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Reviews for On the Wings of Change

By : Dreamwind
  • From ANON - evilchild (not signed in) on August 10, 2006
    For chapter 1: I like the story so far and hope more will be posted 'cause I think it's interesting since there are not that many Dragon!Harry fics. But there were some problems I had with this chapter. Only one other person brought up a problem.

    One: after Harry thought he was a beautiful dragon, the next sentence doesn't make any sense in the way it is worded. To have it like that, it is presumed that somebody said something to warrant that sentence being worded that way. The sentence sounds better this way: Harry spun around, half falling in the lake, when he heard a voice come from the forest behind him. This way you don't need a sentence in which someone is saying something.

    Two: Why did the other dragon laugh? And why did Harry nod? They just happened, seemingly, for no reason. She moved and he got offended, why? Her name is in point three.

    Three: (and this is what the other person brought up) The other dragon name comes out of no where where it says Harry got offended and she (I can't begin to spell her name) laughed. One minute you have the "other dragon" then you have her name. When did we or Harry find out her name and that she was a she?

    This isn't a point but there were also big spaces after Harry thought he was beautiful where words seem like they should have been in those spaces.

    Don't think this is a flame 'cause it's not. It's just something you needed pointed out to you since a lot of authors don't review what they've posted. This is of course shown in cut off chapters when the put the html code wrong or words in a font that they shouldn't be in. Sorry for that little rant. It just ticks me off that some authors get told the problem(s) and never goes to fix it(them). I would not have written all of this for you to read and then ignore. Please look at your chapter one to see what I'm talking about because the prologue and the part up to Harry thought he was beautiful was well-written then after that I don't know what happened.

    *going off to read chapter 2 before submitting review*
    *is back*

    *sigh* Ok, the beginning of chapter 2 was confusing. Kerr was teaching Harry about dragon ways? How did that happen? Is Kerr going to Hogwarts as well? I think you're leaving out a lot of vital information pertaining to your fic.
    For the vote though I pick 1, 3, 4, 5, 6, and 7. Whatever pairing wins please make it believable and not rushed.

    Again, this is not a flame!!! I'm just pointing out some things in your fic that were confusing to me. Like the saying goes: "If you're confused about something, chances are other people are too." This is the longest review I've ever given any one and I hope you take what I've written to heart.
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  • From ANON - silverdragonfly on August 09, 2006
    love your story
    update soon
    i pick harryxcharlie
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  • From ANON - Jade on August 09, 2006
    great story update soon
    i pick harry/charlie
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  • From ANON - ayanna on August 09, 2006
    I think a severus/harry/draco would be good.
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  • From ANON - kitten on August 09, 2006
    please please please make it harry/charlie
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  • From ANON - siren on August 09, 2006
    i think harry/charlie because charlie is the dragon expert and they seem like a cute couple
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  • From ANON - shadow on August 09, 2006
    harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie harry/charlie
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  • From ANON - baby dragon on August 09, 2006
    harry/charlie as there are not many of that pairing
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  • From ANON - yuki_meiseki on August 09, 2006
    harry x snape! mwahahahahaha
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  • From ANON - Evil2 on August 08, 2006
    I personally am voting for a Harry/Charlie fic. If you want to throw in Severus, well I won't complain. That could be very interesting. Looking forward to the outcome.
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  • From ANON - Yana on August 08, 2006
    Harry and Kerr
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  • From ANON - Kermit on August 08, 2006
    I think it should be Harry x Draco x Charlie or Harry x Draco. I hope you pick one of these pairings. Great story so far.
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  • From ANON - Ethan on August 08, 2006
    Personally,I think Harry and Kerr would be much better as friends. Harru doesn't have to be paired up, does he? Romance is overrated sometimes. It would be cool to have Snape in the story too, as an educated person very interested in discovering the extents of Harry's abilities or something... I think Haryy and Kerr would work very well as best friends who shack it up sometimes.
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  • From ANON - dragonfhain on August 08, 2006
    Hi hi, I like your take on the creature inheritence plotline (as you can probably tell I like dragons!) and I definitely like how your story is progressing. Hmm... my vote for pairing(s) is Harry x Severus x Draco. Although I'm more of a HPSS fan, for some reason I can just see Draco being facinated with Harry because of his Dragon form, lol. Unfortunately, I'm not usually a fan of OCs (too many Mary Sue fics *shudder*) but Kerr so far is OK. Please update again soon!
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  • From ANON - MariNoir on August 08, 2006
    I really like the story so far! I can't wait to read more. I vote for Harry x Severus, as its one of my favorite pairings. Update soon!
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