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Reviews for After the war

By : absinthe34
  • From ANON - Donavon on January 02, 2007
    Hi...Brilliant new chapter, thoroughly enjoyed. Congratulations at the wonderful kiss
    sequence, timed perfectly.

    One tiny thing, just watch, the text doesn't matter.

    "Severus I just want you to help me, by being my first...Severus speak to me." Harry pleaded.
    "What are you on about...boy I am to old to be your first, *God knows I would crave for you firsting." These two conversations are to much scunched together...

    Good, but better with more spaces inbetween. I do not know what format you post in, but, it tends to end up very tight together, so if your posting is just posting like this, just leave two states between a sentence or other conversations. Just like these....

    "Severus I just want you to help me, by being my first...Severus speak to me," Harry Pleaded.

    "What are you talking about?...Boy I am to old to be your first!" Severus said and then thought, *Merlin knows I would crave to be your firsting.*


    However, just keep writing, I will willingly readjust the story within my head

    Just love the story, Blessings of Heath and Happiness for the New year. Donavon.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 02, 2007
    cant wait for more!!!!!!!! I know its a sucky review but i dont have a lot of time ill do better next time
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  • From ANON - Donavon on December 30, 2006
    It's a very good story, but, the chapters need to be longer.

    However, I have managed to read the whole posted chapters, and
    they are very good.

    You asked a question in the previous chapter, what should happen
    to Fudge? Well I certainly don't think Severus should feed from
    him, it would give him severe stomach ache. I think you should
    follow Ninian's path, entomb him, to living hell.

    Unfortunately it is not my story, think of your own demise.

    Looking forward to a longer update. Best wishes,

    Donavon.
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  • From ANON - Byrdie on December 25, 2006
    Oh please, do *not* put Fudge on the menu! :shudder: That would give poor Sev indigestion or a really bad case of food poisoning. Even a starving vampire would have second -- and maybe even third and fourth -- thoughts about feeding off that nasty little toad. Ick! I'm quite sure Snape has much better taste. ;-)

    Looking forward to next chapter. Happy Holidays!
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  • From ANON - l'etje on December 25, 2006
    keep going and merry christmas
    bye bye
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  • From ANON - Sophia on December 25, 2006
    Yay! Fudge is dinner for someone, lol. An excellent chapter! Albus sure thought of everything (I hope).
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  • From ANON - l'etje on December 19, 2006
    very very very good kep going and post soon
    bye bye
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  • From ANON - Sophia on December 18, 2006
    An excellent chapter! I can't wait to see what they find in Dumbledore's office. Merry Christmas if you don't update between now and then!!
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  • From ANON - QueenNilya on December 16, 2006
    Great Story! Can't wait for more.....are you going to be making Harry Sev's "mate" or will they just bond from the greif of losing everyone they loved???
    Add me to your mailing list PLEASE!!!

    nilyaviewen@hotmail.com
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  • From ANON - Crimson death on December 14, 2006
    ummm email me when you update please my addy is xeclipsex@gmail.com
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  • From ANON - Ashley on December 11, 2006
    I hope whoever is in the school is friendly. i dont think snakes can hiss in english but, hey its your story if you say the snake can talk it can talk. I still love this story. I cant wait for the next chapter I hope they get to finnish their Kiss!
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  • From ANON - cdkobasiuk on December 11, 2006
    Such a tease.

    cdk
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  • From ANON - Sophia on December 11, 2006
    A marvelous chapter! I like how the two of them interact; I really liked the part when Severus learned how Harry knew he was a vampire. Keep up the great work! I'd love to be on the mailing list!!~Sophia (sophia_lerone@yahoo.com)
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  • From ANON - Ashley on December 10, 2006
    I love it you should keep updating I love that harry and sev were thrown together like that.
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  • From ANON - Angel on December 08, 2006
    Like I said before... I really don't like the dark ones, I definently don't like Snape as a vampire and the last straw should be the crying but because of the way you describe it I'm sold. I'll continue reading it but I do hope it will get a slightly happy ending atleast :P *huggles*
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