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From Tommy-Lane on July 24, 2015
"Harry would will as hard as he could, and reality would just have to bend to him." - This is basically my mantra for this story, if I wish it hard enough you'll magically make it all work out.

Gah I just feel like I'm sitting on needles with all these cliffhangers! I read this whole chapter on the edge of my seat and while I'm so happy to hear what the Vesper's plans are - which basically seem like they plan on making him a pampered little sex slave - I feel even more apprehensive now. I don't trust those damn dragon's one little bit (especially since they get so randy when Draco get's angry) and I wouldn't be surprised in the least bit if they took Draco on his "tour" and then "Oops, your here to stay little one, how about some crazy fucked up sex to make you happy about it? And your possessive (insert Harry's beast name that I can't remember) accidentally just died...oh well, guess your all ours for good."

God Draco better not actually go with them but then he's being noble isn't he (at least I like to think he's doing it to save Harry instead of it purely being the call)? I like when Draco sacrifices for Harry but you know Harry's going to flip his shit if he makes it back (By the way your killing me with this!! HE better be alive!!!) only to find out Draco willingly went with them for HIM none the less. Ah the webs we weave.

So here's the plan my evil/brilliant author: One, Harry comes back alive and sane. Two, either Draco shakes the Vesper's OR Harry manages to intervene. Three, We figure out a way for Draco not to be drawn to the damn dragons in the first place and a way to make the Dragon's stop wanting Draco. and Four, they live happily ever after with Harry talking dirty and Draco laughing crazily along out of sheer joy.

Too much to ask for? Ahhh probably but if I will hard enough perhaps me and Harry will get our wish ;)

Update soon!
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From Tommy-Lane on July 24, 2015
Chapter 15

That was intense! Draco giving into the call because he knew somewhere that he was sure to go mad one way or another but still silently begging for Harry to stop him - not to mention Snape throwing out his rigid handbook and doing all he could to try and keep him safe. I feel so bad for him right now - i mean the poor guy was basically waking around dead all year and now there's crazy dragons that want to do something nefarious with him while his mom is STILL trying to get him to marry that damn girl (so, so happy Draco stood up to her and told her to go fuck off), and his boyfriend is very nearly dead and invisible. Seriously it's amazing he's coping as well as he is.

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From Tommy-Lane on July 23, 2015
Chapter 13-14

Oh you are killing me with the suspense!! Not that I'm complaining, I'm rather a sucker for it, but gah!!!!! It really seems like maybe Harry's beast isn't all that bad, more like some sort of protector for whatever the heck Draco is because he's not FULL Vesper. And Draco...really all there is to say is, fuck. Those white dragons are just so evil feeling and while i love the mental image of Harry pacing angrily, throwing Draco over his shoulder and dumping him a classroom, and well...eh, covering him in his scent (love protective/sexy Harry)- I can't help but cringe inside with impending doom at Draco's unwanted reaction to them. How terrifying for them both! I mean even Jaz is freaked out, I figure that's really gotta say something. Harry is right, that ring should NEVER come off Draco's finger, especially after hearing his mother's story.

And just what is up with Draco's reaction anyway? What do they want with him?? Do they want to like turn him into something more...beastly I suppose is the word. And Draco is seriously loosing it (again, I don't mind, I have an odd thing for unhinged Draco and I would not be the least bit surprised if he did have a full blown meltdown soon). Harry better get to him before he makes it out the doors and drag him back and do...things to him ;) Though that just makes Draco more alluring and pisses off the dragons and is killing Harry more quickly...damn you've written one intriguing story line.

Alright deep breath.

On a lighter note...I have to say that I just love that you've made Harry's pen a clicking one, don't know why but the mental image of invisible Harry walking around clicking his pen makes me so happy. And Sneaky Harry for making Draco his mate without him knowing - though I agree with him, Draco would be fuming pissed but secretly dancing all hot and bothered on the inside. Harry's dirty talk in this is awesome, made all that more great with Draco knowing he's saying stuff that would piss him off but can't hear it.

Cannot wait for more!
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From Tommy-Lane on July 20, 2015
Alright so I really should have taken the time between the last seven chapters and reviewed because I just know I'll forget everything I wanted to say but the moment I finally had some free time I just devoured them all - couldn't stop myself. So lets see if I can organize my thoughts.

- I love how so often the best stories come from a simple image in the writers imagination that they want to see played out, but in order to do that you have to create a whole story and world behind it, one of my favorite things about writing. Love that this story came from wanting that shower scene without the cumbersome cloak ;)

- Jaz is brilliant. Seriously love him, not to mention his interactions with Snape are just awesome and hilarious. He is the perfect bouncing board for Draco while trying to get his mind around everything and I'm so curious to see how he manages not only to pull Harry out but how he will react to his beast form with brings me to...

- Harry's beast form in general. Yikes. I'm so intrigued by not only his but Draco's as well. Both so well known for their insane violence and yet their both debating living with it just so they can be wild with each other. Is it to much to hope that Harry won't be mental when he comes back? That he can be around people and still be him? Please? And the same for Draco, perhaps bonding with Harry could ground him in a way, make him stable...I don't know, this is obviously your forte and not mine :) I sitting on pins and needles waiting to find out though!

- Dumbledore you ass. Yes, yes lets just leave Harry to break apart and die because he MAY pose a threat...alright you can come back but ONLY if I can kill you if I deem fit. Ugh I mean, I get it, I do, after seeing the rise and fall of Riddle but still - have some faith in Harry you old man! And way to go for Snape and Draco for fighting for Harry's return even when Harry wasn't willing to.

