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By : redheadfaerie
  • From ANON - Nina on August 24, 2006
    Hey!
    Very nice beginning of the story! I just need to get something straight: Has Ron gone mad, since he is at the hospital in the ward where the Longbottoms were? And how did he go mad?
    Keep up the good work and I am looking forward to the next chapter!

    ~Nina
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  • From ANON - da4life on August 23, 2006
    nice please update soon u got me all curious
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  • From ANON - Donavon on August 23, 2006
    Very good informative opening chapter. Look forward to reading more. Best wishes,
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  • From ANON - Moonstar on August 22, 2006
    Nice start! I must say, this is a rather interesting turn of things. The only thing you might want to consider is the format of your story. When you have a character talking and another one speaking directly afterward, it's easier to read if you write it like this:


    "I'm sorry, " he started, making her snort, but she didn't say anything, her arms folded across her chest. He continued, "Honey it was a one time thing, I promise, it'll never happen again."

    "It can happen as often as you want, we're through." He tried to cut in, but she kept talking, staring daggers at him. "I'm going home. I will be out within the next three days, and if in that time you show up, you will not like the consequences." At this, she stood up to leave and he got down on his knees.

    "Hermione, honey, we can get through this, I can make it better, I -"

    "I don't care for beggars," she said coldly, interrupting him.



    Not in italics, per se, but with the space between them. Aside from that, this is a wonderful idea so far and I look forward to reading more as you post!!!
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  • From ANON - georgina on August 22, 2006
    I like it so far. Keep up the good work, update soon!

    geo
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  • From ANON - Avanell on August 22, 2006
    Oh, more please! Can;t wait for them to...ahem...you know ;)
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