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By : TomFeltonIsKindaHot
  • From ANON - Jenn on January 10, 2007
    Hahahahahahahaha! I'm still giggling from that chapter because of all your digs at the cliches. The internal monologue summed up most D/H stories I've read, and while I have nothing against them, it's always awesome to watch a good writer pick at the motifs. It's like watching Mel Brooks poke at classics like Frankenstein and Dracula. I enjoy the original (cliched or not) and adore the parody.

    I think your characterization is impeccable. You nailed Hermione's slight OCD with her scrutiny of Draco and the questions buzzing in her brain (well, her OCD and any normal girl thrown off balance by a cute boy). I'm a huge fan of SnowflakeImp and your story feels like the D/H hers could have been in 7th year. Speaking of could have been, you missed a cliche - what happened to the war? :)

    My only negative is this - Draco seems almost too calm. Granted, there has been no external characters other than a brief mention of Ron in this last chapter. Fan writers always go against canon (yay!), but there are times where your Draco is too perfect in his smirky arrogance.

    By the way, awesome technique turning a lame cliche into a giggle-inducing question: "How can a smirk make a sound?" This internal monologue has me craving more!

    (Yeah, I'm a 23-year old high school English teacher. I need my fic fix, but I do apologize for the lengthy reviews if you ever tire of them. :))
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  • From ANON - grace on January 10, 2007
    oh my god. this was sooo good...
    Ive never actually blushed reading a non-smutty fan fiction before..
    please please continue! You are good at building suspense!
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 09, 2007
    i love it, so update soon, and make the story as longs as you what.
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  • From ANON - livelifelovehgdm on January 09, 2007
    I loved it so you better update! This is your 17th review! That is really impressive for one chapter!
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  • From ANON - Christina on January 09, 2007
    Love it.. keep going please?
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  • From ANON - Kara on January 09, 2007
    Please, please do another chapter! That was perfect!
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  • From ANON - Cassandra on January 09, 2007
    Yes! for once the hermione/draco relationship has been written as I would preceive it. Less negative bashing and all. Great word choice, content of grammer and over all story flow. Please post more chapters soon!

    chow
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  • From ANON - SnowFlakeImp on January 09, 2007
    Hello dear! Great beginning =) I think your Draco is so cute - just enough snark without being too much of a prat or a wussy boy. I also really, really like how you seamlessly convey how they're familiar with each other (their regular table, him waiting for her to catch up, etc). Bravo! I'm constantly battling with the english language to also convey Draco and Hermione's closeness-yet-not-closeness but you've managed to do that all in one chapter!! I am envious. Keep up the good work and i can't wait to see where you take this.
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  • From ANON - Cara Morte on January 09, 2007
    Please dear, continue...
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  • From ANON - Anathema on January 09, 2007
    Very nice! It's interesting to see the 'contrasts' through Draco's eyes. What would he think, I wonder, if Hermione were to expound her own theories about their differences? Hhhhmmmm....


    Excellent start m'dear! Keep up the good work and update soon! ^__^
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  • From ANON - alicia on January 09, 2007
    oohhh very nice cliffy there cant wait for more keep it up
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  • From ANON - Alice on January 09, 2007
    :3 So good! I love it. UPDATE asap!
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  • From ANON - ^.^Cat on January 09, 2007
    Oh I like this so far! The dialogue is very fitting to D/Hr. Can't wait to see what Hermione does with this new piece of information. ^.^Cat
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  • From ANON - n on January 09, 2007
    i like it! write more!!! there is this sarcastic kind of humour going on that i absolutely love in any D/Hr interaction... Hermione started off a little weak at first, but I enjoyed her later retorts :) in my own humble opinion, try to keep her in character when you write the next chapter... and i hope it is written soon :)
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  • From ANON - Petalsoft on January 08, 2007
    Very nice beginning. Please continue...
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