- All the crazy tension, all the yes and no and please and don't!, good god do you know how to write insanely good smut. Seriously the hall way...dang. Not to mention all the conflicting emotion behind it that just makes it all that much better. That kiss when Draco was trying to control the mating call - oh god that was amazing.

- Loving Ron and Hermione and Blaise and Pansy. Their all trying to care for them in their own way even if Harry and Draco are like 'yea just get the fuck out so we can fuck'. I would be worried if I was Blaise to in all honesty. Watching the crazy up and downs Draco's been going through and then finding out what Harry is - he's a good friend for worrying and trying to help.

- that last chapter left me feeling so warm and fuzzy and hot and bothered. Harry writing on Draco was just perfect on so many levels. And yay their finally together!!!! That was so wonderful even if Draco knows in the back of his mind that it's most likely all going to fall to shit and leave him broken. I'm proud of him for standing up for himself and for Harry. I like wild Draco, I think that boy had to have some seriously restrained passion simmering in his veins and I love seeing it get let out.

Can't wait for more! Here's to hoping for Harry coming back whole and intact - NOT crazy human eater or dead - Draco declining his marriage, and him finally being able to SEE Harry and they way he looks at him (though you get some crazy props for writing such good smut between Draco and invisible Harry).

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From Tesgura on July 20, 2015
OMG that chapter ending was so beautiful! And Draco standing up for himself to Blaise, wow!
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From ANON - starr on July 20, 2015
so hot !!!! and I still can't believe that they all want Harry dead !!!!!! REALLY !!!!!!!
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From ANON - Emma on July 20, 2015
Hi! Love love love the story!!! Update soon!!!!! ;)
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From BAFan on July 18, 2015
Ch. 11

Wow, great chapter! How ironic that it's Draco and Snape who are fighting for Harry's life. Methinks Dumbledore and Harry are way too accustomed to the idea of self-sacrifice being the way to solve everything!

"'You ass, its to keep you from hurting more!'
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From Tommy-Lane on July 18, 2015
Chapters 3-5

Wonderful, truly wonderful - I love where your going with this. You can't help but feel for Draco and the crazy whirlwind of emotions he's going through and it's just so Harry that he can't help but stay away from him even with seeing how it's tormenting him. And now Draco has to play mediator as they try to figure out whats going on and good lord the poor boys nerves aren't going to be able to take it especially if Harry keeps attacking him (which is so creative and sexy and I can't wait until he manages to get through Draco's denial ). Its so interesting that Draco has been able to sense creatures from other dimensions his whole life - that added tidbit adds so much depth to all the crazy shit that's going on.

Love that Harry's friends are looking after Draco.

Can't wait to hunker down and read more!
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From BAFan on July 18, 2015
Ch. 10

I'm really feeling sorry for Draco and resigned annoyance at Harry, who is being his typical, sometimes stupidly stubborn, noble self. If he really wants to save Draco from being hurt by him, then he needs to just bite the bullet and leave, committing himself to an equally noble and stupid suicide. Which is exactly what I'm afraid I will find in the next chapter. :-(

"This feeling now, without Harry, was certainly more dead then before Draco had woken that morning many months ago. . . ."

Should be "more dead THAN before."
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From BAFan on July 18, 2015
Ch. 9 (again)

Since you gave permission: *g*

"'But she is my mother. That deranged, manipulative, self-serving woman that would rather I follow into jail than be happy and do things I feel are right, is my flesh and blood.. . .'"

Follow whom into jail? Lucius, I assume?

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From Tommy-Lane on July 16, 2015
Okay so apparently I couldn't resist...the kitchen shall remain a mess but fuck was the second chapter amazing! I just, don't even know what to say - how in the world did you manage to write something so sad and sweet and longing and sexy as hell and not to mention damn creative?!

"Harry's appearance on this plane was more an absence of. He was still, dark, and the color around him faded as if he were stealing it away. This was also where he could see the cracks forming, gold light dazzling out of his skin as his form slowly broke apart. Harry quickly switched back to the first plane, not wanting to see himself anymore
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From Tommy-Lane on July 16, 2015
So I've only had time to read the first chapter (grrr) but I'm loving it all ready. What an intriguing premises! Loved that taking Voldemort down was such an isolated event - very reminiscent of the evil dudes first down fall, killing Harry's adoptive parents and then finding himself wiped from existence when he tried to kill Harry. One thing I've always loved about Harry is how he can feel sorrow and find forgiveness for the people in his life who have treated him like crap. Him feeling guilty over the Dursley's death was a great little reminder of that side of him :)

Harry's "death" has seemed to driven Draco a bit batty and I was so intrigued by the new dynamics of everyone at Hogwarts. I can't wait to see what's going on and how Draco's going to react to Harry being stuck in a different dimension with him being the only one who can see(I'm assuming he'll be able to anyway) and feel him. Can't wait to read more!
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From ANON - starr on July 16, 2015
ok after this last chapter , the only ones I like are Snape and Draco...they want harry back cause Dubblefuck and that other one are scared of Harry now...Do they really think that Harry will become another dark lord ??????? what dumb fucks they are so Harry can kill Vol. but now that he needs help they really don't want to help//// well that does sums up what humans are wright so selfish ... Thanks for the update and hope to see more soon :):):):):):) you have me so hooked !!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - dedicated_reader on July 15, 2015
Please keep writing, please keep writing! I devoured this story, please keep going!
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