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Reviews for State of the Union

By : lbrado
  • From ANON - Karen on July 07, 2006
    Wow! Pretty great story so far. I was expecting it to be all cliched, but it's not in the least.

    Good job Duchess!
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  • From ANON - Addie mae on July 07, 2006
    i usually revive at the end of what i read so i finished the prewritten chaps so i'm reviewing cuz i wat tyou to continue!!! i want to see how this ends up!!
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  • From ANON - Charlotte on July 06, 2006
    Fascinating. You write a really convincing clinically depressed, self-destructive Hermione. Wow! Not a cliche. I can't wait to see what you write next.
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  • From ANON - J.S. on July 06, 2006
    I hope she gets out of her depression soon.
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  • From ANON - Ashlee on July 06, 2006
    omg the story was absolutely ah-mazing !
    update soon please !!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - manda on July 06, 2006
    I love this story!! I love the whole marriage law thing anyways, but you have put a twist on it. I like how they were sort of friends or acquaintances before and that Draco is doing it all to help Hermione come to terms with things. More please!!
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  • From ANON - Belladonna on July 06, 2006
    I like it; please do continue.
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  • From ANON - The Charmed One on July 06, 2006
    I really like this story! It's well-written and the lenght of the later chapter suits me fine, so keep up the good work! ... and update soon!
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  • From ANON - kris.t!n.e on July 06, 2006
    After only reading chapter 1 and the opening paragraph of chapter 2, I can already tell this is going to be great!!.. I just had to stop and post right now before I forget. I'm not a writer , but a reader. And I love marriage law fics, never enough out there. I mean quality ones.. and This is it!... I doubt this is going to be a cliche, I really do.. It's all a matter of how it's reached or approached... (hmmm excuse my bad grammer).. Pretty much what i'm trying to say is... Your writing technique or the way you write is great, powerfull and different. Opening paragraph of Chapter 2... Routines, i loved how you conveyed that, strategically descibing each thing Hermione does, looks into her personality and how she dips back into it right after her parents death annoucement/funeral? (not sure just lots of people in that scene) Chapter 1 is great as well, Repetition of "Parents. Dead." was a good use as well, emphasised the emotion and that it was the only thing on her mind (omg i actually remembered things from adv. englsih unit that was like 2002)... tehehe... i really hope everything turns out happy for Hermion *hint* yes im a happy ending kind of person.. but if this turns out sad ( at this point i can't really tell) i'll still love it for the way it's written because you'll get a whole bunch of tears out of me.... bonus points if you could make me cry, smile and laugh all at the same time at the end... *mwuahahha* thats never happened before.. and if you do accomplish that... it means you've touched my heart.... sorry about being all of the place with this review, it's they way my mind works.. hahahah

    cheers!!
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  • From ANON - Bree on July 06, 2006
    So I'm at the edge of my seat wondering if 1) Draco will end up being a complete ass-hole and 2) if Hermione will ever get out of her funk... It seems like Draco's character has the makings of being capable of an affair, and honestly, I'd hate that... So far so good I mean, but I can only hope that things don't get too ugly =( So ya keep up the story (hopefully???) and I'll keep checking for any updates!!
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  • From ANON - adri on July 06, 2006
    awesome.
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  • From ANON - Given2Fly on July 06, 2006
    Excellent. I must say I'm intrigued to see where this will go...though I'm not quite sure I like Hermione being as submissive as she is. Perhaps she'll slip out of it soon though.

    I've enjoyed it and you MUST continue!
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  • From ANON - bootz on July 06, 2006
    It's a wonderful story. I'm actually suprised it has only taken one review. Few things though, try making your chapters longer (which you did) and Hermione seemed a little OOC, seeing as she agrees to this marriage quite fast without much of a fight. Try building up her fierce personality. Other than that, job well done!
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  • From ANON - joanna on July 06, 2006
    I forgot to tell you if I like your story or not. I do and I can't wait for the next few chapters to find out if Draco succeeds in helping Hermione get her old self back and if they do eventually fall in love.
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  • From ANON - joanna on July 06, 2006
    Sorry for not putting a review in each chapter. I like to read all the chapters posted and then put in a review. When I first read your notes in the beginning, you mentioned that this is different compared to the other Marriage Law influenced stories like how they will fall instantly in love. I must admit that I like those stories but after reading yours, I see why it is different. In some way, Draco does began to fall for Hermione but obviously don't show it or refused to show it. And Hermione is in depression because of her parents death. I wish you give more insight as to what Hermione is really feeling about everything. At the end of Chapter 6, Hermione was suprised at Harry's remark. Are you hinting that there will be some sort of romance between the two?
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