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By : KarenaEliz
  • From ANON - Alia on June 03, 2003
    This is a wonderful story! Keep up the good work. I also have to say I'm amused by all the references to "Alia" your Beta tester. I've never met another Alia and I don't often see my name in print like that ;-)
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  • From ANON - Alia on June 03, 2003
    Honey, unfortunately. I have to flame you!!! I was reading over the chapter and I found the same mistakes that I pointed out when I beta-ed it! Did you upload the wrong one? You realize that I didn't change anything in the text, I just put mangeanges in the comment boxes, just in case you didn't want to change them or didn't like them. What happened????

    But other than that, you know how I feel about your writing...it's so good it's not fair! Sirius is sooo in love with her! Kinda sad in a way. But sucks for him! HG/SS all the way!!!

    ~Alia
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  • From ANON - Seraphina on June 03, 2003
    Bravo!!! Another great chapter, even if Severus does need a good swift kick in the rump to make him move things along. I'm sad that I have to wait another week for the next chapter *weeps quietly into hankieut iut if it takes them any closer to doing the horizontal mambo, it'll be well worth the wait!! Keep up the good work.

    BTW. Just to let you know Mills and Boon are the UK branch of Harlequin Romance, hope that helps.
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  • From ANON - Amelia on June 03, 2003
    Sweets, you mustn't let one bad review throw you off. Take it from me as a fellow writer, EVERYONE gets them.

    On an entirely seperate note: I was just tickled to hear you'd used my goldfish quote. *chuckles* I'm sure Albus did it justice.

    Someone needs to hit Severus upside his stubborn head. *raises hand and waves it* I volunteer! Can't wait to see next chapter! I'm really enjoying your story.
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  • From ANON - Stacey on June 03, 2003
    Thanks so much! You made me feel soooo special. I can't wait for the next chapter though! The last chapter was awesome. I could imagine what Snape looked like when he heard the conversation between Hermione and Sirius.
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  • From ANON - Greenie on June 02, 2003
    Okay, so this wasn't the best Severus/Hermione I have ever read, mainly because you tend to make typos that wouldn't be picked up by an ordinary MSWord, or other Word Processing program (such as then and than, its and it's, there and they're and their) - your beta really should look to that. I don't mean it as a flame, (if fact, if you need a second opinion I'd be happy to give it a read) but you also need to work a bit on your grammar. Apart from that (which made the story kind of hard to read for me, purely because I am a grammar Nazi) this wasn't half bad. You have a defined wit - especially in the Raven-Mail scene - that actually makes me laugh, you have a feel for both characters (although I'm despising your!Sirius, gr, swanky smarmy bastard that he is) and a nice hand with writing smut (as long as you don't use the words "throbbing manpole" in anything other than a mocking way, you're set for a career in Mills and Boon). However, I find myself wondering about (and wishing for) the ending promised in the fic summary. An ending at the end? Not a one in sight. It irritates, because your teasers, oh how they tease, and your plot is developing nicely - albeit streotypically of most SS/HG fics you can find around the sites these days. I know you'll take a while in uptading, as you mentioned, however keep in mind you're a WiP - I don't usually read those so I'm feeling rather nasty after being cut off abruptly, mid story. To conclude - great story, can't wait for an update (email me?) hope everything went well, and thankyou for making me smile. Alan Rickman all the way *licks lips* ~Greenie
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  • From ANON - l on June 01, 2003
    Excellente'! You bring smooth transitions and good phraseology. Syntax is good-would like to point out the difference in the words then and than. That was THEN~ in relationship to time, or clausal relashipships. Another example: I would rather read your fic THAN write my own. Unless of course it's different in your country, btw, is it?
    Good luck on your project, and keep posting. I have enjoyed reading it thus far. L.Evans
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  • From ANON - Aranel on May 31, 2003
    Please, for the love of God, get them together. I'm dying, here!

    Seriously, though, wonderful as usual. Ct wat wait for the next chapter, yadda yadda, all the same things I always say.

    Aranel
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  • From ANON - Seraphina on May 29, 2003
    Hysterical stuff, I just loved the line "Good evening you complete lush". The preview looks promising as well, I mean dancing means being close and being close means touching and you know where that can lead!!!!!!!! (I fervently hope) Good luck with your show, I hope everything goes well for you.
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  • From ANON - Stacey on May 29, 2003
    Ok I understand about your goals but I would really love to see more. Just whenever you have the time but asap :) . I live for your chapters.
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  • From ANON - QUESTIONMARK** on May 28, 2003
    Hello darling I am QUESTIONMARK**. I was amazed to see that I had not given you a review I swore I had all ready. Well any ways I am really fond of your story to say the least. Very cute and I must say I would like to thank you and snapes flower you 2 made me fall crazy in love with snape!! I also love your writing style it is very good except I didn
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  • From ANON - Amelia on May 28, 2003
    Bravo, again! Another lovely chapter. You're welcome to the goldfish line, I just hope you put it in a story. I look forward to seeing it. Good luck with your project, dearie! We're all eagerly awaiting the next chappie...
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  • From ANON - Grr Arrg on May 28, 2003
    "Good evening you complete lush" hee hee!! I am so gonna use that on my husband! I used to be a barmaid and now I wish I still was so I could be an "angel for the drunken" such a cool title. I am going to Greece tomorow for a weeks (well deserved!) holiday and I just thought wouldn't it be nice to come home to a shiny new chapter of "Still the one" hint hint!! Only joking, it looks like you have a lot on your plate at the moment so I wish you good luck at your show and I hope you make shitloads of money!!
    Grr Arrg

    P.S Thanks for letting us know about a possible delay in posts a lot of authors don't and you are just left with half a story and no idea whats happened.So big *hugs* from me
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  • From ANON - Marianne on May 28, 2003
    hehehehee And no I'm not going to mattress dance with you... lol I almost fell off my chair.. I like the way this story is going so far.. please keep up the wonderful story!!!
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  • From ANON - Alia on May 27, 2003
    "He wondered idly if they were selling ice cream in hell yet."

    While it's only from the preview, that line is great! It reminds me of another variation I enjoy about hell freezing over from Ruskbytes stories (H/G mostly). Anyway, wonderful chapter. I liked the various lines Hermione was thinking about using. Those were a riot. 2 more chapters!

    Congrats on your buisness! Real life does have to take priority. *groan* One whole week...I hope I can make it! :) Good luck!

    ~Alia
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