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Reviews for Her Darkest Secrets

By : gryffindorblood85
  • From ANON - Stag on July 03, 2006
    The age old question resonates through my head as I continue to read this story: Who in the fuck is Hermione's mother's baby's daddy?? I'm enjoying the fluffiness, though.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 03, 2006
    Ooops, when i wrote that review i didn't realize that you had only written 8 chapters so far, i had just wanted to go ahead and post that stuff before i forgot..
    Another thing about the father, Obviously he's a deatheater, but it seems like you are implying that its Voldy...which if it is she is not a pureblood..since Voldemort is a half blood.
    Please don't take these reviews as me being overly critical..i'm trying to just point out things that will keep me from reading a story if i don't like the plot. You really have potential as a writer you just need to space things out a bit...try to not rush everything into a short chapter, when you get tired of writeing take a break..don't just cram it in a chapter to appease the readers.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 03, 2006
    ok, i'm only on chapter 8 so far..but a few things are bugging me...for one, it almost seems like you got rid of harry and ron because you didn't want to bother writeing thier characters....in other words things sound rushed and generic. :: shrugs::
    The sex seemd rushed as well, I mean i don' really find it beleiveable that she got into a fight and for draco to console her he has to "make love" to her..kinda seems like that should have been done when they were both calm and not angry...'cause sex obviously does not fix everything and hte way you have it written implies that it does. Also she's pregnant 3months...and draco said something along the lines of "yes i remeber that night and can't wait for it to happen again" like they have only had sex once? Generally once a couple has sex they don't wait a few months inbetween doing it again!
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  • From ANON - Stag on July 03, 2006
    PREGGIE! I love...
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  • From ANON - blondiexoxo on July 03, 2006
    wow i hope u update soon
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  • From ANON - Stag on July 02, 2006
    I guess the Draco making Hermione feel better scene is a consolation to NOT knowing who the father is. Hmm...
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  • From ANON - Stag on July 01, 2006
    Poo. WHO IS IT??? I'm sad now. I was excited when I saw a new chapter is up. Now I see nothing has changed since the last. *sigh* WHO????
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  • From ANON - Stag on June 30, 2006
    Dirty dirty trick leaving us all hanging on who her father is. Blast you!
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  • From ANON - Elentari on June 30, 2006
    I like it so far!

    But that Cliffhanger was mean! ;-)

    I haven`t read a story like this (Hermione`s pureblooded) for a long time.

    Hope there will be more and longer chapters!

    Elentari
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  • From ANON - AFC on June 30, 2006
    nooooooooo...you cant just leave it there. damn those who believe in cliffys. please update soon!!!
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  • From ANON - Karen on June 28, 2006
    There's an awful lot of influence from similar Hermione and Draco stories. You have potential, but it'd help to step back a little bit. Hermione's first thought shouldn't be that her summer's going rotten, it should be shock, stress from hiding so much, etc. Hermione's adoption should be on the back of her mind more. More details and color would help lighten up the narrative a little bit too.
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  • From ANON - geo on June 26, 2006
    It looks good. Your a good writer, keep it up. When someone speaks in your story then don't do all the quotes in one paragraph, separte it a little. You should use more detail and don't make too many things happen all at one, her parents died, she's adopted and she's seeing Draco all in one chapter is a little hard to take in all at once. Please update,

    geo
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