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Reviews for Severus Gets His End In

By : Dixie50
  • From LaBibliographe on May 06, 2007
    I really liked your premise which believably gave Snape the upper hand with Narcissa initially. I also enjoyed their increasingly libidinous attraction to each other while you maintained their consistent personalities of lust mixed with cordial dislike. Set up was intriguing and interesting with the bath and bed scenes. Sexy ending. A lovely one-shot all around. Nicely done. And good basic grammar and punctuation, too!

    Only if you're interested:
    "...for Draco and I." Should be "for Draco and me." Split the sentence into two parts and then you can clearly hear which way it should be. "for Draco" and "for me". If you say "for I" it immediately sounds wrong and you then know which is correct. I hope you accept this in the hopeful, helpful spirit it's given. I wouldn't bother saying this to a lesser writer. Your story was a sparkling gem. Thank you!

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  • From FluffyBat on February 17, 2007
    Very good, Dixie! Plenty of oral goodness - yum - and naughtiness as well as a glimpse at the private and scheming thoughts of both characters; I love that concept. I imagine Severus would indeed demand repayment of the Vow just like this and Narcissa's initial reaction would be exactly as you described it!
    Oh, and in case you were wondering, you know me as Fluffy from SWARF!
    Well done, and I hope to read more of your work... very soon.
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