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Reviews for The broken, The unwanted, and The Inhuman.

By : ProfessorSibly
  • From ANON - snarrylover on March 24, 2007
    sweet chapter. i cant wait for more. but one suggestion, though; you need a beta since you're mixing your tenses and messing up grammar/spelling.

    cheer!
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  • From Selera on March 24, 2007
    nice chapter a little confusing with how you suddenly went into 1st person with both of them but still good.
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  • From Darkless on March 24, 2007
    I will read and review...I will read and review...I will-- *blink* --Huh? where am I? *looks around* Oh...well, since I'm here.

    I'm really enjoying this. I've read several HPDM creature fics, some more dark than others, but I find myself laughing over Draco's arrogance and Harry's fuming. Oh, my...Draco thinks he's "conquered all" and he's probably in for a bad shock once Harry comes back to his senses. Poor Mr. Veela is gonna get hexed (or beaten) into next week. LOL

    Keep up the good work!
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  • From cameowitch on March 23, 2007
    Professor, it's a good story but it needs a little help, with spelling especially on words from canon. There is an excellent site to use if you want to this story to soar higher. I'd also like to suggest you find a beta to help. If you would email me, I'll be happy to give you the website to help with canon. I'd offer to help with the rest, but I'm not a beta, just a critical test reader.

    I really do look forward to reading more. I hope my suggestions don't put you off writing. You have a style there that works. Keep going, just double check things, as an example, the Tractile Tarts was one of the things that "jumped up and slapped me". It should have been Treacle Tarts. It's things like this that will cause flamers and hurt feelings and with a little extra work, it's avoidable and then a good story can be enjoyed by all the readers.

    Like I said, keep writing, I want to read more of the story.
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  • From NightLo on March 23, 2007
    ...I would doubt the perception of being perfect moment...Harry has moral, and we know about it...

    Now I believe Harry needs to learn more about veela and male...or even hormones...
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  • From mnfmplom2 on March 23, 2007
    Professor, that last chapter was great. You took me there! Please update soon.
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  • From Ruffner on March 23, 2007
    harry is going to wake up and Kill Draco. yep, kill him. there's no way harry will not wake up and not comit some type of bodily harm against Draco and draco doesn't really get it that he kinda over stepped his place and bounderies. please update soon! loved it!
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 22, 2007
    ok guys kiss and make up.
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  • From NightLo on March 22, 2007
    Hohoho~~~~ a little bit difficulty and challenge makes the outcome and reward more tasteful...use all your magic, charm, power and beauty to woo Harry, Draco - and to start with, showing passion and care is a good idea!
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  • From ANON - Kasey on March 20, 2007
    Harrys in so much shit right now it's hillarious! I love this story so much it ingenious!
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  • From Aalto on March 19, 2007
    Honestly, you need a beta! A good idea for a story, but you seriosly need a good beta!
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  • From ANON - Storm on March 19, 2007
    So cute. I love the little thoughts at the ends of the chapters. Can't wait for more! Keep up the great work.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 18, 2007
    Look forward to reading some more.
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  • From NightLo on March 18, 2007
    Haha...this is really sad for all those sense/smell-driven magical creature! If it is ture that Draco's mate smell like that tart...that would definitely be an advantage to Harry...pls update soon!
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  • From ANON - Shado on March 18, 2007
    I haven't had a chance to read much of this story, but from what I've managed, it looks like it's gonna be awesome. Please keep it up. Also if you still need a Beta, please consider this my request for that position.
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