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Reviews for The Inadequate Life

By : metafrantic
  • From Pegleg-TinStar on August 27, 2020

    Metafrantic - thanks for a well crafted AU story about how the War against Voldemort could have ended.  Tons of creativity, with a generous helping of the 'spice' that makes life worth living thrown in.  The editing was generally better than many stories on this site (nobody is perfect), which made the series very readable.  There was a point where I thought the various plots and subplots were getting a little to complicated to successfully pull together at the end, but you did it without leaving any major holes.

    I've said in other reviews of other stories, that one of the most difficult things to do is to write compelling and natural sounding dialogue.  There were plenty of places where the conversations were a little stilted and unnatural sounding, but many more where it worked very well.  Good on ya!

    When it comes to the 'spice of life' (SEX), that is also difficult to write about convincingly.  One thing to be avoided is becoming to repetitious when describing various acts, even if there are only so many ways and combinations that one (or more) can do them.  It's hard to keep things sounding fresh, exciting, and exhilarating when you use the same language again and again.  Something to look at and consider if and when you ever review your own work.

    That all said, a thoroughly enjoyable read.

     


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  • From ANON - Anon on July 23, 2007
    I must say that you gave your story an ending more worthy than The deathly hallows.
    it's been a fantastic story and I'm glad you ended it just as well.
    Well, I do not know what else to say now.. Good luck with your life.. I hope you write a lot more stories..

    I'm looking forward to them.
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  • From NutsAboutHarry on July 20, 2007
    That's brilliant! And I shall kill you if any of what was in your story is in the Deathly Hallows.....LOL. Well done fine effort!
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  • From kodiac on July 20, 2007
    that was a great story will ther be more
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  • From Artfuldodger on July 20, 2007
    BRAVO!!!!! very well done......i LOVED it!!!!! it had a good ending....i look forward to your future stories.
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  • From MrGalion on July 19, 2007
    truely astonding i wanted to reread it and it is awsome.
    I will and have told friends about you and liked this story so much.
    No matter what the 7th book says I will continue to recomend your stories and I will continue to read them.
    Your stories are what makes it all worth while. Thank you for your awsome perserverence and wonderful writting skills to produce truely remarkible peice of art and tale.

    MR. GALWYRD GALION
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  • From Mellowcorks on July 19, 2007
    I've been reading for awhile, and I've refrained from reviewing, but I have to speak up now.

    You, my friend, have created a wonderful piece of fanfiction. I found it while trying to find some well-written smut, and you know, you delivered that as well. The sexy bits were nicely done, if gratuitous, but really, they didn't detract from the whole of the plot, which was done amazingly. I salute you, and sincerely hope that you keep writing.
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  • From Geddian on July 18, 2007
    An end to a great fic. If the canon end isn't this awesome, I say we hijack the printers and print this one as fact xD I wish I could write this well, and congratulations on achieving true writing mastery :p I'll probably re-read this whole story a dozen times.
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  • From Muggleman on July 18, 2007
    BRAVO!!! This has been a wonderful series to read and if it wasent for the adult scenes(sex scenes) I would swear it was the 7th book it self but hey thats why its Adultfanfiction. I am glad that most members of the DA where able to come out of it alive. I did not see the thing with the Minister at all coming. I kinda wish we actually got to see(read) Ron fighting the 3 Death Eaters and I wish we got to see Ginny and everyone else get healed up. Perhaps a where are they now 10 years later story coming up in the near future? This whole series made me laugh, tear up a bit, and keep me on the edge of my seat through out. I am also glad you were able to get it out before the actual book seven trying to read both stories would have been confusing.

    One of the greatest fictions I have ever had the pleasure of reading good job BRAVO BRAVO wonderful work!!! Keep writing other fictions I will make sure to read them with high hopes
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  • From LilyLady on July 18, 2007
    Oh. My. God. That. Was. AMAZING! That was...profound, and incredibly smart, and...incredible. I can't find words. You have done a truly amazing job with this story and I feel privileged to have read it. Though I think that in J.K. Rowling's version we stand to lose a lot more meaningful people than we did in yours (unfortunately), you did a truly wonderful job in depicting ideas of the final battle and putting it all together. Although it wasn't QUITE as emotional as I am anticipating that Saturday will be, it was still very emotional, very moving, and very wonderful. Though I do have to wonder...in your plans...does Ginny ever get her sight back? Do you, by any chance, plan on writing more in this universe? (I'd wholeheartedly support you if you did, because this was INCREDIBLE). Great job. I'm truly impressed :)
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  • From Olwen on July 18, 2007
    Love it!!! Great quote too. I've been wondering at the title choice. I'm almost dreading JK's version now because this was so satisfying.
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  • From WilliamSpike on July 18, 2007
    A masterpiece. You can't see me, but I'm giving you a standing ovation. Excellent command, coordination and control. I've read a million pages of Buffy fic, and a half-million of HP, and this is the best I've ever read. Congratulations; the only problem is that it's not original. If you could write something original of this quality, it would have to be totally publishable. Thanks for your incredible work, and that of your beta. I look forward to your next story.
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  • From EnFuego30 on July 18, 2007
    Bloody Brilliant! Thank you for finishing before Deathly Hallows--I don't think I could've taken the stress. A masterpiece of HP fanfiction! I do hope you plan on writing a quick follow-up story that closes a few hanging plotlines (e.g. Ginny). Thanks for a great ride!
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  • From Jayen on July 18, 2007
    NOOOOOOOOO!!!! It can't be over!!! It was soooo good I don't want it to end!!!

    Come on, you didn't even have Fawkes try to heal Ginny's eyes or Ron's foot. We need more story.


    I've not reviewed this story series before but, honestly, I loved it! I hope JKR does half as well with HER ending as you've done. I'm really sad to see your's end. Her's, well, I think I'm ready for it to end. I have my theories about how she'll end it, only a few more days to go til I find out how wrong (or right) I am. I think your's, though, is the one I'm more likely to come back and read again and again.
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  • From doorock42 on July 18, 2007
    An absolutely splendid series of stories worthy of publication as the seventh book. One of the five best pieces of fan fiction I have ever been privileged to read.

    I was kind of hoping for a little denouement at the end, but for all I know that is still in the offing.

    Once again, bravo. I cannot think of high enough praise to tell you how wonderful the seventh year was, and I only hope that the real thing is even half as good.
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