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Reviews for Betrayed

By : eiriyukithewriter
  • From AyaChan2006 on July 21, 2009
    Hey are you going to continue this or should I just delete it from my list??
    E-mail me with your answer at kaoru_14_89@hotmail.com.
    Please also leave your Author Name and what story you are contacting me about to save confusion.
    ...Ta

    Aya

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  • From AyaChan2006 on June 16, 2008
    hey are you going to continue this or should i just delete it from my list??
    e-mail me with your answer at kaoru_14_89@hotmail.com
    ...ta

    Aya

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  • From ANON - Dark Angel on November 11, 2007
    Okay, I didn't even finish chapter 2. I'm sorry, but the
    story is lacking SO much. Is this your first fic or somethin?
    You could do with a LOT of practice.
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  • From ANON - Dark Angel on November 11, 2007
    Okay, I didn't even finish chapter 2. I'm sorry, but the
    story is lacking SO much. Is this your first fic or somethin?
    You could do with a LOT of practice.
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  • From ANON - Dark Angel on November 11, 2007
    Okay that took about 30 seconds to read. Seriously, you
    REALLY need to slow down and make the chapters a bit
    more lengthy.
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  • From ANON - Dark Angel on November 11, 2007
    The story just seemed to rushed. Like you were trying to get it over with as quickly as
    you possibly could. But I'm going to continue reading and hope it gets better and more
    detailed in chapter 1.
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  • From Draeconin on June 06, 2007
    Good story idea, but you really need to develop it. Far too much is left out - and I'm only at chapter three. For instance, how did Harry discover he was becoming a vampire? What was his reaction to it? Also, why did Dumbledore agree to betray Harry (one would expect it of Fudge)? And so much more. If so much is left out at this point, do I really want to continue? I don't think so.
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  • From Heksy on June 06, 2007
    I am sorry.
    I get the feeling you didn't think this story through enough.
    You tend to jump all over the place and the switching between the story and the point of view are making it even harder to follow the story.

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  • From ANON - Anon on June 06, 2007
    please update soon i am loving this story
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  • From thrnbrooke on June 05, 2007
    Uh oh! Not good! I sooo need chapter 6!
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  • From thrnbrooke on March 22, 2007
    But where is Harry? Need chapter 5!
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  • From MrGalion on March 21, 2007
    Angry protest "YOU KILLED DRACO"!
    J/k
    Please do try and save him thou.
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  • From thrnbrooke on February 17, 2007
    Ron blames Harry but it was Ginny's choice! Now they're both vampires! Need chapter 4!
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  • From DestinyDragon on February 07, 2007
    I love this. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Please update soon.
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  • From thrnbrooke on February 07, 2007
    He just bit someone? And how did he know it was Draco? Soooo need chapter 4!
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