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Reviews for Walking the Gray Line ~ COMPLETED

By : Ms_Figg
  • From ANON - sheedy on October 25, 2006
    What a lovely twisted imagination you have!! Bravo!
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  • From ANON - Ms_Figg on October 25, 2006
    Lyta: I can see your point. Out of the 41 HP based stories I've written, this is the first one where Hermione actively wants a family. In the others, she is more as you envision her.
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  • From ANON - angel on October 25, 2006
    ~lol~ man sev .. well now they now he love her and they will marry in 48 hour.. please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .... later for now

    angel
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  • From ANON - amaria on October 25, 2006
    OMG I love this fic sooooo much!i also read your what was i thinking fics and thought they were amazing but didnt realise it was you who had also written them!So all in all I am completely addicted to your fics!
    How freaky were those demons,jacking off right over them lol!And now they have to get married,there seems to be a lot to this ritual that Snape wasnt letting Hermione in on lol.Wouldnt it just be so funny if it turned out there was one more thing he didnt quite tell her,a baby prhaps lol
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  • From ANON - Jan on October 25, 2006
    ????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????MARRY????????????????????????????????????????????
    Not really the way I was picturing them getting married.
    Finding out that they were meant to be together and a few obstacles and a few months passing by with them making the world know that they Loved each other and that they intend to get marry was more like I was thinking but this is a new twist to any other story I've read.
    Can't wait to see how this turns out.
    please update soon
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  • From ANON - pemi on October 25, 2006
    So very creative. Excellent story.
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  • From ANON - Lyta on October 25, 2006
    not all grown-up women crave to be wives and mothers at the age of twenty-something, especially if they're academically brilliant as hermione is supposed to be. being a 40 year old scientist myself, half the women i know didn't become involved in family business until way over 30, and the other half didn't want to be mothers at all. but as i said, don't let it concern you, probably it's just me - it just doesn't agree with my personal idea of hermione.
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  • From ANON - Ms_Figg on October 25, 2006
    There's always OOCness in love stories concerning Severus, at least mine...but it is always towards Hermione and not others. He is just as snarky as ever with everyone else, and he still retains a bit of snarkiness toward Hermione, though he tempers it. Hermione wanting a family seemed reasonable to me, she's not a student at Hogwarts anymore...but a grown woman. Severus needed to talk to Hermione. They were sleeping together and she loved him and knew nothing about him other than he was a potions professor and former spy. It was also a concrete way to show the changes in the wizard, how he was growing closer to the witch, trusting her. Sorry it threw you but going from galleon-driven bastard to wizard-in-love requires some snark reduction and emotional growth. An (almost) emotionally mature Severus always seems OOC Thanks for reading though.
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  • From ANON - Lyta on October 25, 2006
    well, i have to say that i really loved your story up to chp 59 or so - but the last couple of chapters, i don't know. to me now both of them seem to be way OOC, hermione craving and demanding to be a wife and mother, and severus getting teary-eyed and telling her his life story? and that ritual in the last two chps .... but then again, as i said i really loved the story for the most part, so keep up the good work. possibly it's just me ...
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  • From ANON - Cara on October 24, 2006
    omg!
    it's the daddy of all cliffhangers!
    let's see let's see let's see let's see. i would love to have sex in a library. i could read stephen king and orgasm!
    lol.
    i don't think i have to tell you to update. you're very good about that. =)
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  • From ANON - Mme Snape on October 24, 2006
    This story is awesome!!! I love it. It is quite possibly the hottest story I have ever read! Keep up the GREAT work. Please write another chapter as quickly as you possibly can.
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  • From ANON - Queen Celestia on October 24, 2006
    The young wizards living in the same building as Hermione drove him to it!

    But yes, Severus is being rather stubborn.
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  • From ANON - takemeaway on October 24, 2006
    hehe i smell an orchard up ahead
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  • From ANON - Jan on October 24, 2006
    Oh WOW! A ritual that requires sex to be completed, I was hoping one of these from the moment you first mention it when Hermione asked Severus about the symbols in the cards.^_^*_*
    Please update soon
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  • From ANON - firewall on October 24, 2006
    It makes sense that Severus, a dark wizard, would use dark magic to determine if he loves. Gotta love lemons that masquerade as ancient rituals. LOL
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