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Reviews for Hermione's Detour

By : lpicw
  • From SecretLetterC on December 22, 2010
    I have a question...CAN YOU WRITE MORE!? I need it. Really I do. You have to write more because I am totally obsessed. UPDATE or MAKE A NEW STORY JUST LIKE THIS ONE!!!
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  • From SecretLetterC on April 17, 2010
    Hot. Some grammatical mistakes here and there, but I liked all of the sexy things that Hermione had to do. I can't wait for Draco to return. (I'm assuming that that is her mysterious master) Good Job. :)
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  • From ANON - Amy on December 28, 2008
    I'm not normally a fan of these types of Dramiones but i liked this one


    The end paragraph had me in tears

    Well done

    xx
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  • From margaritama on October 22, 2008
    I don't understand so did Draco torture her, did she create this world or did he really love her?
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  • From SlytherinIcePrincess on April 10, 2008
    what is the devise?
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on November 22, 2007
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 16, 2007
    pooper
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  • From ANON - Lolloser on October 11, 2007
    This, is without a shadow of doubt, is one of the stupidiest stories I've ever seen. I am not saying it to be mean, either. None of this stuff would work the way you described it.
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  • From SoftObsidian74 on September 07, 2007
    Um....OK! I like BDSM as much as the next girl..but this story was so dispassionate and cruel with no character development so it made the bdsm seem so cheap. It's good you're trying to write about the subject though, just hope you get more into the top's head and bottom's real heart next time you write about this topic.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 04, 2007
    This has to be by far the worst D/Hr story I have ever laid eyes on

    It sucks!

    It is just utter bollocks!

    It doesn
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  • From SlytherinIcePrincess on July 18, 2007
    what was the potion that tippy gives hermione in chapter 2?
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  • From ANON - Viperess on December 11, 2006
    OK, I took a closer look at some of the other reviews, particularly those regarding whether or not the DM/HG relationship in this story is "real BDSM." Obviously in a (proper) real-life BDSM relationship there is trust, a safeword, etc., and there is no rape or kidnapping or manipulating someone into signing a one-sided contract.

    However, adult stories (porn, erotica, whatever you want to call 'em) with BSDM *themes* often do not depict real-life BDSM relationships. Remember this is *fantasy*, not reality. Think of it as sort of like a role-play if that analogy helps you. Lots of us (myself included) have fantasies of things we would never do/want done to us in real life. This type of story is a way to put such fantasies in writing. I don't know about you but sometimes I get turned on reading a story that would shock and horrify me if it were non-fiction.

    I can't speak for the author, but I doubt that this story is meant to show Hermione and Draco in a proper BDSM relationship, with mutual trust, respect, etc. (See my previous post, for why Draco probably wouldn't go for such a relationship anyway, IMHO: even if he has a secret crush on Hermione, Draco can't afford to become romantically involved with her. The only way he can be with her is by making her his slave.)

    A reader has a right to be offended by a story, but it's best to try to take that up through *polite discourse* (rather than insults and name-calling - I'm not naming names, you know who you are) with the author, explaining that you think the story should have a particular warning, or whatever. Trying to get the story censored by reporting it to the moderator is not an appropriate step unless you have already tried politely addressing your problem with the author, IMO.

    Obviously, if someone did report this story to the moderator (as at least one person threatened to do), the moderator did not think that person's complaint merited removing the story. Ever hear the story of the boy who cried wolf?

    I do think that a "noncon" warning would be in order here. I mean, yes, Hermione likes it, but she doesn't really get a choice, after all, does she. That way people who only want to see stories about relationships in which everyone is treated with respect will know not to read it. That said, I hope you don't let all the nasty reviews discourage you. I try to offer constructive criticism and mention what I *like* about the story too; I don't think there's ever any excuse for posting nasty comments, name-calling, unfounded accusations, etc., no matter how offended one may be. Those people need to find a more mature way of expressing themselves.
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  • From ANON - Viperess on December 11, 2006
    This is a pretty hot story. I'm looking forward to seeing the rewrite/alternate version, though, because the scenes with Tippy the House-Elf were kind of weird/silly rather than sexy. I think I'd like it better if Draco at least had a *human* servant of some sort to "train" his slave, or if he did it himself. (The training is half the fun, isn't it?))

    I like how you have Hermione sort of becoming accustomed to being a sex slave but I think it happens too fast; it should be more gradual. There should also be at least a little angst when she discovers that her master is none other than Draco Malfoy. Malfoy is OOC too but I can sort of understand that; Hermione's *reactions* to her situation are what's OOC in her case. I think Malfoy might behave surprisingly in the (apparently frequent!) situation of having Hermione as his sex slave (you could argue that he secretly has a crush on her and this is the only way he, as a bigoted Pureblood Death Eater, can fulfill his desire). I probably would have made him meaner, more dominating, and especially, more smug. At least to start with.

    The whole situation when Lucius showed up seemed kind of odd, for reasons that have been explained by others.

    As a couple people have mentioned, there are quite a few errors (spelling/grammar/etc.) in this story, so if you do intend to go ahead with a rewrite/alternate version, I second (third, fourth, whatever) the recommendation that you find a beta to fix these.

    Finally, I'd like to see more of that clit-ball! I was never clear on how it works, the description of what it even looks like is sort of confusing, but the concept is hot! (I would think Hermione would figure out what the initials "DM" stand for, especially since he had called her "Mudblood.")
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  • From ANON - Christina on December 03, 2006
    I just read Jade's review...Okay, I'm not sure if you've realized it, but this is not only a FANfiction, but an adult fanfiction...porn actually. It doesn't have to go perfectly with the books! The whole POINT of this website is to write stories about hot sex, which this story had a lot of!...even if the Hermione/elf parts were kind of strange. LOL. As with any other story you read, if you don't like it, don't read it. It's as simple as that.
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  • From ANON - Christina on December 03, 2006
    Wow! Great story! But did Draco really have to die? That part was so sad *tear*. LOL.
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