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Reviews for A Dare, Hell and Heaven

By : dropedonmyhead
  • From ANON - greenwizard on November 14, 2006
    Wow... This story was great. I love the way you built up to the sex. The tension just kept getting thicker. In my opinion that's the best part. As usual I have a few suggestions though. If you're going to write from different points of view you should keep them together. Like the first half of the chapter be Harry's point of view of that day, then the second half be Snape's. If you write out the whole story in one point of view then rewrite it in another, it basically becomes a repeat. The reader already know what happens. If the goal is to keep a reader's attention, that's not a good way to do it. And in my opinion having those "could be heaven" titles at different parts of the story was distracting. I guess that is a personal preference. I also think you jumped around to flasbacks a little much. You sort of wrote like it was still present tense. It was a little confusing at times.
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  • From ANON - Lioncourt on November 01, 2006
    Oh my god! oh my god! I love this! Amazing! Wonderful! *wide smile*

    The way you devided the chapters with "~The Pit of Hell" and the like I thought was great. Also the way you described Harry's emotions was very good. You had me crying there.

    I dont know if you should post the other chapters or not. This was a very good, witty, fluffy, funny ending all on its own. It all depends on what you are thinking on writing next and how that effects the story... I very much want to know what happens though. So if you dont post the chapters in this story, perhaps you could make them into a sequel? Whatever you decide to do; please mail me when you do!
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  • From ANON - Allison on October 31, 2006
    Please continue! This was an awsome story! Have you thought of doing M-preg?
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  • From ANON - lazycrazykitten on October 26, 2006
    I'd say go on with it. After all Draco Malfoy still has to figure it out.
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  • From ANON - Fallen on October 23, 2006
    Good story update soon (if theres more)

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  • From ANON - kim on October 23, 2006
    Very nice! I had always detested Snape but you guys have made me look at him in a totally different light! Please keep going, and I will keep watching for more! Bright Blessings, and Happy writing, Kim
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  • From ANON - Jan on October 22, 2006
    I was feeling a little sorry for Harry there, but love the out comes.
    It's also nice to read something where his friends accepts him for who he is; there is always those stories out there, where they are never to happy with a gay Harry, a change is really nice.^_^
    keep up the great writhing
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