them, so...WTF was the problem with that? Ugh, when I'm done writing this, I'm gonna go read that 'review'

Tons of Love,
Malinda
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From PinkTribeChick on October 19, 2006
For Chapter 13 . . .
A yummy chapter . . . glad they both finally admitted how they feel . . . it's about time . . .
Keep up the great work! More soon please! 8~D
~ptc~
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From ANON - nina on October 18, 2006
Hey i am so glad you updated.
i was away from my comp for a while so i only got to read chapter 13 today~~~~~IT WAS AWSOME~~~~
love it.
and ps: LCDru-something writting in an other lenguage is hard if you want to help fine but if all you want to do is criticize then go to hell

Luv nina_85
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From ANON - sheedy on October 17, 2006
I love your unique perspective. I think the way you write is very "film noir". I imagine most of your scenes in black and white ranther than in color. Please keep up the great work. Don't let a few critics get you down you can't please everyone.
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From ANON - ~*T*~ on October 17, 2006
Hey, don't worry about the other ignorant people out
there, your story is one of the best and my
personal favorites. your a fantastic writer and should be
praised for it. you know what you write, how you sought out for it,
and the way you show the character's personalities and thoughts,
are displayed in such a skillful and exceptional way.
I understand how you wanted the story and you did it perfectly.
you leave enough to the imagination,keep up the good work and
i look forward to reading your stories to come. =D
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From ANON - LCDrusilla on October 16, 2006
I've read all 13 chapters and I have a bit of advise. Well, it'll probably be more than a bit anyway. I want to get the first two chapters out of the way because if it hadn't been for the glowing reviews I read for Tainted White then I most surely would have stopped reading around the third chapter. Your first chapter reads very incoherently, am I to assume that Hermione's physical state is suppose to parallel the writing style? If I am then her fever showed brightly through the writing however when the second chapter arrived with a responsive Hermione I can't help but say that it felt like I was reading a telograph. Also, the idea of Draco having human servants when the wizarding world clearly has house evles to fill those shoes is a hard lemon to swallow. Your idea for the story, the plot anyway is exceptional and you have moments of brillance but those moments of brilliance are shattered by some of your grammatical errors (obvious ones too) and the choppy sentences in some areas. Reading Tainted White was like reading an internal monologue on fast forward. Bits and pieces were left out or skipped. What I'm getting at is that your execution of the story was poorly done and needs revision. If you truly do have a Beta working with you they need to do a better job.
Some of the moments that sparkled were Hermione's constant reference to white (although you could have been much more obvious and showed the imagry of lost innocence through having white garments or white furniture). The aspect of Draco finding Hermione's tears beautiful was very emotional, it had an impact on the story that made me, personally, want to continue reading. However having Hermione all of a sudden start to cave, and for almost no reason, for Draco at the fourth chapter was much too soon. The chapters are too short and underdeveloped to have Hermione suddenly feel for Draco. We, the readers, should have seen small things first. For example you could have had Hermione think of Draco in an abstract way while reading, have her think, "Would Draco like this?" and possibly have her dismiss the thought immediately because we know that sudden mood changes don't occur like that. The timing of a story and execution of it are key in writing, please remember that.
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From ANON - Mercci on October 15, 2006
HOT!!!!! LOVE IT!!!!! This story, I'm happy to say, is in my top 3 for this site. Actually, I only read this story and two others, but this story is SO GOOD!!! I especially like the parts in the story where you
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LovE IT!!!!! Update soon please!!! :)

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From ANON - saya on October 14, 2006
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