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Reviews for Total Eclipse

By : Given2Fly
  • From jreel08 on January 02, 2010
    Wow. Nice cliffy. Can't wait for the next update.
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  • From bananasforyou on March 19, 2008
    wtf? i wow just surprised damn!
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  • From erika on August 01, 2007
    woooo i luv your story it is undescribable please please please update soon!!!!!!!
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  • From Iheartcake on April 18, 2007
    ooooh, I really like this story! I can see why its you correcting my stories and not the other way around, I'ts really well written! Can't wait for your update!
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  • From shelagh on March 18, 2007
    OK color me suprised!!! Great plot twist. I hope you are feeling better.
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  • From wickienchen on March 18, 2007
    his son? this should get interesting.
    go on fast! i love this little fiction...

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  • From KayTeeJay on March 06, 2007
    Please tell me you haven't abandoned this :-( I really like it
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  • From EmperialHighness on February 27, 2007
    please please hurry abd write more i cant wait
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  • From nonentity on February 21, 2007
    I like the slow revelations about their past history. Very nice sexual tension too. Keep up the good work.
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  • From catysmom1028 on February 17, 2007
    Please update soon.
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  • From Emmylovedraco on February 17, 2007
    I love this story please update soon,
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  • From wicraven on February 16, 2007
    Great post, love the story, can't wait until you post again, so please post again soon. Thanks
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  • From ANON - Mack on January 08, 2007
    Thanks for the update - short but sweet. I'm interested to see where this story will progress. You've set it up well, but you're taking a while actually getting into the story itself - it needs some meat (not necessarily the kind typical in most of the stories on this site [draco man-meat lol]...though you certainly won't hear me complaining when it DOES get to that point). I myself am the queen of starting stories that sound really awesome in my head, writing a couple chapters and then a)losing interest or b)flailing helplessly as I try and figure out what I actually want to happen next - that proverbial brick wall. What I'm trying to say is that I sympathize if you're having trouble with it. That said, you probably don't care at all about what I have to say at this point, as expressed in that lovely author's note (though please note that, true to my word, I DID in fact come back to check for a update, if a little late).

    Anyways, it's late and I'm rambling. Cute chapter, you write well, and I really would like to read more of it.

    As a side note, take a couple minutes before posting to read over your work or run it through a spell checker (or have a friend read it....as I said previously, contructive criticism can be your best friend). There are a couple little mistakes that, though small, can sometimes detract from the quality of the peice. The only thing I remember catching was that "strategy" was spelt incorrectly (you said "stradegy" on a couple different occasions) - it's often worth it just to take the 2 seconds to run through it really quickly and fix up small errors and goofs.

    I know this review is far too long already, but I want you to know that I'm not trying to sound condescending. I genuinely like this story, and I want to read more of it. I feel a bit like I'm walking on eggshells when I review though, considering your last response. Don't take any criticism too much to heart - I'm just some faceless person on the internet who has enjoyed reading your work and would like to see more of it, as well as provide any feedback that may or may not help you to improve. Take it for what it is. Throw it out if you don't like it. Don't let yourself get too worked up.

    Hope you've had a good holiday season.

    Happy 2007!

    -Mackenzie
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  • From ANON - candlewaxreader on November 25, 2006
    wow you weren't kidding this last chapter was short. lol this is going great! i am enjoying every chapter more as i go. i can't wait for more. and don't worry about the complainers! everyone has an opinion. but mine is this is perfect so far and you write the way you want cause last i checked this was your story! update soon please!
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  • From ANON - Gloria on November 21, 2006
    Off to a great start! Update soon!

    ~G
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